"Midnight is often looked upon in a strange manner. Some look upon him with amazement, others fear. Locked away deep within Midnight is a darkness, darker than anything anyone could ever have imagined. Midnight spent a great portion of his early youth locking away this darkness, this evil with in." Can he overcome his past? Can he control his magic? Read on to find out.
Page generated in 0.076 seconds
Total duration
1,072 users online
1,482,677 hits today, 1,870,739 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Awesome story, and Zeph is a great guy to work with. We are starting on chapter 2 soon!
476949
Thanks, you're great to work with too.
Fabulous. Just fabulous. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
477055
Thank you.
477055
Thank you, from me as well.
Final episode is coming soon, so I'll make this short and try to give a better review later. First, the paragraphs are a tad lengthy, you should try to shorten them a bit. More importantly, you should always make a new paragraph for dialogue, it will get confusing otherwise; two separate people/ponies should never speak in the same paragraph. As for spelling and grammar, nothing bad really stands out, so it is good in that respect. As for story, it is only the first chapter so I can't give a positive or a negative. Again, I'll try to do better later.
Cant wait for more, plz give us more
478509
Thanks for your help. Me and Tirey will put it to good use.
478509
Thanks for your input. This is my first fanfic. All my prior writing experience is in non-fiction, such as journalism.
478590
Well...since you asked so nicely. ;)
479203
Going to read this later.
I bet it'll be good.
478509
We have fixed all the problems that you mentioned. Any besides that?
481313 It is looking much better! Again, it is hard to accurately judge the story given the information, but that's just because it's the first chapter. I am going to sleep soon, so my head is a little fuzzy. I'll try to give better pointers tomorrow, but the dialogue fix was a huge improvement. Keep up the good work!
481343 Thank you sir. Your input is very valuable, as this is my first fan fic. I hope to have the next chapter ready by the end of the week. No promises though, have to balance work with writing.
Good story hope to see more to come soon.
491347
I am working hard on the next chapter. However due to the fact that I work full time, I don't have a lot of time to write. I hope to have the next two chapters out soon.
when is the next chapter coming out ?
515021
With in the next few days. I apologize for being so slow to release another chapter. I work full time as a recording artist, so sometimes my writing time is limited to nonexistent.
525355Thanks
Nice :)
530104
Thanks