I'm sorry..... I'm so sorry......

by Novalis14

7 years later

Author's Note:

Added for the word minimum. Hope it isn't to bad.

Seven year old Tempest sat in her room on board the TARDIS, she flipped through a scrap book. The pages were filled with pictures of her and her father, dancing at the first grand galloping gala, throwing water balloons off the top of the Eiffel tower in 1820, eating muffins growing off of bushes.

She smiled before adding a picture of the two of them in front of the TARDIS control panel, while her father taught her how to fly it. She had landed just outside of Baltimare, the only thing wrong with her first flight was that she had been aiming for canterlot. It was close enough.

She closed the book and placed it on her shelf before exiting her room. Her father had said that they were headed to a cozy restaurant in Manehaten for dinner.

As she entered the control room she was greeted by the sound of a phonograph and the sight of her father sitting in his chair.

The doctor looked up from his book at the sound of his daughter’s hoof steps. “There you are tempest. You ready to go?” He grinned at her with his cheeky smile.

The restaurant was cozy just as her father described, only a few families sat at tables around them. The menu was almost too big for tempest to hold, causing her to struggle while trying to seem grown up. The Doctor smiled at her, she was so much like her mother.

The door at the front of the restaurant opened and two mares and two stallions walked in. They took a seat a near the front, the doctor glanced down to check that his daughter was still reading before moving his attention towards the new group.

“I’m glad we finally managed to get here, mom has been making such a fuss over the
‘quality of establishments’ we should visit. Really does having a title mean you can’t pick up a hayburger? What do you think ditzy?”

The gray mare looked up at her siblings and nodded with a smile. The doctor’s hearts ached a little to see her again. He would never understand why he kept doing this when it caused him so much pain. “Hey daddy, do you think I should get the lasagna or the salad?” Tempest said snapping him out of his thoughts.

“Why not get the banana split?” as tempest giggled the doctor smiled. “You would be so proud of her Ditzy”

Comments

[Sagebrush Fire]

Opinion: I am not a fan of sad stories but I won't let that get in the way of a good review. The story has a plot, and not much else. It has no plot twists of any kind but this is expected as it is a short letter more then story. Either way it is nothing you will cry over but is heartwarming nonetheless.
Score: 5/10
Summary: A letter written to sadden you and make you feel. It is successful to an extent.

As always I hope my review was helpful and I thank you for reading it. Please do not take anything I say personally.

[That Naga Pone]

Love your stories javascript:smilie('');

[fredsite]

You have at the very least garnered another thumb up from me.

[Novalis14]

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Thank you

[Novalis14]

4817451
Yeah it isn't my best work

[Novalis14]

4817332

Really?

[Eveyann]

OMG I LOVE THIS FAN FIC I was sad at the first chapter and smile at the second beautiful and simple , you can't mark a story down because it short, simple or not your taste and I love the last line

You would be so proud of her Ditzy

Beautiful perhaps the only problems and that I have seen similar plot before and You called Derpy, Ditzy ( Yes I'm that person who resort to prefrences because the nothing bad to say)
Score: 8.5/10

[starship55]

so the doctor takes tempest to a restaurant at a specific time, so he can see ditsy again, but he cant interfere with the time line, so he cant go up and say hello to ditsy. it hurts to see her again, but does tempest know the timeline situation, or that she is seeing her mother at a different time, but cant reveal who she really is? or doesn't she know the situation.

[Novalis14]

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She doesn't know. She knows who her mother is but the doctor is always careful to choose places where Ditzy is in the background so that Tempest wont notice her. However if Tempest did notice her she is far enough in her timelord education to know not to interact with her.

[Phoenix Nebula]

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[Novalis14]

6640480
Aw thanks.

[Phoenix Nebula]

6641742 I would love to see a sequel of this.

[Novalis14]

6642181
What about?

[Phoenix Nebula]

6643235

The doctor and his daughter as they travel the universe. I was also wondering if she can regenerate like her father?

[Novalis14]

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She can heal herself with regeneration energy but she can't fully change. I might just write a sequel if I can find the time and inspiration.

[Phoenix Nebula]

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I'll be looking forward to reading it if you get the chance to write it.

[Novalis14]

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Thank you

[Yoshifan30]

Aww thus was a nice short story and also sad and I'm sure the doctor will keep Derby's memory alive