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Kaf_Kraked_Poni


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Time Turner is new in town. Moving to Ponyville was supposed to be an escape for him, a recharge of sorts. A few days after arriving, however, he meets with Ponyville's bubbly mailmare, Ditzy Doo. Over time, the two become more inclined to share their lives with each other, and Ditzy begins to feel there may be something beyond platonic friendship at work.

Having expressed that he already has a lover though, Ditzy is put off; that is, until a certain letter arrives...


Thanks again, those hard workers of Twi's Library!
[img]http://i.imgur.com/6MrWqNZ.png[/img]

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 67 )

This is the only shipping I like time lord or not. I'll be watching this.

officially open so-”

:raritycry:
You are making the poor little hyphen sad! It shouldn't be forced to do what only an em dash can do!

Regardless, I love this already.

Like, way too much.

Also this:

Timey Wimey

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It's out!

3970356
Well Thanks! That means a lot!

3970556
Cool, thanks for the tip. I never did understand en and em dashes, and docs can't differentiate between them. So, I'll try and fix that.
Also, glad you got those references :raritywink:

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You can place them in Gdocs by going into "Inserts" then "Special Characters" then "Punctuation" then "Dashes". Quite the useful punctuation mark if you research it. :raritywink:

“2003… 2004… Oh, 2005! This is the place!”

:rainbowlaugh:

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Thanks! I'm working on the next one as we speak

“Time Turner, thats—”

Go, you awesome em dash, go! Just don't forget that apostrophe. :raritywink:

Anyways.
*Nods sagely*
I approve of this.

3973919 That was clever, making his address the date the reboot started.

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I've recently gotten into Dr. Who, and I'm trying to incorporate the references to attract those readers that are dissatisfied with this being a regular pony, and not the Doctor himself. :derpytongue2:

The cookie approves.

Actually that was cute! I like the story and I hope to see more chapters soon! :twilightsmile:

im loving it already but now i want more!

im loving it already but now i want more!

Can you pwease hurry up a bit with the next chapter? :fluttershysad:

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Don't worry, we're almost there. I'm trying to make these as good as possible:twilightsmile:

Waiting here for my promised update still! :pinkiecrazy:

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What if I told you that I was editing it, right now?

Frikken finally. Now, to read. Oh, and nice cover art; I like it.

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Yeah, it's only been like 5 weeks :rainbowwild:

I’ll bake em fresh,

*I’ll bake 'em fresh,
You are omitting letters. Hence, apostrophe.

“It’s a pleasure to meet you, Miss Rarity?”

Is this a question mark because he wasn't formally introduced?

Ooh he has such nice manners,

*Ooh, he has such nice manners,

“I do, actually.” he replied, lifting his head now.

*“I do, actually,” he replied, lifting his head.
"Now" is unnecessary, and comma is correct.

your partner—That is

*your partner—that is

tomo—Today?!

*tomo—today?!

Another thing, I don't remember if this was in previous chapters as well, but you have a rather noticeable case of Lavender Unicorn Syndrome. Might want to read up a bit on that; or, if you wish, you can send me a PM and I'll give you some pointers as to how and when to use descriptors.

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That aside, great chapter. I am pleased.

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Corrections are welcomed, as always :twilightsmile:

If you keep doing this, it'll become a habit of mine to just wait for you to point them out.

To answer your question, yes, I have been using LUS throughout. I understand it's an eye-sore for many, but I am fully aware of using it, namely because I have a insecurity about simply using "he" or "she" and repeating character names. I always fear that the reader will be unable to identify my identifier if I don't add a little "color" to them. (that was a bad joke, I'm sorry...)

But that's how I write. I realize it's wrong in many cases, but it's just a habit of mine. Not one I like, mind you, but it is there. No one's taken the time to point it out though, so it never occurred to me as being a problem. Thanks for stepping forward.

Excellent chapter, :raritywink:
Coincidentally, my computer started playing this while I was reading, :ajsmug:

Finally! :ajbemused: You did a wonderful job, as always. :twilightsmile::raritywink:

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The chapters will be updated more frequently from now on.

4148907 Never promise stuff like that! It always fires back in your face. :twilightsheepish:

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Believe it or not, it actually gets irritating. "He" and "she" (along with other words like "said") are almost invisible when reading a story. Every time you use a descriptor, you slow down the reader and take away from other, more important words of the story--words that are not restating something already known. Ditzy = pegasus (known fact, not necessary), Doctor = earth pony (known fact, not necessary); why do you keep telling me things I already know?

That's not to say that you can't use them in certain instances, but for the majority of the time, one should keep away from it.

You know . . . you could just let me catch them before the chapter goes up. . . . :raritywink:

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Thanks for the tip.

Also, I think I may do that from now on. :ajsmug:
You sneaky :rainbowkiss:
gettin to see the chapters before everyone else now.

4149143
Hmm... you're right...

nevermind. You'll get the next chapter in like... 3 years or whenever I want to upload it :rainbowwild:

4151899 Oh wait I didn't mean it like that! :pinkiegasp:

Time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time time, time time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time, time....That's what these chapter titles will be about, time.

4151899

You'll get the next chapter in like... 3 years or whenever

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Heeeeey.... Buddy..... :twilightblush:


So.... wanna check out the latest chapter? Please? :fluttershyouch:

What did he write Ditzy? WHAT DID HE WRITE?:flutterrage:

“Well, I guess without delving too far into details, she’s informed me that she’s yet to make a decision…”

I have never facehoofed so hard :facehoof:

I've already thought of at least 10 ways out of this

“Okay, I’m no doctor..."

I :rainbowlaugh:'d

NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Don't Derpy. Don't become this possessive mare. Have standards and morals. Please!!! Good chapter by the way.

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'Course you just had to finish the chapter during the single week I wasn't online. :ajbemused:

I'll give it a read later.

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