Twilight and her friends are summoned to Canterlot by princess Celestia.
In order to save Equestria from a potentially catastrophic disaster, the princess sends her favorite student and her friends on a quest in to a war torn world in the warhammer 40k universe to find a magical staff which holds great power. With this, she hopes to safeguard their home.
Twilight and her friends make some new allies on the way.
However, evil forces are gathering, and they may need all the help they can get.
This is my first fanfic, and I hope this doesn't disappoint.
Chapters (9)
Nice to know my first attempt at writing a crossover fanfic is being well received.
Obviously, someone has never heard of the term "gopher".
Meaning 'Go For'.
I altered the description to include what this is a crossover of, as this was a simple mistake on my part.
Not sure whether I even want to continue with this story on here now.
May just finish it for myself unless I receive more positive votes.
Obviously, I'm new to writing on here.
>pones in wh40k
>rekd in 0,06 seconds from their arrival
Also, The mission stays the same by Ursakar.
Okay, this one's for 'The Commander'
Obviously you didn't read the whole story.
The Berzerker is caught a little off-guard by what he's seen. Lyra's shot hits the clip on the bolt pistol, which makes the rounds explode. This stuns the marine for a moment. Twilight uses her magic to move Lyra back so she doesn't get hit by the axe.
As the berzerker issues his cry, he is hit in the head by a sniper round from a tower overlooking the trenches.
Besides, do you really want to see our ponies hacked to bits by a crazed super human warrior?
Okay, formatting.
Basically, you wanted the whole story split up so it was easier to read?
Your version of this however, has resulted in sentences being split up, not just blocks of text.
I can alter this.
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When I look up gopher on the google, all I see is the obvious animal, and then a few other things talking about systems for computers, an internet protocol, and a sports page. But hey, most of the time you gotta head over to the good ol UD. It shows up in the Urban Dictionary, added in... 2005. Seeing as that terminology and slang ages faster than even dog years, I can certainly say that this is antiquated enough that it's not commonly known by the internet populace, despite an identical one being resubbed in 2011. I'd personally recommend something a bit more modern than that for ease of reading and understanding.
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Also I for one would delight in having them hacked to bits by an insane KHORNATE BERZERKER. Because that's what they do and just haivng htme show up and get killed is absolutely useless because we already have proof of them being in the Warhammer 40k uni. Not having them absolutely wrekt by the lelzily OP shits that inhabit that world is just a disservice to anyone reading the fic.
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Okay, altered the 'gopher' text.
Anything else i need to clean up here?
Other than writing a completely new story to appease 'the commander'?
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Yes.
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Yo you don't have to appease me, even though obviously you naturally want to. <3
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Then you shall be disappointed in this story I'm afraid.
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Other than using quotation marks to denote dialogue, creating actual paragraphs for ease of reading, extending the chapters so that they actually have a large amount of meat, making the Warhammer 40K characters believable, and making the sergeant younger than he currently is, no.
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Okay, clearly, to get this right I need to break up the 'wall of text' effect at least.
I'll go over the story shortly and alter it with quotation marks, seeing as this is annoying some people.
As for bulking out the story, I've already done that to some degree. It was almost devoid of descriptions originally.
Vorenze, Maverick, Bateman (who's only in there for the 'dubs' jokes anyway), and Fenrick all lacked any description at all.
Anyone spotted the movie references yet?
The 'Spaceballs' one in part 7 is pretty blatant, but as soon as the idea went through my head I just had to get it in the story, and it came out well too.
Well, I have gone over the story, broken up the 'wall of text', and changed all the quotation marks. Judging by the current voting here, either I've posted at a bad time, or the story just isn't what people here want.
I guess having the ponies go over to the 40k universe instead of ships landing in Equestria (I.E. every single other warhammer 40k crossover fanfic ever written to the best of my knowledge), isn't approved. Or maybe it's just my writing skills, (like I stated, this is my first story. I usually just build and paint models for a hobby).
A little disappointing but I'll try to keep going with this anyway. I have a few more surprises planned yet.
A few more characters are going to make an appearance later, (both 40k and ponies), but I'll keep these quiet for now.
4806736 so this is a crossover of what?
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My little pony and Warhammer 40k.
As stated in the description.
Okay, gone over the story again and tidied a few things up.
Sorting out paragraphs after being awake for 19 hours straight wasn't such a great idea.
Hopefully, this story won't be as painful to read now.
Just updated part 7 with a small section I've been working on.
My real life has been getting in the way of continuing the story at the moment.
Also, I have been tweaking things over the course of the story when I have been looking over it.
Nothing major has been changed, just tried to explain a few things a bit more clearly.
Such as how the guardsmen group have managed to survive.
(A combination of skill, good equipment, being sneaky and sheer dumb luck).
Also tweaked the encounter with the Khorne Berzerker, as some readers didn't realize he'd been killed by the sniper, not the ponies.
One last thing, the story is not going to end with the ponies getting the staff.
Or getting home with the staff.
Part 7 has been updated again. I'm a bit happier with how this one's turning out than some of the earlier chapters, which need work.
Also updated my notes section.
Part 7 has been completed.
I'm much happier with how this one has turned out than some of my earlier chapters.
I may alter those eventually, but for now, I'll just have to see how chapter 8 turns out.
Let's see how those guardsmen cope when they have to face marines head-on....
Part 8 has been started, but is far from finished.
I'll probably come back to this story in the next few days or so and update it.
Just a minor update. Had my hands full with other projects recently, (models for a big game we've got planned), so the story has taken a bit of a back seat at the minute.
Next part of the story should see a bit of action.
I'm thinking about re-naming the story.
'The Mission' is a pretty lame title I think, (and likely many will agree with me there).
The proper name for the staff they've gone to get may work better.
I'm beginning to think I need to state directly what that weapon's origins really are. No one seems to realize who's staff it was unless I tell them.
When you know who owned the staff originally, it also explains why Ahriman wants it so much.
Just a note to say I haven't abandoned this story. Haven't altered anything in the story this time, but I have altered something in the notes.
Small update on chapter 8 tonight.
Still thinking how I want this particular part of the story to go. I know the overall layout in my head, but the finer details are proving problematic.
A mere handful of infantry managing to take down a titan’s voidshields? Twilight managing to throw the rubble fast enough to pierce both the cockpit but also the armour behind it? I call bullshit.
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The firepower used in that particular scene was from the unit's 2 vehicles. (Chimera transport and Sentinel walker)
Game rules- multi laser is strength 6, and has 3 shots.
Warhound's void shields, armour 12, and any glancing or penetrating hit will disable a shield.
So this is actually legit in game.
Las cannon is strength 9 against the unshielded titan's armour of 14. a top dice roll would give you a penetrating hit. Under previous game rules, destroying a weapon was perfectly plausible. New rules have eliminated that opportunity however.
So the Warhound Twilight takes on would have been close to wrecked before she got to it.
As for Twilight's throwing half a building at the (already damaged from the earlier battle) warhound, it was something I wanted to get in the story. If you want to justify her being able to throw it with so much force, the fact she'd panicked at the time may have had something to do with it. There's plenty of stories of people displaying superhuman strength when they panic.
There's also the fact this is a fantasy story crossing Warhammer 40k and My Little Pony. It doesn't matter what I write, someone's going to have complaints.
Short update on the story today.
I've started writing bits again, since I started drawing the story as a comic strip. Currently up over on Derpiboo.ru.
Not my best artwork for there, but if I get this comic done, it'd make this story truly unique. It'd be the only 40k/My Little Pony crossover story from here that has been done in comic form. (To the best of my knowledge).
Here's a link to the comic, (complete with a better name).
https://www.derpiboo.ru/tags/40kponyguy%27s+the+staff+of+aurelian
That's it, Chapter 8 is finally finished.
And another character I was meaning to get in the story has finally made an appearance.
Back to Equestria for chapter 9.
The ponies may have finished with the 40k universe, but the 40k universe hasn't finished with them yet.
There's a certain rather upset greater daemon of Tzeentch that wants a word.....
What the fuck is this bullshit? A pony taking down a Warhound? A single melta-gun taking down a Warhound? One imperial gaurdsman killing a dreadnought, defiler , and multiple SPESS MEHREENS without being a Kaskrin?
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As someone who's actually lost a Phantom titan to a squad of Tau fire warriors (EMP grenades), a Revenant titan to a single damn lucky hit from a necron warrior with a gauss rifle (3rd ed rules- thank god that got changed!), and more than one Warhound to melta fire, I can say that's legit.
The handful of guard in this story are all that's left of a large battle force. They've survived due to unorthodox tactics and having the best weapons.
Try hitting a space marine with a melta gun and see how likely they are to survive in game.
2+ to wound, no saves.
Against a vehicle, you need to roll 2D6 and add 8 to it to get through the armour (on a Defiler or a dreadnought, that's 12 to beat. 10 if you hit it in the rear, which the character in question (Natalia) probably did.
I did try to explain that the two warhounds the guard face here were already damaged from the earlier battle. And in game, a single point blank melta hit will cause some serious damage to a Warhound with no shields.
A warhound has 9 hull points when intact.
A melta weapon would easily penetrate the rear armour of 12.
On a 5+, this hit would do D3+1 hull points damage. And that titan was already damaged.
Plus when you look at a Warhound titan's ankle joint, some of the workings are pretty flimsy considering how much weight they need to support. Take a chunk out of that and it's going to be unstable.
I guess they were just lucky it didn't blow up right over them.
Finally, those complaining that the veteran guardsmen group are doing too well need to read chapter 8.
On a side note, the comic version of this will be different on this chapter. I'm uploading it to Derpibooru, and if there's no ponies in the image it'll most likely get deleted, ruining the continuation.
Just a notice, I haven't abandoned this story by a long-shot. Currently working on it in comic strip form, uploaded to Derpibooru. Sadly seems to have received a cold reception there so far too, although the first few pages have been more about plot explanation, so were text-heavy and mostly shots of the character's faces.
Hoping for a better response when the action scenes start.
I have deliberately not added chapter 9 here yet because I don't want to spoil the ending for those following the comic, although I know exactly how the story will pan out.
This whole story is bullshit, but it's funny to read if only for the sheer ridiculousness of chaos war hounds being reduced to cannon fodder. Slanesh must be having a field day watching this insanity.
little rough around the edges but nothing a bit of TLC and a editor cant fix might want to use a bit more detail and make the chapter a bit longer though
HOW, void shields don't just fail against a multi laser, it can take tank round and missiles even plasma annihilator rounds and if lucky still survive, but a multilaser ? outta the question