• Published 8th Aug 2014
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Let's Just Say That I Have No Idea on How I Ended Up in Equestria - AnonymousAlicorn249



A human girl and her two Pokemon companions end up in Equestria and must find their way back but are met with hilarious disasters.

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Chapter 3:This is not going so well...

We finally arrived at Ponyville after what seemed to be just minutes of walking,but Snivy and Tepig made it seem like if we were walking for hours.The town was bristling with activity as the townsfolk bought,sold and admired the lively town. As we walked through the town,I saw all those background ponies that I bet fans would love to snuggle up in a cold morning while watching the show. Among the crowd I saw everybody's favorite crossed-eyed pegasus,Derpy, Doctor Who's tenth pony incarnation,Doctor Hooves(or Time Turner)and Lyra Heartstrings in her usual sitting position.

"Wow...just look at all these...what are these called?"asked Snivy.

"Ponies...For the 15th time,they're called ponies..."I replied.

Suddenly,a bright pink pony with a mane and tail similar to my hair whenever I don't brush it on a cold day,hopped around the market stalls saying hello to every pony she came up to.

"Umm...let's keep walking you guys..."I whispered nervously.

"Why,is there something wrong with that pink um...pony?"asked Tepig.

"Come on,I bet she's not THAT bad!"Snivy added,and pushed me up towards Pinkie Pie.

Darn it,Snivy why do you always want me to befriend every single friendly thing I come up to? Well,I can't blame him,after all,he's a pretty unique Snivy after all.He's pretty jolly, clumsy and quite dumb,but he makes a good friend just like his brother Tepig,who was also pushing me towards her until I was face-to-face with the pink pony named Pinkamina Diane Pie.

"Uh...Hi?"I muttered nervously.

Suddenly,she gasped and dashed away.Uh-oh...That only means one thing...and I'm scared.

"What was up with that pony..."asked Tepig.

"Is she crazy or something? Because the way she just stared at you and then gasped kinda creeped me out,"added Snivy.

After staring at my two companions for a while,we continued our way out of Ponyville,and according to my portal homing device on that seemed to be installed on my horn,the portal was somewhere in the Everfree Forest.In the show, the forest is dark ,creepy place full of dangerous creatures but that is nothing compared to what I've been through.(I've been through volcanoes,dangerous stormy cliffs and gigantic frozen chasms where we faced a huge,ice breathing dragon that froze Snivy and Tepig solid and ended up with me having to take the dragon down alone.)

"Alright you guys,we need to scurry through the town and get to that forest in order to get out of here,"I explained.

"Gotcha,"they replied cheerfully,but suddenly Snivy tripped and knocked down a basket of apples.

"Snivy!!!"I shouted angrily.

"Oops...My bad..."muttered Snivy,and I mega faceplamed,due to the fact that Snivy almost always messed up everything.

"Hey,are ya all right little guy?"asked an unknown voice with a western accent.

Oh come on! How come I always end up meeting important characters to every new world I end up in?! It turns out that this basket of apples belonged to no other that Applejack. Great,just great,another pony I didn't want to meet right now.

"Yeah,I really have almost no coordination with my feet,so I stumble most of the time!"replied Snivy cheerfully.

"This guy here was born with two left feet,so he's really clumsy,"added Tepig.

"Let's...get...moving...already!"I muttered to Snivy and Tepig,who were holding a conversation with Applejack.

"Howdy there! I'm Applejack,and are those your friends?"she asked.

"Yeah,these guys are my friends and we need to get moving now! Thank you!"I grumbled and yanked the two distracted Pokemon away.

"It was nice meeting you what-ever-ya-name-is!"called Applejack as I dashed away.

After we finally managed to leave Ponyville,we now started to approach the Everfree Forest,and I felt so relieved to finally be out of Ponyville. After ten minutes of close encounters,distracted Tepigs,and Snivy constantly tripping around,the dark,creepy forest loomed ahead of us.

"Phew! I'm so relived we're out of there!"exclaimed Tepig.

"Really?"I asked sarcastically,"I was literally dragging you away from all that food!"

"Hi there!"exclaimed a pink pony who appeared out of nowhere.

"AAAAAARGH!!"

"Oh dear,um...Pinkie? I think you startled her..."said a soft voice.

I was clinging onto a tree branch several feet in the air,like if Pinkie Pie suddenly popping up and scaring the heck out of someone wouldn't make you jump.

"You're that pony that I saw in town! I bet you remember right? Because I remember you were all like Um...Hi? and I figured out that you were new and that you weren't going to have any friends in Ponyville so that's why I went GASP! And so I brought you my friends so that we all can be friends and then be really happy!!"exclaimed Pinkie Pie as she cheerfully bounced around.

Great,can any of this get worse? I mean seriously?! She brought the whole Mane 6 with her! I was trying not to meet up with any of them but unfortunatly,Snivy and Tepig had to bring me up to Pinkie Pie and now she brought me the other ponies. Seriously,what is worse than that?And as soon as I thought that,the branch that I was holding onto snapped off and I crashed onto the ground. Perfect.

Author's Note:

The chapter title has a double meaning,besides just meaning that Myrrthe's plan on sneaking out of Ponyville wasn't working,it also means my bad time I'm having with readers here that critique this fanfiction too harshly,all I hope is that this story get's treated with more love than hate...

Comments ( 14 )

AT LEAST PUT SOME EFFORT INTO IT, WHICH YOU CLEARLY DIDN'T DO! :facehoof::ajbemused::ajsleepy::rainbowhuh::twilightangry2:

...:twilightangry2:iambrony.steeph.tp-radio.de/mlp/gif/rainbomb.gif SERIOUSLY?! EN VEZ DE AYDAR CRITICAN! YOU KNOW,I TRY MY BEST BUT YOU PEOPLE ARE SO HARSH!!:flutterrage:

Here's something you can try that might improve your writing. Browse Fimfiction for crossover stories and sort them by rating. Read the highest rated ones and pay attention to everything that makes them so good. Story, characters, grammar, everything. The better you understand the genre your working in, the better your story will be. :twilightsmile:

4824985 Thanks:pinkiesad2: you're one of those few people that actually tells me how to improve in a way that doesn't make me look like an idiot,I really appreciate it.

4825204 No problem, happy to help. :scootangel:

My advice for something to work on in future chapters:

Whenever you have a comma, put in a space right after it. It just looks nicer and other people can't give you crap about it when it does happen.

I apologize for the rudeness of several people. Little do they realize that saying, 'it sucks', does not help you to become a better writer.:trixieshiftleft:

I like the idea of the story, and yes, you should keep going!:twilightsmile: If this is your first try at a fic, then you're better than a few I've seen during my time on this site. I admit, you're not the best I've seen, but that means you can only get better.:scootangel:

4824861 u obviously have no idea wut ur criting about so shut up mind of a 2 yr dude this may be better but its not the worst its atlest above average and compared too others id say it is mostly top 100 vs. 10k of them so take that and blow ur smoke pipe (i do applogize for being curt but its the least i can do good read thow teh user who created this only not idoit on reply)

4911641 and ur comment

4825656 clealy your not a writer since hate is what people need and right now this story is awful and will never be continued theres more hate than love

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clealy your not a writer since hate is what people need and right now this story is awful and will never be continued theres more hate than love

Clearly you're not a writer either, Reshkrom. A story doesn't need hate to make it better. It needs only constructive criticism, as well as a compliment or two to keep the author motivated to try their hand at it again and keep going. I'm sorry, but with your grammar skills that have been shown in the quote above, you are hardly any better than this 'Awful Story', and you haven't even written part of it. And if you think bashing on people giving constructive criticism is helping the author, then you are more of a biased fool than I ever thought was possible in the murky depths of humanity.

And just another thought: If you wish to keep this little exchange going between us, don't bother the author of this less-than-perfect story with petty notifications and head on over to my user page here on FimFiction. I'd be more than happy to educate you on higher literary mechanics.:trollestia:

I still love the story line, could be a bit longer with more detail though.

5166732 by the way im giving this story a thumbs up and adding it to my favs, i look forward to the next chapter:pinkiehappy:

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