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I haven't read this...yet, but I am curious as to why there are so many downvotes and the only comments are from people that want to read more?
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Of Course there will be more, and yes that's odd. Not sure what people take objection to. It's not THAT poorly written is it? I swear I even stayed sober just to edit this one.
4560277 I don't know either, mate.
haters gonna hate, I guess.
that or the similarities to one part of Disney Aladdin
it also could be about the description of the fic.
give me some time to re-read this and see what had gone wrong.
4560299 I think it's all that "love and tolerance" the community gives to these kind of stories. I'll be honest, not sure how I felt about about writing the more "interesting" parts of pony stories, (It's really not my thing if you catch my drift) which is why I started with a humanized story, but you know what? It's really not all that different from a writing perspective.
besides a need to describe briefly what Spike looks like, the only question I have is this: Is the story humanized, anthromorphic, or plain when it comes what the characters look like.
4560783 Ah I see *pulls out story fixing wrench* it's straight up plain characters. Guess I'll have to tweak my descriptive language. Thank you for your productive criticism.
4560993 I can sense the sarcasm in your text. what I meant by describing spike a bit more was to say what kind of creature is Spike and color pattern he has. I'm basing this entire on what literature professor told us at the beginning of the semester in college;" write the story or article as if the audience doesn't have a clue about the universe before hand."
no offense?
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No, I really meant it. And you are right. The thought HAD crossed my mind while writing, but at the time I didn't find an appropriate place to put the description.
A sincere thanks to you for your imput
Also you should add a comady tag to this it was funny
4561501 Why thank you. I aim to please.
What this story abort?
5361237 For some reason that escapes me, I find that funny.
5361404 Why thank you for the constructive criticism. I certainly wouldn't want to turn off potential readers.
Next morning they woke up in each others embrace.
"SPIKEY?"
"Yes Rarity?"
"You're the Stallion?"
"Yes Rarity"
"MINE!"
"SPIKE !"
Shame this story died.