After the mysterious disappearance of her father, Static Shimmer's mother does all she can to keep her safe and conceal the truth from her. However, as Static grows older and more independent, she discovers the horrors that await behind the gates to the Rainbow Factory in her search for her missing father. Just when she feels that all hope is gone, she meets a stallion who shows her that maybe her true colours are not lost forever. Can Static trust this troubled pony, or are the clutches of the Rainbow Factory inescapable?
Chapters (3)
U need some help in writing
it's unprofessional to have chapters less than 1000 words
4755081 I appreciate your concern, however I don't think that anyone who says 'u' instead of 'you' really has any place to criticise. Also, as an A* English student, I can categorically state that chapter length is completely up to the author. As a writer, I can finish my chapters when I see fit, and what is appropriate to the story. The first chapter ends where it does because between Chapter One and Chapter Two there is a time jump, and the beginning of Chapter Two has a change of tone which I deemed unfitting for the middle of a chapter. Chapter 2 ends where it does due to the fact that it is a small glance into a window of time, like a flashback, and the events will be slowly revealed through short insertions throughout the rest of the story.
A short glance at your profile reveals some appalling grammar, so I think you actually have a lot of nerve to criticise me. That comment is not constructive in any way, and I would appreciate it if you would no longer leave any more comments on my work.
4759298 You just opened the doors to hell
4759544 Whatever that even means, I don't care. Please leave me alone
Ya leave her alone and don't be horrid please
4759298 good point
4765495 Thanks for asking me nicely
4759648 Oh I'm sorry. I didn't mean to bother the simple 5-suscriber pony
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Face it. It's life. If you didn't care then why the fuck did you reply
4765497 Thank you for the support
4766192 I replied to tell you to stop bothering me, something you can't seem to understand
4769110 thats ok i like you story its realy cool
4769114 And I'm asking you that if you didn't give a sit then why did you reply to my comment? It's as simple as that
4769598 She did reply politely though (not the words in her reply saying 'I appreciate your concern' so please be nice to each-other .
And please don't swear "Love and tolerate"
4770042 I second that
4771195 That is the brony/pegasister motto
4769114 I'm sorry, is my brother Night_fog bothering you?
4755081 Allrighty, you better knock it off or I'll go to your room right now and punch you
4776289 Thank you sorry about this
4776289 Thank you, I think it's sorted now
4781281 So sorry
my brother gets... mad sometimes and starts picking on others