A teenage human boy with a knack for technology and a passion for ponies finds himself sitting through another daydream. Hoping it will become reality. As he sits through another boring class he finds himself dozing off, waking up finding only a few seconds had passed, when in his dream he had gone through at least fifty years of what he could only assume life was like in Equestria... He knew he would never be there, but with the help of a friend and a deal with The Devil, his wish may come true...
Human tag is for opening the plot, most of the story takes place in Equestria, as for the others, I'm really hoping to get some TwiDash in there, it's in my plan, my non-existent, cruddy plan...
Now with an editor:Sycamore
Chapters (4)
It was slightly confusing to follow but once I understood what was happening i enjoyed most of it. look forward to seeing more!
4325539 thanks for the feedback, i know i have a strange style of writing, its meant to be slightly confusing, im not good enough at writing to make a normal story, so i made a confusing but interesting one, my profile pic is Circuit btw, and ill get on making a second longer chapter for release by the end of the week, even if it is just for one person whose enjoying it, i need to stop wasting my life anyway
4325558 Hahaha Nice now i know what circuit looks like. Yea i had to read it over a couple times to understand it but its a great concept. The story reminds me of something but I just can't picture the name. Anyway good luck with writing the rest i think it will be great!
4325581 ill make sure i drop another reply when its up, and about the other character, imagine mine with a red coat and vinyls hair, its my friends real oc, i dont know if he has a name for him tho
4325603 If worst Comes to worse You can always make one and so the hair is kinda like my pic or similar just different colors?
4325609 ill see him at school tomorrow, ill ask then
4325615 Well I'll be keeping my eye out for more Chapters Good Luck to you good sir!
4325621 thanks man, this is exactly what i needed to keep me working!
4325631 I try my best to keep up the spirits of all writers ;P
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So that's where the amnesia for Beat's name originated.
As for the chapter, I think that you did a marvellous job with this last one.
I will proof read, what are you looking for, a grammar check and plot checker
Like I said in the comments earlier in the book, I am willing to be an edittor for parts when maybe sycomore can't spend the time to edit, plus, its always good to have more than one editor for that very reason.;)
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yeah, sure, I can send you a PM when chapter 5 is ready, it'll have my email in it, we usually send a word document with the corrections until i feel its ready.
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Okie dokie loki