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Discord's Love

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Discord realizes that he loves somepony.

But he lies to her for fear that she might not feel the same way, since everypony sees him as a monster.

So he must win her heart.

(Cover Art Is NOT Mine)

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cosmicobubisi

cosmicobubisi #1 · Dec 22nd, 2014 · · · Guess Who's Back ·

This is very good, with plenty of potential. I like it. All of the actions seem realistic and in character. But for goodness's sakes, slow DOWN! Have scenes where she is taking care of her animals or plants or something, and et her think there. Don't stop!

cosmicobubisi

cosmicobubisi #2 · Dec 22nd, 2014 · · · Insecure ·

Hmmm. Can you make Discord be a bit more... chaotic? The two characters (especially Discord) seem a bit dulled down. Also, two things bother me. Fluttershy keeps running to friends for help. This is taking an approach that she is a weakling, and can't do anything by herself, which is not true. The second thing is that the chapters a re short. A little length never hurt anypony. Good luck!

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