AU of the Season 4 finale, Twilight's Kingdom. Tirek tortures the three princesses in an attempt to learn the whereabouts of their magic. The most unlikely hero comes to their rescue, the Draconequus lord of chaos. Will a powerless and weak Discord be able to save the pony he has always loved?
Warnings: Major character death and gore (shouldn't be too explicit)
Update: I will be adding an Alternate Ending to this in which Discord does not die as well as a chapter studying how his death affects the Mane Six.
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I am in a dilemma in what concerns to the redaction. There are some flaws, such as your inability of using ";". But it was still a really good job. The description of Celestia´s torture was incredible, making her pain and the image formed by it extremely palpable. Discord´s sacrifice was really interesting too, and I must admit that I didn´t see that ending coming, I expected him to live and help the mane six, because, well, without Discord to give Twilight her key they are pretty much screwed. Tirek´s character suffers an obscure adulteration into a much more evil creature. However, that seems plausible. So it is a pretty good fanfic situated in an alternative time line, although I was pretty sure that Discord, if he actually put some effort on it could have defeated Tirek. For goodness sake, he is almost omnipotent!
This was alright for a short little vignette, and the concept is quite interesting. However, the story would have been more powerful had you delved more deeply into the reasons behind Discord's actions. Why does he join Tirek in the first place if he is in love with Celestia? What is his reaction when he learns of Tirek's plans to steal the princess' magic? What's going through his mind as he witnesses Celestia's torture?
"Measure of a Man" is also the title of one of the best (IMO) episodes of Star Trek:TNG, and given Discord's connecting to the show, I was hoping the story had some connection to that episode, but unfortunately it was not meant to be.
4408729 Sorry about the confusion, I was unaware that there was a Star Trek episode
and I may come back and fix this story later, when I don't have so much school work and other things hanging over my head.
This is a GoOoOoOoOoOd Story~! Keep doing My Victim Friend !
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Pinkie Pie Smile HD.-
4407969 Thanks for the feedback. I shall remember it next time I write something. And I did think of Discord giving Twilight the key, I just needed to write something like this as a sort of AU. Maybe when I'm not as busy when things I'll expand this story into a What If and explore more of hoe Discord's death would have affected the Mane 6.
4408822 I want to hear that story, please continue!
Dude...Whoa
[WARNING THIS COMMENT IS A JOKE! DON'T TAKE IT SERIOUSLY!]
WEAK!!!!!!!
That was... Dark... and I'm sorry, but I'm more of a Fluttercord mare... I DIED WHEN TIREK IMPALED DIS LIKE NO JOKE. I. AM. DEAD. DEAD I TELL YOU!!!!! XD
This could be how DayBreaker was born now that I think about it 🤔