good this chapter was better than the last, there are still a few things that could be better and a few typos here and there but still very good, let me see how much time I dispose in my vacations once this semester ends and maybe I´ll offer to edit for you

just one thing.... where is the rest of the chapter it´s not cool to end a chapter in this way dude

Hey Blue, you should keep going it is quite the book so far. I hardly can wait for more. The wait makes .