Because of the chapter's name, I expected either Twilight or Rarity, and the cover art had me expecting Celestia, just not this soon, or in the way it was delivered. Well done.
You know, after thinking about how abit messed up it is that Shining X Twilight had been the only ship I've felt like supporting, it's damn hilarious to see a realistic reaction to such a thing.
I presumed that this was about Celestia, so I started skimming over the names. Let's just say I was purplexed puns when Shining said what the hell are you doing to Celestia, when it was in fact Twilight.
...I really hope Twilight's acceptance of blatant incest will be explained instead of it turning out to be, ya know, she just HAS to be into it for literally no reason
What the huh? I thought I had read the summary, but this first chapter was all over the place. In a good way, mind. I have no idea what you're doing, but i'm compelled to read more.
5278083 i caught that. i also caught the Louis c.k. reference. in another of shakespearicle's stories, liquid pride, shining armor is a lieutenant, but everyone always called him looey which irl is the shortened form of lieutenant. anyways things happened and Sea Cay took shining's place as a lieutenant.
"I'm no goddess Shining Armor. I am a mare just like any other. I am not made of light or magic but flesh and blood. I eat when I hunger, I sleep when I tire. I am a mare with wants-" She looked him deeply in the eyes. " and needs."
Even before, with an all-stallion force, there were no rules against those enlisting who were of a, say, alternative lifestyle. As such, there were strict rules against fraternization within the ranks. But what was once an annual reminder briefing became a monthly all-call. And it was at least a weekly reminder when taking role now.
Gentlecolts, please stop flirting with the night guard.
There were severe repercussions for any infractions. Even so, there were still incidents at an alarming regularity. To their defense, bat ponies did not experience estrus like normal ponies. There was no excuse for them to 'become overwhelmed by their urges'. On the other side of the fence, well, as they say, colts will be colts. But that never held up in a Court Marshall.
It was happening much less often now though. Once the system had ferreted out the few bad apples, as it were. Or, more likely, they'd been getting better at hiding their relationships.
Good thing we have Modecan Democracy, because now Ponies, Bat ponies & Creatures Alike can now love each other and lived Equally, and no I'm not talking about that Equally type.
"What's wrong with me!?" She parroted indignantly. "Speak for yourself!" Shining was dumbfounded. "I came to Canterlot last night for the Grand Galloping Gala with my friends. Which, by the way turned into a complete disaster. I thought you'd be there!"
Twilight Sparkle: and you know what's even more worst in the Gala?
Shinning Armor: What
Twilight sparkle: That Equestria was Dragged into a Conflict with one Tolotarian Country.
And yes, after the Gala, Moises the Second had Declare war against Princess Celestia & Equestria, so in this Timeline Equestrians now lives in under the Constant fear of Modecans.
"NOW!" He threw his pillow at her. Twilight ducked it and scurried out. Shining followed her across the room and closed the door behind her, locking it. He slumped to the floor with his sweaty back against the wall. He looked down at himself. Bits of last night's partially digested food was now smeared into his white fur. Not the least of his reasons, but he felt like he needed a long, hot shower.
And if you think that's more worst shining, you'll never know that one of your Royal Guard Friends are going to turn Modecan soon or is a Modecan in Disguise.
What a lovely way to start a clopfic with an unexpected incest.
I have a feeling Twilight might make a return appearance... with success in the future
Because of the chapter's name, I expected either Twilight or Rarity, and the cover art had me expecting Celestia, just not this soon, or in the way it was delivered. Well done.
Hmmm.
The poker scene felt a bit clunky to me. But it's otherwise pretty good so far!
~Skeeter The Lurker
you forgot a word there
they'd been getting better at hiding their relationships.
"It's not creepy" Nice FiW refrence
You know, after thinking about how abit messed up it is that Shining X Twilight had been the only ship I've felt like supporting, it's damn hilarious to see a realistic reaction to such a thing.
5217157 At least he didn't go streaking in the park or skinny dipping after dark.
Well this clip fic escalated to the realm of incest quickly...
5217871 *wincest
I presumed that this was about Celestia, so I started skimming over the names. Let's just say I was purplexed puns when Shining said what the hell are you doing to Celestia, when it was in fact Twilight.
...I really hope Twilight's acceptance of blatant incest will be explained instead of it turning out to be, ya know, she just HAS to be into it for literally no reason
5217463 She gave him her heart and then he turned around
What the huh? I thought I had read the summary, but this first chapter was all over the place. In a good way, mind. I have no idea what you're doing, but i'm compelled to read more.
I'm not sure if anyone else picked this up... Camisa Roja is Spanish for Red Shirt. So lol.
Also:
Pegasi corps, aka, The Three Dogs (AAAAWWWOOOOOOOO), The Lords and Masters of all they survey!
Shining you know Twi is the only mare for you. Don't act all righteous.
5278083 i caught that. i also caught the Louis c.k. reference. in another of shakespearicle's stories, liquid pride, shining armor is a lieutenant, but everyone always called him looey which irl is the shortened form of lieutenant. anyways things happened and Sea Cay took shining's place as a lieutenant.
5217871 This is Shakespearicles we're talking about here. It's a rare frozen day in hell when he doesn't have an incest fic.
going to be a good story.
Hehehehe, ooooh this... this is looking to be a good fic, with a surprise twist at the end
Good show Shake
Shining armor: ugh stupid twily
Twilight sparkle:
FALLOUT MOISES: (talking to shining armor) (tf2 demoman voice) let will be a bloody lesson to you
Did you seriously call one of the characters 'red shirt' in Spanish!?
8555912 I wonder if he'll die in one of my new stories...
Lol Comisa Rojo is Spanish for Red Shirt
Good thing we have Modecan Democracy, because now Ponies, Bat ponies & Creatures Alike can now love each other and lived Equally, and no I'm not talking about that Equally type.
Twilight Sparkle: and you know what's even more worst in the Gala?
Shinning Armor: What
Twilight sparkle: That Equestria was Dragged into a Conflict with one Tolotarian Country.
And yes, after the Gala, Moises the Second had Declare war against Princess Celestia & Equestria, so in this Timeline Equestrians now lives in under the Constant fear of Modecans.
And if you think that's more worst shining, you'll never know that one of your Royal Guard Friends are going to turn Modecan soon or is a Modecan in Disguise.