5328132 i.lvme.me/1jj2hk1.jpg Well this was longer than I was planning on (giggity). But I promised something for this weekend so here you are. More is on the way within the week.
I have to admit, I've been waiting anxiously for the final two mares. Rarity and Celly are damn sexy, classy mares. Can't wait to see some Alabastardization going on!
"It's alright." She said after a tense moment. "It's okay, I- I pardon you." She tapped him on the shoulder with her hoof. Quite in fact, the saddle was not nearly expensive enough to warrant such a strong reaction. But he didn't need to know that. He relaxed for just a moment as she lowered the crop. Just as she'd lulled him into a false sense of security, she switched back again. "But THIS!" She slapped the dented brass pole of the bed frame, causing it to ring. "This can not stand!" From her bag she levitated a couple other hoof cuffs and re-secured him to the frame of the bed.
"Lilly!" He cried out as she took his hooves in her magical grip. She cut him an angry look. "Uh- Mistress, please no!"
FALLOUT MOISES: (peaking on the window) now that's a bloody lesson that he will never forget and that's what he gets for yelling at twilight Pepper jack: I'm going to get the Taser out
"You've been a very bad pony!" She said, locking him in place.
There was some potentially really hot stuff in this chapter... but ultimately the execution left a bad taste in my mouth. Unable to use safe words, being chastised for expressing a genuine want to be released(not to mention being so strongly secured as to be unable to escape in desperation or emergency), and not even being made aware of the intent of the partner ahead of time is not how to write a bondage fic. This all flies in the face of the trust and care necessary to these relationships, that the sub will no that the dom won't go to far and that the sub still actually has the control to choose which lines won't get crossed. Instead, this feels too much like genuine sadistic torture. Also, that ending. How many terrible situations has Shining gotten himself into by now via alcohol that he probably shouldn't completely change his mind just at the promise of an open bar? Even if this fic is a comedy, this chapter definitely could have been laid out better. Better communication and more reasonable motives for character decisions would've gone a long way to making this great.
11291819 I agree on all points. I have no excuse other than having written this out of ignorance, years ago before I properly understood the kink, and the power dynamics of BDSM.
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Well this was longer than I was planning on (giggity). But I promised something for this weekend so here you are. More is on the way within the week.
Daaaamn Lilly, just... Damn
PATIENTLY WAITING FOR THE RARITY CHAPTER.
Rarity will be the death of him mark these ponies words.
Hmm, two things I forgot because well, I'm tiredwhat happened to his horn and where is cadance again?
Love it. Can't wait for the next chapter.
5335649 He hurt his horn by jumping/falling off the top of the bar.
Cadence will be explained in a later chapter.
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oh, right, right...
She isn't a model for just any reason
You forgot to add a Nurse Redheart Tag.
5359646 Five tags max. And her role was comparatively minor.
5361401 Ah, Sorry
5361401 will there be more Fleur De Lis action going on anytime soon or are you finished with her
5383695 No more of her in this story I'm afraid.
And then Shining bangs Rarity. A lot, in fact.
I have to admit, I've been waiting anxiously for the final two mares. Rarity and Celly are damn sexy, classy mares. Can't wait to see some Alabastardization going on!
Get some rest over the holidays, you writing rascal :3
5403526 When there's still so much writing to be done!?
Spoiler! Non-French speakers won't have as good of an experience as those who do speak it.
True ,but there is the internet, although I sort of don't want to know.I was considering taking French, maybe another day.
Ooooooo... poor Shining, a disgusting fate... *shudders* But...
It was hilarious, so good work.
Good show Shakes, good show.
FALLOUT MOISES: (peaking on the window) now that's a bloody lesson that he will never forget and that's what he gets for yelling at twilight
Pepper jack: I'm going to get the Taser out
There was some potentially really hot stuff in this chapter... but ultimately the execution left a bad taste in my mouth. Unable to use safe words, being chastised for expressing a genuine want to be released(not to mention being so strongly secured as to be unable to escape in desperation or emergency), and not even being made aware of the intent of the partner ahead of time is not how to write a bondage fic. This all flies in the face of the trust and care necessary to these relationships, that the sub will no that the dom won't go to far and that the sub still actually has the control to choose which lines won't get crossed. Instead, this feels too much like genuine sadistic torture. Also, that ending. How many terrible situations has Shining gotten himself into by now via alcohol that he probably shouldn't completely change his mind just at the promise of an open bar? Even if this fic is a comedy, this chapter definitely could have been laid out better. Better communication and more reasonable motives for character decisions would've gone a long way to making this great.
11291819
I agree on all points. I have no excuse other than having written this out of ignorance, years ago before I properly understood the kink, and the power dynamics of BDSM.
11291858
Ah.