Music is what brings everypony together. It is the glue that can bring even the most opposite ponies together. It doesn't always take talent, just the sheer will to do it and to want to make the world have a good time. If you came to read a story about that, GOOD LUCK READING THIS! You're in the wrong neighborhood!
Octavia has decided that an upcoming Battle of the Bands could be her chance to finally strut her stuff and receive a wish from Celestia. But she can't do it alone. With the help of the midnight DJ Vinyl Scratch and the hand-obsessed mare Lyra, they will bring forth a musical adventure...that you will never hear because this is a word document. But, if you want to see the whacky journey these mare's will take, stick around!
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Here we go on Writing Grounds 8! I've decided to give my comedy side another shot and as of current, I think it went well. Always leave constructive criticism and stay classy ;)
i want to read it but im going to stick to my three chapter rule
There's some funny stuff here, but also some problems. First, there's a number of spelling and grammar errors (one repeated issue is incorrect punctuation in dialogue). Second, the bit with the narrator making commentary (either explicitly or implicitly) gets old really fast, and in fact sometimes ruins jokes. For example:
"Now that you've seen how far they've come, it's time for the finale. And you won't believe what you've just read; mostly because right now you haven't read it yet. Here is what transpired in the final days of Octavia's freedom."
Right then and there you spoil the joke of how they all get arrested. What could've been a hilarious twist is instead spoiled well before it happens.
That said, there is still some funny stuff, as I mentioned, but the style itself could use a little work.