• Member Since 1st Feb, 2014
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Yang96


Just a great fan of MLP :3

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After Eris' fall, Prince Aster and Celes took power over Equestria, the first being the Moon Monarch, and the second the Sun Monarch, after Aster's discussion with Celes, Nightmare Stallion was created, but, after a failed try to gain the control over Equestria, he was vanished to the Moon.
980 years later, a filly, the Prince Royal Coral, was affected by the curse of Eris, and he became a chimera, he was a shame to the Royal Family of the Northern Seas, so his death was planned, but he became a castaway, after that, he made a great bond with Nightmare Stallion, who led him to a family where he'll find out the great magic that is Brotherhood, a magic, maybe more powerfull than Friendship itself.
Don't Like, Don't read themes:
-Genderbend
-Gay Themes
-The character that should be Twilight Sparke is not par of the main characters, neither any of the Mane Six

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Comments ( 4 )

Uhh, that description... Is it supposed to make sense, because it doesn't.

Also, pacing is non-existant and there is punctuation mistakes everywhere. The chapters aren't long enough and it's a big wall of text without aeration.

I wanted to leave a clear reason on why I'm disliking this so that I don't become a mindless hater.

3903500 He's functionally illiterate, it's not quite mindless.

3903500 well sorry about that nwnUuu its just that its my first fanfic written in English (I'm from Mexico and normally use Spanish) but well... I really want to improve my way of writing since this site won't accept spanish nwnUuu so... any tips?

3915075

As somebody who understands your predicament (I'm french), I just say : find what your good at and train. Example, my forte is HiEs and I've been training for about two years. My tip is to write until you find your place.

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