Here, everything is perfect. If it's perfect enough to just be perfect, what could go wrong? A curious filly's dream is what ails her, as there is no way out of this dream. If you live the same dream, over and over, any dream this hellish would sure to make you cry in un-forgiveness.
What do you do, though, when your entire world crumbles around you? When you can't remember your friends, your home, or your family? What if this one simple wish was a mistake?
"I... I just wanted my sister back,"
Note: I changed the slice of life tag to Adventure, as it kinda changes a little as you read through. But it's still probably a bit of both, nonetheless.
Stahp with all the feels
But overall it was a good story
3853353 Yay, that's great, considering this is like my first story on FimFiction ^.^
It's not done yet though, I'm writing chapter two :S
Nice story so far.
My only complaint is that it felt like the story moved a bit fast at times, but I liked it regardless.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Oh My Gawsh! That was an epic story!
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:P yeah I'm going to have to work on that. And thanks! I'm working on the new chapter.
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:D Glad you like it
Really nice! It's tragic, but that's what it's supposed to be like, right? It's also a little fast-paced at times. But overall very nice job!
3857155 Hm... I will see if I can't slow it down a bit? Yeah, and that's what the tag Tragedy was for. and Sad as well.
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I enjoyed reading your story! In fact, I featured it in a blog post of mine. It's not much, but I hope it'll get you a couple of extra views. Keep up the good work!
3879629 Aww thanks! Yeah and this is my first fanfic too so I'm glad you appreciate it :D
People are saying it's a little fast-paced so I am trying to slow it down a little bit as I write chapter 2, but oh well :P
Nice!
De comment box: lonely no more!
Oh yeah, and an extra note:
Luna speaks in Old English, so she uses "thee," "thou," "ye," and stuff like that.
i.e. "We have been expecting thee, dear filly."
(She refers to herself as two ponies apparently for some reason...)
Otherwise, very nice! Me likey
3894309 Oh yeah, forgot about that,
...
Except in Canterlot Wedding, and Sleepless in Ponyville, I think...
but whatever...
This is a really good story nice job
3913380 Thanks! :D
Now I have to wait to see what happens next I Just want to read more UGH...
Heh, I didn't get the chapter update notice until now. Keep going!