ask and i will tell. i am comfortable with proofreading most anything as long as you are open to constructive criticism. pm me if interested.
a boy with an incredibly sullen disposition gets warped into Equestria and due to a misunderstanding sets out for revenge on the princesses by going after what they care about most:the ponies of Equestria. not much violence till later in the story. BTW the chapters will get longer as time goes by and i get more comfortable with where the story is heading.
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Well...I love the concept of this story and I hope that "cody" finds the happiness he seeks. The main problem I have is your syntax and grammer, they're lacking in key plot areas.
Now, I'm not going to be harsh on you, because I understand the difficulty of using this medium. However, you need to proof-read your story. I now this is not my place to do this, but I want to see this story blossom. You seem like you have a passion for writing and have a wonderful story to tell. So, I am willing to proofread your stories or give any help/assurance I can muster. P.M. me if you are interested. 
As always: learn to question, remember to forget, explore to be lost. 
340509 i thank you for your criticism but i cant change much of this, the man who had originally written this story was very stubborn and would roll over in his grave if i changed it too much, i cant change much till ch 10. then its free range. i apologize and i will be sure to read over it more carefully and i noticed his work got slightly better over time so if you could just push through the first few chapters im sure it will start getting better. it took him a while to get comfortable with the speed and feel of the story.
FIRSTly i would like to say enjoying it so far
secondly i would like to point out that there are no other comments before this one
404262 i believe the accepted term is 'first' anyway there will be more when i can either get my current editor to come back or get a new editor, you can see the original story at deviantart. just pm me and ill send you a link
...Do you have a pre-reader? I can feel my old English teacher giving you the evil eye (no offense)
671406 nope, why do you ask?
671768 do you still happen to have an editor? Or have you stopped working on this?
800939 well i have the story almost completely finished but i still have to do the final edit and fix a few things on what i've already posted before i'll be happy with it. sorry if my english is bad but i having a hard time learning it.
801022 Thats ok bro, do you have skype?
801024 indeed i do
801027 alrighty, message me your skype name and i'll ad you on there so we can discuss things further. That is, if you want.
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