Inspiration lurks in unlikely places. These are four little stories that demanded writing after watching Equestria Girls one too many times. The stories run the gamut from Sad in the first and third to Comedy (I hope) in the last.
From a mysterious letter to a not so mysterious job reassignment these are some story ideas my brain wouldn't let go. Some of these could be viewed as expanded prompts for a larger story.
My first fic attempt, so pelt only fresh tomatoes.
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I'll admit, I have no idea what's going on in this one.
Oh well, on to the next! 
Once again, the vagueness is a drawback.
Still, I'll keep going! 
I honestly have no idea what's going on, sorry.
One more, though! 
Now, this one made sense.
And oh, boy, did it make a lot of sense! Poor Luna... 
Overall, this collection was a mixed bag; while being cryptic is not a bad thing, the first three 'chapters' went overboard and became downright indecipherable. I'd suggest giving them a second glance and either a rewrite or a little addition to clarify things a bit. As far as technical writing goes, though, you did just fine. Write more; I see good things in your future!
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I admit to being specifically cryptic in the first 3. Sorry I was too cryptic! If you want an explanation for the first 3 I can give them, if you are interested.
For me, this was mostly an exercise in brevity, as my personal writing style usually will wander into inflated verbosity if I don't watch it. I think I was worried if I was less cryptic and more explanatory I'd ramble on forever.
I also admit that I may have sat on this for a week before having the moxie to actually submit it.
P.S. Also thanks for giving it a shot!
3797009 That would be nice.
Ah, that makes sense. I myself tend to veer between too brief and too verbose, so I know how hard it can be to find a good middle ground.
Ah, huh. Well, I for one am glad you finally did!
No problem.
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Spoiler Territory:
1) The first story is my take on Normal Norman, I suppose. The one human who isn't turned into a pony analogue at what becomes Canterlot High. The "Last Camelot High Stallion" was my hint that this was someone who remembered what the human school was before everything got weird, since Camelot would be what the name Canterlot riffs off of and "Stallion" because there's a great damn statue of a horse in front of the school.
2) Sunset Shimmer is actually a covert agent under Luna's employ. PS is code for Princess Selene (Luna), PH would have stood for Princess Helios (Celestia). Agent 2S being Agent SS or Sunset Shimmer. I thought perhaps she was on a recon mission and got tapped for some work in manufacturing a test for Princess Twilight at Celestia's behest, perhaps.
3) Instead of the Crystal Mirror sending someone to an alternate world, it manufactures a 'dreamspace' of sorts that allows a sort of mental test which is watched by those outside the Mirror. That's the reason Twilight sees everyone as human versions of ponies she knows, since her mind is manufacturing part of the space in which she is being tested/observed. But poor Spike, he followed her in! And he's a dog instead of a boy or young man. Thus the letter in Celestia's diary bemoaning the fact that her student sees her charge as a pet or lesser being. She's still kind to him, but it's still a failing. Thus Celestia's comment on sending Spike away from Twilight, so he can grow into someone who can command respect instead of being viewed as (and accepting!) a collar of inferiority. Ranger Command was my choice over something like the Royal Guards, because it would be sure to provide for the required distance.
See! Me spoiling it was almost as long as the stories themselves.
3797130 That is so awesome!
I assure you, I will not even throw fresh tomatoes at you.
Pinkie.
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If sweet things must be thrown, I shall put down my preference for donuts.
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I'll just pop down to Sugarcube Corner!
Pinkie, you only throw food at bad authors.
Even donuts????
Let's just throw flowers, darling. Good authors get flowers.
I WANT TO THROW DONUTS! Ooh! What about flower-shaped donuts? Or donuts have flour!
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Just no powdered sugar please. I always inhale at the most inadvisable moment.
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What about FROSTING?
Uhh... yeah I'm lost.
Wait was this a science experiment, and observation, A SECRET OP? I have no clue, and who is PH? The person from last chapter?
I KNOW ITS SLASH SENTRY! just spit-balling here. writin whatever comes to my mind about these stories. Oh well. Lazarus said the last one is good so here we go!
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well those were actually interesting topics. Now if only they were more clear, like had some setup or something explaining the codes or whos talking about what. Then it could definitely work while still being cryptic.
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Slash Sentry: Flash Sentry's evil twin! He certainly should have a goatee.
There is something there....if only I could find it. Even if I find it, it will be silly. Wait...Slash Sentry is the lovechild of Flash and Sunset Shimmer! Bad shipping awaaaaaay!
Re Actual Criticism: Yeah it was cryptic. It wasn't supposed to be completely inscrutable (sorry), but it was. Curses (at myself)!
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Best I can figure, this is a student in the EG universe, but before it was EG. Like, the portal to Equestria caused things to change so people were as technicolor as the ponies that became their counterparts. This student was somehow aware of what was happening and the portal, and eventually went through the portal after leaving this letter for some random other student who got his locker next
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Again, best as I can figure, is that this is Celestia's thoughts on Spike becoming a dog, and why. The fact that he is loyal and will follow her is commendable, but the fact that he is willing to be something less than Twilight's equal so readily is sad in her eyes, so she plans to separate them so Spike can grow into his own self instead of just a follower.
2S... Sunset Shimmer, right?
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Mmmyep.
Interesting. Are you suggesting that, after Sunset came through the mirror, it triggered the change of Canterlot High into a bizzarro-world reflection of Equestria? Hmm... Interesting and somewhat-dark idea!
"2S" is Sunset Shimmer of course but PH? "Prismatic Heart", maybe - Princess Cadence?
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Both of these seem valid interpretations.
What can I say except...
To the MOOOOOONNN!!!
What about the second one? What genre is that?
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I don't really know how to answer that question. Spy stuff?