After being abandoned by his parents and the death of his sister, Bass Line was alone in the world, he shut everyone out at the orphanage, he only had friends when he reached primary school in cloudsdale. He goes about his life steering clear of other ponys, only talking to the few he had made earlier in life, but if he wants to succeed in his chosen carer line then he will have to change.
Some characters tagged will not appear until later chapters.
This is my first fiction so any improvements or constructive criticisms will be appreciated.
I would like to thank tidicuses for helping me, he was the first proof reader and he gives me alot of improvements for the fiction.
Hook, line, and fuck you
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i cant tell if that means you liked it or hated it
Much error, oh noes
good job. :D
yay thanks for putting in my oc. :D
It was good! My review on it is here!
The rating for this story is grossly, unfairly out of line with the actually quality of the story. I think you got hit hard with drive-by down thumbs.
You have some proof reading problems (look at the punctuation around your quotes). But the writing is pretty good.
4149617 wow thanks, apart form the review that for written that's properly the best feed back yet, and thanks for the heads up, i will make sure to check and check again.
That was a good story man
4203074 Thank you very much sir
4203913 You're welcome
Turn table?
3662236 what does that mean