• Published 26th Nov 2013
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Wet Little Lies - Sparkle Dust



Apple Bloom has a secret so dark, she won't tell. Applejack will try to convince her.

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Chapter 1: The Only Chapter

"Hey, Apple Bloom!" Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo ran torwards her.

"Hey,girls!" Apple Bloom was excited.

"Guess what?" Apple Bloom couldn't,because Sweetie Belle went on, "I'm having..."

"A SLEEPOVER!" Scootaloo finished.

Apple Bloom tensed with nervousness. She didn't like sleepovers.

But she braved up and asked her most important question.

"Where are we going to sleep?"

"On my bed!" Sweetie Belle beamed.

"Oh..uh, sorry. But Ah can't go. Uh, I gotta help Applejack on the farm. Bye!" Apple Bloom sped off, tears in her eyes. She really wanted to go, but there was one thing in the way.

She.

Wets.

The.

Bed.

She got lucky when they were at Fluttershy's home. She realized that her friends were wondering what was with her.

She ran to the farm.

"Apple Bloom! What's the matter?" Applejack, her sister, asked.

"Nothing! Ah'm...fine! Go away!" Apple Bloom slammed and locked her room, but too soon.

She heard a key jiggle, then a "Thanks, Big Mac."

"Apple Bloom! Don't you ever lock this door unless you need too!" Applejack's firm voice made her cry.

"Aw, sugarcube, somethin' is buggin' you. What is it?" Applejack asked, losing the firm voice.

"Nothing."

"You sure?"

"No!"

"C'mon, hon, tell me."

"Okay! Fine! Sweetie Belle invited me to a sleepover." Apple Bloom took her face out of the pillow.

"That's great!"

"No! It's not!" Apple Bloom screamed.

"And why is that?" Applejack asked.

"Because... you know..."

"Ah know what?"

"You know!"

"Apple Bloom, everyone has wet one time or another. Ask Fluttershy or Pinkie Pie. They will definitely tell you."

Then Applejack took her hoof into Apple Bloom's.

"Do ya' remember when Ah went to the human lands? With the nice nurse and all? Well, she said that people can do na-a-asty things to ya' sometimes. But ya' gotta live through it. Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo are your best friends. You should be able to tell them anything. Oh, and the number one sleepover rule? What ever happens at a sleep over, stays at a sleep over. Remember that, ok?" Applejack smiled.

"Got it." Apple Bloom sniffed. "But can I go now?"

"Ah'd wait. Wipe off your face."

"Okay!" Apple Bloom ran off.

"But wait!" Apple Bloom ran back in.

"What?" Applejack looked back at her sister.

"What if... what if....what if...." Apple Bloom couldn't bear the thought.

"What if what?"

"What if...they.. you know...laughed at me?" Apple Bloom was worried.

"Oh, don't worry, just come home. Then Ah'll have a nice little talk with Rarity, that is, if they laugh at you." Applejack rubbed her little sister's hoof.

"But, Applejack-"

"Don't ya worry, lil' sis'. Ah'll handle this." Applejack smiled tentatively into Apple Bloom's little, worried eyes.

"Well, okay. Bye." Apple Bloom ran our of her room.

"Don't forget to pack!" Applejack called.

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"Oh, hey, Apple Bloom!" Sweetie Belle waved to her.

"Hey, girls!" Apple Bloom set her saddle bag down and jumped on Sweetie Belle's roller chair.

"Hey, can we go to the plaza?" Scootaloo asked.

"I wanna just stay here, and eat and make chocolate popcorn!" Sweetie Belle smiled, showing chocolate- covered teeth.

Apple Bloom laughed nervously. She sort of wanted to go to the plaza as well. She wanted to go to Applejack's stand.

Then she looked outside, to see the moon was out, and she was worried.

She was afraid to tell the girls her secret.

"Hey! How about we play Secret Share! But remember, what ever happens at a sleep over, stays at a sleep over!" Apple Bloom set out three pillows to sit on.

"Okay!" The two other fillies sat around the circle.

"Sweetie Belle! How about you go first?" Apple Bloom eagerly suggested.

"Umm...I can liquify toast! And burn juice!"

Her two friends looked at her quizzically.

"What? It's true! Ask Rarity! And Mom!" Sweetie Belle exclaimed.

"Um...I can do a triple-extra-fudge cake in five minutes." Scootaloo said.

"Woah," Sweetie and Apple Bloom were awed.

"Apple Bloom?"

"Uh...."

Apple Bloom needed to think. How about something that involves food?

No, that couldn't work.

I can eat an apple in one bite, with the seeds, Apple Bloom rejected that.

"Umm...."

"We're waiting." Scootaloo siad impatiently.

Apple Bloom hung her head. She couldn't stall any longer.

"Ah-" Apple Bloom was interrupted by Sweetie Belle's mother.

"It's bedtime, girls!" She said cheerfully.

"Okay, mom!" Sweetie Belle said back. Her mother left the room.

"Um, Sweetie Belle?" Apple Bloom asked.

"Yeah?"

"Can I talk with you?"

"Yeah!"

"Come on out."

Sweetie Belle went out in the hall.

"Pinkie Pie Promise you won't laugh?" Apple Bloom asked.

"Yeah!" Sweetie did the motions.

"I-uh- can't sleep in your bed." Apple Bloom said.

"Why? You can tell me anything." Sweetie Belle said honestly.

"I - uh- wet the bed."

"You what?"

"Wet the bed."

"I Still can't hear you!" Sweetie cupped her hoof over her ear.

"I wet. The. Bed." Apple Bloom hung her head, expecting laughter.

"Oh. This is... the most honest news ever! I didn't know that!"

"You aren't going to laugh?"

"No! Let's go tell Scootaloo!"

"Ok." The two fillies walked together.

Comments ( 7 )

if this the only chapter then why dose it say it is incomplete

Rushed, poor grammar, no explanation, the secret is given away as if it were nothing, I could go on and on. Long story short I'm afraid that this fic is:

3542466 Oh, sorry. Thanks for pointing that out!

3542501 that ok and your welcome

... This is 6th grade reading material, if even that. :ajbemused:

It's rushed, and the characters resolve things too easily & predictably. Then it just ends abruptly as well. My advice would be to extend on certain parts. Like AJ going to tell Big Mac to get the keys, and then what Applebloom is doing/thinking in the meantime. Then, you have the problem of "everything went better than expected." That's a bit... Boring. Add some twists! :twistnerd: Sweetie and Scoots are children, after all; they're bound to not take it in a mature manner. Hell, they aren't really expected to. Then maybe with one other character apologizing, saying that they wet the bed too or something. You could continue to the next day, when the bed is wet and Rarity is ABSOLUTELY LIVID.
So many possibilities, so many things to improve. I really don't mean to come off as sounding condescending; I'm just trying to offer some criticism to help you improve. :duck:

No offense, but that was pretty dang bad!
:facehoof: What were you thinking? No, what was I thinking to read this?
Another thing, it was BORING!!!! :pinkiesick:

3549799 Great idea! You shall be honored!:yay:

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