"Hey, you awake?"
Rainbow grumbled in annoyance as her eyes fluttered open. Her eyelids still felt heavy, but her natural stubbornness pushed her to open them and face the new day. Next to her was a black figure with a satisfied grin on his face. Rainbow poked out her tongue at him and tried to roll the other way.
"Ugh, five more minutes, alright? Don't changelings get tired?"
"I was going to ask you the same thing about ponies. Judging by last night’s performance, you rarely do." She lightly punched him in the foreleg. But this only caused the changeling's smile to grow wider. "Anyway, this has been most enjoyable, but I must depart."
Dash's eyes flew open as she quickly shot up from her bed. The changeling made his way towards the window, but took a moment to stretch his limbs out first. Rainbow wasn't completely sure what had come over her, but she knew if he left, it would be the worst possible thing.
Great, now I'm thinking like Rarity, she thought to herself.
"You're leaving today?" She couldn't hide her disappointment from the changeling.
For years, she had dealt with the gossip and rumours about her being gay. Many colts back at flight school were intimidated by a mare who was stronger than them. So to bring her down, they started spreading rumours about her sexuality. They never really stopped, even when she went to Ponyville.
Even her best friend, Fluttershy, had thought she was for several years before realising Rainbow's real preference. As you might imagine, finding a coltfriend was pretty tough when everypony thought you preferred the same sex. So on Saturday nights, she would often find herself drinking her sorrows away, hoping that she would get lucky.
Then she met him.
"I'm sorry, Dash. King Daedalus is expecting me to return with love, and I can't disappoint the hive."
Her eyes pointed downwards.
Left again, she bitterly thought. Well I don't need him! I can go on my own like I always do. Who needs a...
She felt a pair of black lips make contact with hers for just a brief second, before letting go. She shook her head, stunned at the suddenness of the kiss. Then, when her mind caught up with reality, a rosy red covered her cyan cheeks.
"As I said, I must go back to the hive. However, although I have no orders to come back here, I would like to. I... have grown very fond of you. If that is alright with you."
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"Uh, sure. I'm sure I can put you in my schedule," she said as coolly as she could muster. She could only barely contain the untold amounts of glee she had rising in her.
"I am glad. I will see you soon... my love."
With that, the bug-like being flew through the window, leaving the multicoloured pegasus to gaze at him as he flew off.
Then she realised something.
How the buck am I going to tell the girls that I'm dating a changeling?
Very interesting premise, will track
Interesting premise, and from a non-Chrysalis hive.
Also was that supposed to be King Daedalus? Kind Daedalus just sounds awkward. Don't you just love Murphy?
Will fave. and up vote waiting for more
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3388429As a Murphy I represent that remark...and I find it hilarious.
Is that meant to be Kind, or 'King'? Hmm... a changeling? Well he can change any part of his body. Chrysalis, you went about this the wrong way!!
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That remark about "last nights preformance" is that supposed to mean she had sex with him?
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Well, duh.
>Daedalus
How appropriate. The man who made himself some wings as the leader of flying shapeshifters.
Dohoho! Jumping right in I see. Not that I can blame you, based on the prompt.
My (STRONG) recommendation? Give some backstory behind the two of them. How did they get together? What do they have in common? Because their love is certainly what's going to drive the story, and I would hope you'd put at least a bit of effort into getting that explained and elaborated on.
Time to see if this comment is useless! Next chapter!
All of the yes.
YES A CHANGLING FALLING IN LOVE, YET HE SUCKS THE LOVE OUT OF YOU.~SLENDY
But don't you do that too~shyZilla
YOU FOOL I DON'T FEED OFF OF LOVE I FEED ON NEGITIVE EMOTIONS, THAT AND SOULS~SLENDY
Okay, sorry jezz~shyZilla
King Daedalus?
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This guy became a king? Well, that just proves that Chimera and Changelings are related.
And interesting concept. I've never seen Dash with a changeling. {I think Twilight gets most of them and one Applejack centric one. Also Fluttershy with a few.}
Keep up the good work.
{P.s. Chrysalis is the true queen of the changelings. I better not be seeing any heresy.}
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I saw your avatar and I just lol'd
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My curiosity... it has gotten the better of me.
You don't need to quote thoughts. Simple italicization is enough.
I can appreciate this for a story device, but I hate seeing it in stories nonetheless.
This is an interesting dynamic. The problem is that Dash is in love with a changeling, but this changeling not only feeds on love, but is still hiveminded. He works for the King (I am wondering what happened to Queen Chrysalis), and he can't really disobey. Very interesting idea you have here.
Overall, this prologue was interesting. The only problem is that I don't really enjoy the changeling's character right now. It seems too flat, and his dialogue is overdone. It is almost seemingly over-flashy for the sake of trying to be interesting, but he doesn't bring much anything to the table besides being coy.
BUT!
I have faith that this will be corrected, as this is but the writing prompt used. I trust that you have made him far more interesting in the future chapters. Well, chapter for right now.
I am intrigued, and hope you continue at a brisk pace. I think this will be a very successful story.
3390501 EH?! it's you again! please don't yell at me
Fell in love at first sight of the story! Great start!
Ohhh yessss, I like this alot.
A romantic-ethero story with Rainbow Dash and a Cheangeling?
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this has my yes. it'll make for an interesting read.
Holy crap, this seems to be really good o.0 yeah I'll definitely be reading more.
A little over 500 words, and you have completely captured my attention. Please continue.
Dat thought process.
On another note, I'm gonna hop on the bandwagon and say that, even though there were almost no words here whatsoever, I'm already curious as to what happens next. It's not the most original story so far, seeing as it spans off of the dating-a-changeling trope AND the 'I've fallen in love while doing my duty!' trope, but I'm I'm not that picky. Needless to say, you've got another follower. I'm mainly looking forward to the inevitable 'truth coming out' part, since there's always at least one good laugh in that scenario. I'll bet you twenty bits that Pinkie's the comic relief character once that happens.
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OMG!!! WHATTHEFUCKISTHATTHING???????
Suspense is in the air!
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Awesome story so far
Oh this gon' be a fun story!
I already love this story.
I can already imagine what fun this will be
Well apparently anything with changelings i like. Like this.
Very good! This is interesting!
I will laugh for no reason now
*Hysterical laughter*
This'll be interesting...interesting indeed.. :D
Wow! That's a pretty good way to set it up there! I really like this first chapter. Can't wait to see more!
Well this should be interesting to say the least.
Can't wait to hear the back story on these two and how Dashie friends will take it.
And the changelings have a King now? So many question's, but more interested a the comedy and drama.
I have a question is there going to be more chapters like in a day?
This just got interesting. Commence clicking of the favorite button.
Hmmm, Rainbow and a changeling. Welp, let's hop down the rabbit hole and see how deep this goes. Clicking fav button in 3..2..1..
well, he wont disapoint his king^^ I'm sure he'll be bringing lots of love back to the hive^^
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"I have brought forth concentrated love for our great hive, my king. I was able to obtain it through.... very thorough techniques."
"If you know what I mean."
Shit just got real.
okay, in the prologue, cooly, is spelt coolly
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Why did someone thumbs down your comment? Someone should find that prick and kill him/her for that!
So.Many.LIKES
King Daedalus? Do we get to see steampunk changelings?
what does he mean by... love? is it... a... uh.. mares... you know.
You don't, this way you can maximize the misunderstanding and conflict potential, wich could result in: heatbreak, infights, murder, exile, and all sorts of other wonderful stuff to keep us, the gods of reading, entertained 👍🙂
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I don't know why, but that sort of sounds like a comment Discord would make... minus the murder part.