i´m not realy an interesting man, but I like this show, and I want to draw a good fic in english, even if I am from south america
There are problems around Equestria. The stars are disappearing, monsters attack everypony, and the only one who knows what's going on is Princess Celestia, but neither she or the elements of harmony will be enough, the only way to save Equestria lies in the past of the royal sisters.
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Alicorn OCs. Ugh.
I have no idea what the description said. You need to work on you sentence structure and punctuation, bigtime.
Yeah, this story's got more than a few problems. As if the Alicorn OC wasn't off-putting enough.
3357958 Thanks for your advice, i´m very bad at the english because i live in chile
welp i see an alicorn OC...
i.imgur.com/ylAXV.gif
EDIT: your English wasn't all bad but your execution of scenes could be better.
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Well, to be honest, if the description is an indicator of your English writing skill, I'd suggest not writing until you get a better grasp of writing English. You're only hindering yourself right now by giving your account a bad name with this story, and you'd be able to remake it when you get better. Take an advanced ESL course and try again when you can write easily and fluently.
Problems around equestria, the stars disappear, monsters attack a everypony and the only one who knows what's going on is the princess celestia, but neither she o the elements of harmony will be enough, the only way to save equestria this in to the past of the royal sisters.
How about this-
There are problems around Equestria. The stars are disappearing, monsters attack everypony, and the only one who knows what's going on is Princess Celestia, but neither she or the elements of harmony will be enough, the only way to save Equestria lies in the past of the royal sisters.
Better?
You got a good story going here but WillieNelson is right. i suggest taking a break on this fanfic and working on your english. Still, as i said this looks to be a good story and i'd like to read a grammatically improved version