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OH YEAH IT'S ABOUT TO GET REAL!! Seriously though, I look forward to the brutality.
As always another fantastic story from a fantastic author.
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Will do
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I only hope to deliver...
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Well see first ha ha!
I heard a story of a Marine that fought kind of like that during Vietnam, in the way he was wounded and got the kill.
Anyway... great chapter keep up the good work.
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Crazy Marine! Glad the chapter did not dissappoint. On the next ha ha.
its a bit confusing is the narrator a bartender or the person who keeps track of the fighters? other then that you've got my attention i shall read on
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She comes back in chapter 3 actually. It is a mild start for what's to come. Feel free to let me know if its tough to follow or anything.
its probably just me but the fight scene was hard to follow not knowing who did what but ill figure it out .... eventually
Wow really likeing this so far
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No I think your right, I need to have some more focus on footing. I was trying to covey Applejack's inability to follow the fight because of her shock. I need to figure out how to make that better. Appreciate the input.
3267560 Nice to see you again. Glad you like it so far. I was worried the bank transfer part would be boring.
Thank goodness it was not.
well i had a better time tracking who did what but there is still a few difficulties (sorry i cant be more perceive
) and i was able to understand parts better overall ill give 7/10 for tracking and understand ability
untill the next chapter i leave you to your writing
hey i actually know who said and did what... that is a victory worthy of a pinkie pie party
lol but in all seriousness this was a great chapter some grammar errors with miss placement of " ever few lines and maybe others
do a reread and plez fix the few errors 
other then that great job and can't wait for the next chapter
Hey!!!! Guess what!
You made another FUCKING AWESOME CHAPTER!!!
Moustaches all arround!!!
(By the way like my new avatar?)
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Hey dude! Glad to see your still up and running (hopefully away from the IED'd this time!
That avatar is sweet! Where did you pull that out of hA HA!
At least the story is bearable, I plan to try finish it soon then devote my time to Filiorum, although it is being written as we go along. Hope this will continue to remain mildly interesting ha ha!
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I had you in mind the entire time trying to be clearer. Thank you for that. I hope it will get better. Now Applejack is coming out of her daze and things will be clearer.
I Will try to go through and fix all the errors of speech marks thank you. Would you be interested in proofread editing? Only asking. If not, hope you continue to enjoy the story!
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Really you pulled out the IED?...
Ha Ha!!!! Yea now I know to not go near the shiny things Lol!! Hope you had a safe travel.
oh and before I forget ive almost finished decrypting the language but am still having trouble. I like what you did with using the punctuation marks to make the letters! Really creative. Keep up the good work.
3314834I have never been offered something like this before
hmmmm, sure could be fun
can't wait, I guess i'll be proof reading soon so i'll catch you later
im no pro but i'll try
More, My Friend.
3496509 Can do now ha ha.
My my this look interesting~
Will Rainbow Dash be beating anybody up in this story?
3774603 Will twy to make it intewestingererererrerer….er
3835733 It is coming indeed he he.
Alright, I noticed a few spelling errors in the first few paragraphs and punctuation could use some work, you did great with the dialogue, and over all not a bad chapter. Can't wait for the next one
until next time I'm happynoname56 signing off from another great chapter
3836520 And i profusely apologise for them all…I've decided to forgo the tedious grammar rechecking because it inhibits my speed and capacity. as long as the readers enjoy it, thats what counts!
I am still very happy you enjoyed despot the maimed grammar and what not. hope you are there to make sure it remains enjoyable! ha ha