Durring a creation of a crystal our main protaganist is somehow teleported to a complete distent world were he is found differnt from others. His adventures starts for a reason why it happen and how to return home. ((INFORMATION: Since some changes have been made to FIM since whenever i wasent on I'll have to list down the Main charaters later on in the decritption.))
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Final Fantasy IV!!!
This was my first FF. And it's crossed over with ponies? I'm interested!
Seems like it could be better written. Generally, you will want to start a new paragraph when a different character speaks. Example:
"Hey Twilight!" exclaimed Pinkie Pie, bouncing up and down in place.
"Oh, hi Pinkie Pie." replied Twilight, smiling at the bouncing pink blob.
Kinda like that.
Another thing is that this seems a bit rushed, and I noticed a number of punctuation errors. But I'll give it a chance!
"Stepping inside I had to shield me eyes from being blinded I took a feet inside until the entrance vanished."
That 'me' there made me read the rest of the fic like a pirate.
keep up the good work
270270 I pretty much did the same thing... ARR!
Resentence should be resistance
270270
What huh? whoops i fix that arr
270166 yeah most of this is going to be changed redone and a lot more. Sigh
but hey thx for the tips 
272311 alright I see your point yes i figured out FS was out of sceen when you told me but I just can't get charaters right
and i let that happen god iam just missing stuff 
also facedesk repeatly.
For that moment to let you know you screwed up now then she laughs ----->
Somepony needs a prereader, like me.
As I recall softs get rid of the stone status ailment right?
2047978 Yup you are correct.
Should this be there?