• Member Since 26th Feb, 2012
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this is about a man in a lonely life that had no friends no family and a dead end job. but one day while at home a portal is made where it goes he doesnt know but is entriged the rest is in the story....

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I think you should edit this and add capitals, you seem to jump right into the action as well

this seems very generic, i havent even started reading,but i'll give it a shot and see if it differs from anyone elses HiE

yeah... u need to work on grammar alot more... alot. story wise, it seems like any other story, u shuld try and make it unique somehow.
THE GRAMMAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Wunderbar!

It's a generic Human in Equestria story!

im very sorry i will edit this story:derpytongue2:

265626 let me guess you didnt like it did ya :fluttercry:

there ya go hope you injoyed :pinkiecrazy:

I liked the story but I did notice a couple of spelling errors though.:rainbowhuh:

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