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Johnnyshasha


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when Jason Quinn follows the sound of screaming into a dark tunnel, the last thing he expected was to emerge into a land that should only belong on a T.V. screen. Now watch as Jason begins to truly appreciate human and pony nature, getting in touch with his roots while simultaneously adopting new traditions and values,all the while attempting to not taint this lust and murder free world.

In this story I want to focus on Jason's connection to humanity and how it conflicts with ponies (IE. instead of trying to force an enemy to submit without hurting it at any cost, like a pony would, Jason goes straight in for a kill) in doing so, I will most likely talk about humanities origins, the cultural evolution that lead to Jason, and why ponies are incapable of understanding it. This is a unique concept (i hope) because it deals with why humans and ponies do things on a primal level, such as dietary needs and evolutionary traits, as well as on a cultural level, such as resource demand and war frequency. All the while I will be attempting to write a standard adventure story with occasional tear jerking scenes, hilarious moments, and heart stopping action. There's also the possibility i might get lazy and end up writing a story about Celestia's plot. we'll see!

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feel free to review, and be honest.

Also, Please PM me if you are interested it becoming my editor, and Guy who I PM in the middle of the night with convoluted story idea's.

I thought that was a great story keep up the great work. :pinkiehappy:

not half bad. good start, no major errors.
we'll be watching

much, much more to come. i actually have the first half of the story written. I just need to do my painfully huge editing process now. :raritycry: :raritydespair:

An interesting start.

There was quite a bit of over the top wish fulfillment here. I also spotted quite a few formatting errors, and spelling mistakes, but an editor would sort that out.

Definitely not perfect, but still intriguing.

3105748 Thank you for an honest assessment, that's what I love, and need, in an audience. Wish fulfillment is done (for now... eventually I would like to indulge in a few magical items, but that will be in a later story.) As for the grammatical error's, I am attempting to find an editor. desperately attempting, in fact.

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I vehemently apologize that I can't offer my own services, but I'm unfortunately over-worked already.

3106177not a worry. thank you for your reveiw

looks intresting so far, but be careful not to make him op or mary sue(ish)

Not OP enough make him like a super manly man from old spice commercials and talk with a voice of ULTIMATE POWER!!!

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