I've been a Fan-Fic author for about 2 years, so I bring you the cream of my crops. Mmmmmmmm... Creamy...
A teenage human with nothing interesting in his life other than to be a brony finds that he is going to have to take up the life of a Pegasus thought to be deceased. He's met with many challenges , but one stands out to everypony.
Is he awesome enough to be Rainbow Dash? Or will the loyalty that got him chosen fail to be enough.....
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You might want to go through this and fix the numerous spelling and grammar errors. Other than that, eh, it's an okay fic. Nothing really stands out enough to make it great.
I've found it enjoyable. Something that stands out to me is that the human seems almost still a bit too versed in the finer details of being a pony, but perhaps that goes 'hoof-in-hoof', as it were, with being transformed into one.
The flying thing I can understand better. RD flies so much, it's probably become instinct for her body.
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Glad you enjoyed it.:D
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Glad you wrote it!
Any idea if and when next chapter could be up?
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It should be soon , but not right away.This took at least 2 weeks before I was done proof reading and editing.
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What's that supposed to mean?
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"In a boring world of bieng normal , one human goes from zero to roughly 20% more awesome"
Copied straight from the description. You should know, you wrote it.
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Oh yeah.^^;
Sorry , I thought it was something else.
It's a reference to the "20% cooler" thing.
One of the last things I'd think of while writing this is if my math (which it wasn't supposed to be interpreted as) works out in the description.
I am very interested in this story. The original content is more than i can bear, most human to Equestria stories are the same which disappoints me. However, a human turning into one of the Mane six (Me being a Rainbow Dash maniac) really got me back on my feet for reading fan fictions again, but there is one small problem: The grammar is sloppy, did you even revise your story when you finished writing it?. We could get a lot more reaction from the character, after all it's not everyday that we get turned into a girl! Some sentences (Or thoughts by the character) are not needed, or are pointless to write about. If you want someone to proofread or to edit your story, i will be glad to help you out.
Don't be afraid to ask for help, some of my stories needed revising once in a while. Think about it.
Good day.
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Thanks for offering to proofread, but I've had a registered pre-reader do it and give me some pointers.
I do understand that it may not have the best of reactions, but remember that the main character sees this as a dream so far.
Also, I do think there are a couple of non-sense things strewn around in this. Obvious things that i should have left out.^^;
Thanks for commenting, and I hope you read Chapter 2 when it comes in a few weeks.:D
I think this is a path less traveled as far as HiE stories go.
So far you're doing great with it.
The only critique I can really offer as a non-author is from a grammar Nazi standpoint. Unless you're going for over the top emphasis, use just one exclamation point instead of two for phrases like the last sentence in this chapter: "This is so awesome!" rather than "This is so awesome!!"
Other than that, props to you.
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Thanks for the compliment.
As for the double !, that's just something I do. Personally I think it's been a useful identifier for me as a writer. You may notice only the main character speaks like that.
wait, rainbow just disappeared?no. pinkie baked her into cupcakes. or so pinkie thought.
I just started reading and noticed this : science the incident though. <<< science? you mean since :) I'm surprised this hasn't been pointed out yet (or maybe it has, i didn't read all the comments)
I'll be adding more as i go along :)
I wasn't too the most social person <<< the too has to go =\
I had any important conversations that day I've forgotten all about them <<< I would have/ I would've.
I looked around carefully, and all the while finding out that... <<< and found out that... something like that :)
The orange filly took a small package <<< Applebloom is yellow :(
464736 by 'the orange filly' I meant scootaloo. I know that this isn't the best story out there in terms of grammar, but I'm glad you read it. :D
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oops, my bad :)
I guess I didn't read very carefully :|
To tell the truth, flying is easy. Landing, however, is an entirely different story. I'd learned from my mistakes so far though. I just need to pay attention.
This is true, unless it's a helicopter.
Well...
reality is stranger than fiction. Eh heh.
Great flow of events.
Maybe between the watch, the clock, and the sun, the protagonist won't be able to lose track of time again.
I gave credit where credit is due, hopefully people will know that it was you whom inspired me and therefore they will read your story also. You're fucking awesome dude! I can't wait till the next chapter!
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Thanks. :D
the second i read "HUMANS" i said out loud "oh not lyra!"
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The next chapter is here, just in case you didn't see it yet.
Y U NO POST?
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You know, regents, finals, quality checks.
Sorry, but I can't just generate stuff this good.
Is there an ETA for the next chapter?