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very nice short and to the point. nice to read with a cup of tea.

That was a fast read, it was so-so to me. Not too great, or anything like that. Was okay, but could have been done better.

>>spikethed thanks! And I know, I apologize for the short length

>>ShadowFax I guess that's about as much as I could ask for. This is my first attempt at creative writing

Aww... That was such a sweet story! :unsuresweetie:

Upon re reading it, it's even shorter than I realized I wrote it

*blushes* that's embarrassing :facehoof:

It is good one ;)
I'd like to see more writing from you, it seems that you have talent for this :twilightsmile:

Nice idea and the wiritng isn't too bad, but it could've been better. It was sweet and clear. :twilightsmile:

I liked the sentiment, but the presentation lacked a certain eloquence. Stories with such a focus on complicated emotions should aim for a certain level of poeticalness. I suggest you try to expand your vocabulary a bit before going further.

That said, not bad for a first try. Looking forward to seeing you grow.

Very nice story, although somewhat short. For a first try, it was pretty darned impressive.

Thanks for the input guys, I'm more than confident I can write better than this, and I'm already wishing I spent more time developing and editing this one before I submitted it.

Still, I'm glad if you enjoyed it :twilightsmile:

Also, I just realized, parts where the characters are thinking are supposed to be italicized. Going to fix that

I enjoyed it.
Had this one shelved away in my favorites for just such an occasion :ajsmug:

A nice charming little story. I'm very glad that you shared it with us!:twilightsmile:

The great themes repeat.

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