This is my first FiM fanfiction, hope you enjoy it!
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very nice short and to the point. nice to read with a cup of tea.
That was a fast read, it was so-so to me. Not too great, or anything like that. Was okay, but could have been done better.
>>spikethed thanks! And I know, I apologize for the short length
>>ShadowFax I guess that's about as much as I could ask for. This is my first attempt at creative writing
Aww... That was such a sweet story!
Upon re reading it, it's even shorter than I realized I wrote it
*blushes* that's embarrassing
It is good one ;)
I'd like to see more writing from you, it seems that you have talent for this
Nice idea and the wiritng isn't too bad, but it could've been better. It was sweet and clear.
I liked the sentiment, but the presentation lacked a certain eloquence. Stories with such a focus on complicated emotions should aim for a certain level of poeticalness. I suggest you try to expand your vocabulary a bit before going further.
That said, not bad for a first try. Looking forward to seeing you grow.
Very nice story, although somewhat short. For a first try, it was pretty darned impressive.
Thanks for the input guys, I'm more than confident I can write better than this, and I'm already wishing I spent more time developing and editing this one before I submitted it.
Still, I'm glad if you enjoyed it
Also, I just realized, parts where the characters are thinking are supposed to be italicized. Going to fix that
I enjoyed it.
Had this one shelved away in my favorites for just such an occasion
A nice charming little story. I'm very glad that you shared it with us!
495980 Woah, old-school.
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The great themes repeat.