But... But... But... COME ON! Idiot guy! Make TWI turn you into a pony so that you can actually HAVE a family with her! DUH! *Assumes that the next chapter rectifies this problem*
287379 As Twilight mentioned earlier, the spell can only work on the specific races listed (Earth pony, pegasus, etc) and since humans didn't exist until "you" appeared, obviously humans aren't on that list. That's why Twilight would be unable to turn Applejack back, had she gone through with it.
287379 Plus wouldn't that be kinda going against the whole point of the previous chapter? Loving the other person/pony no matter what and not wanting to change them and all?
And Crowley, damn dude(or perhaps dudette? don' want to assume nothin') you keep succeeding with these fics EVERY TIME. This was one I was against when I heard you were writing it, but I gave it a chance ('cause you wrote it) and you completely wrecked my preconceptions. Probably don't hurt that you're getting amazing at focusing these things on heart. Clopfics these ain't. The mature chapters just work so well and don't clash whatsoever with the others. I wasn't sure how you were going to go from "don't change yourself I love you as you are" to the deed as quickly but you pulled it off.
I guess I should probably finish the last chapter shouldn't I?
PS: Want You Bad by The Offspring came on while reading this chapter. Gawd dammit.
@sonicbrony66 i laughed my ASS off while reading this and i drove four of my five psychiatrists i=FUCKING INSANE!!!!!! BAAAHAAAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!
nevermind. it's cool. not my thing,but still well written.
some possible edits: [your bare skin in full contact with hers] the ponies have a light layer of fur covering the entire body. that's what he would feel on contact.
Not saying that this is bad writing or nothing, but after skimming through this chapter (since I knew what was in it) and reading what I did, I felt like I was going to throw up...
290066 Perfect premise for a coltcuddling HumanxBig Mac gorefic. Oh. My god. Someone write that. Seriously. That would be so wrong. I call upon you, RagingSemi!
Best clopfic I have read. The best thing was that I was drinking red bull while reading ths so I got wingboner. Ugh. Cant wait to explain this to my parents. I can see it now...
Mom: what the hay is that? Me: a wingboner... Dad: Yes! He's a man now! *pats back* Go and make me some foals! Mom: ? Dad: What? I started to think that he was a homo.
*sniff* Im not homo... Just not interested in dating mares at the time. Why am I so misunderstood?
.... Well, you warned me, and I ignored it. End result: Neutral. While I have (out of curiousity, ha ha.) watched zoo, and been oddly aroused by it, I don't think I'd take part in it. Though I do draw a line between sapient-creature and animal, there'd still be too close a relation for me to go through with it unless very, very drunk or enchanted. But me aside, it was (no pun intended) a touching bit. But, that being said, and he begin Human and her being Pony, I guess that means that he's *Borrows Rainbow's sunglasses* Hung like a horse. YAAAAAAYYY!
Damn Crowley. This was pretty well done. Sweet and sensual. I had to, erm, "control myself" for like 45 minutes. Dayumm. Pay off was nice. Glad to gave read this.
287405 Well technically, since humans didn't exist in Equestria until now, there's no definite telling whether the spell would work on humans or not. I know you probably intend it so that it wouldn't work on humans. I'm just saying that because they don't have evidence to go on, there's no way to be 100% sure unless they actually try. This is an observation, and not a correction (because I don't know if my 'correction' is the right terminology). But I think when you said "climatic", I think it's supposed to be spelled "climactic" (with a C before the T). I could be wrong though (since the spellchecker didn't try to correct either of the spellings). Perhaps both of the terms are correct.
Those drawings are amazing! Who did it??? It's exactly like the show, should applejack let her hair down in the series itself. I love it man. I wanna draw like that
And I can't fight this feeling anymore. I've forgotten what I started fighting for. It's time to bring this ship into the shore, And throw away the oars, forever. Cause I can't fight this feeling anymore. I've forgotten what I started fighting for. And if I have to crawl upon the floor, Come crushing through your door, Baby, I can't fight this feeling anymore.
i.imgur.com/0kO8L.jpg
Sigh...
283967
clop clop clop
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW YEAH
But... But... But... COME ON! Idiot guy! Make TWI turn you into a pony so that you can actually HAVE a family with her! DUH! *Assumes that the next chapter rectifies this problem*
ummmmmm wat
My face didn't show any emotion, I was sitting very still while reading this, there was only one part of my body which didn't lie. *hint hint*
283967 hahahahaha
287379
As Twilight mentioned earlier, the spell can only work on the specific races listed (Earth pony, pegasus, etc) and since humans didn't exist until "you" appeared, obviously humans aren't on that list. That's why Twilight would be unable to turn Applejack back, had she gone through with it.
I feel ya bro
I feel ya bro
287379 Plus wouldn't that be kinda going against the whole point of the previous chapter? Loving the other person/pony no matter what and not wanting to change them and all?
And Crowley, damn dude(or perhaps dudette? don' want to assume nothin') you keep succeeding with these fics EVERY TIME. This was one I was against when I heard you were writing it, but I gave it a chance ('cause you wrote it) and you completely wrecked my preconceptions. Probably don't hurt that you're getting amazing at focusing these things on heart. Clopfics these ain't. The mature chapters just work so well and don't clash whatsoever with the others. I wasn't sure how you were going to go from "don't change yourself I love you as you are" to the deed as quickly but you pulled it off.
I guess I should probably finish the last chapter shouldn't I?
PS: Want You Bad by The Offspring came on while reading this chapter. Gawd dammit.
WHY DO I ALWAYS LAUGH WHEN I READ THESE?!?!?!?! ITS WIERD!!!!!!! IM INSANE!!!!! GUAAARGH!!
i.imgur.com/0kO8L.jpg
this is why i always say: love is love, no matter who it's with.
I love the occasional pictures.
It was kinda hard for me to visualize AJ without her hair tied up.
Also, smexy.
5/5 GREAT story so far, def okay with the lines of logic here :P
nice pic bro
@commentator EETEP!!!
@sonicbrony66 i laughed my ASS off while reading this and i drove four of my five psychiatrists i=FUCKING INSANE!!!!!! BAAAHAAAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!
she’s got no objection to it.
pinkie.ponychan.net/chan/files/src/133013955835.jpg
That was great, ahhhhhhh..... but no boner. Penis, I am dissapoint.
*reads first sentence.*
I don't know, man.
I'm scared.
nevermind.
it's cool.
not my thing,but still well written.
some possible edits:
[your bare skin in full contact with hers]
the ponies have a light layer of fur covering the entire body. that's what he would feel on contact.
I just loved it woudent every one just love to do a pony?....
Backing away now
But still great
i.imgur.com/0kO8L.jpg
oh dear...
Here is a completely unrelated thing
287822embrace your inner insanity it will make you me gusta
Very well written as usual. Now, onto the next chapter!
Not saying that this is bad writing or nothing, but after skimming through this chapter (since I knew what was in it) and reading what I did, I felt like I was going to throw up...
290066 and this is an unrelated post to your post saying my state should of thought about this before someone actually died of it.
But i must ask, how long did you search around for that?
whoaa that was rly good i wouldnt say its exactly my kinda thing but i still thought it was very well written
Why don't you just label this teen and put the mature warning in the chapter name (like you did)?
294419 Wouldn't be allowed under site rules.
290066 Perfect premise for a coltcuddling HumanxBig Mac gorefic.
Oh. My god. Someone write that. Seriously. That would be so wrong. I call upon you, RagingSemi!
Best clopfic I have read. The best thing was that I was drinking red bull while reading ths so I got wingboner. Ugh. Cant wait to explain this to my parents. I can see it now...
Mom: what the hay is that?
Me: a wingboner...
Dad: Yes! He's a man now! *pats back* Go and make me some foals!
Mom: ?
Dad: What? I started to think that he was a homo.
*sniff* Im not homo... Just not interested in dating mares at the time. Why am I so misunderstood?
....
Well, you warned me, and I ignored it. End result:
Neutral.
While I have (out of curiousity, ha ha.) watched zoo, and been oddly aroused by it, I don't think I'd take part in it. Though I do draw a line between sapient-creature and animal, there'd still be too close a relation for me to go through with it unless very, very drunk or enchanted.
But me aside, it was (no pun intended) a touching bit. But, that being said, and he begin Human and her being Pony, I guess that means that he's
*Borrows Rainbow's sunglasses*
Hung like a horse.
YAAAAAAYYY!
OH MY GOD!!THOSE AJ BEDFACES!!
How does he not recognize modified doggy style?
Fun chapter
........I.......what......did i just buck a pony as a humman?
290066
Did I read that correctly?
Something else I noticed. How did no pony else in the house not hear any of this occurring? Unless-
Never mind.
Damn Crowley. This was pretty well done. Sweet and sensual. I had to, erm, "control myself" for like 45 minutes. Dayumm. Pay off was nice. Glad to gave read this.
286242 who said erection?!
i find it fucked up that i skipped to the mature warning lolwut
no clopping here i found the storey to awsome to think that way
287405
Well technically, since humans didn't exist in Equestria until now, there's no definite telling whether the spell would work on humans or not. I know you probably intend it so that it wouldn't work on humans. I'm just saying that because they don't have evidence to go on, there's no way to be 100% sure unless they actually try.
This is an observation, and not a correction (because I don't know if my 'correction' is the right terminology). But I think when you said "climatic", I think it's supposed to be spelled "climactic" (with a C before the T). I could be wrong though (since the spellchecker didn't try to correct either of the spellings). Perhaps both of the terms are correct.
Those drawings are amazing! Who did it??? It's exactly like the show, should applejack let her hair down in the series itself. I love it man. I wanna draw like that
And I can't fight this feeling anymore.
I've forgotten what I started fighting for.
It's time to bring this ship into the shore,
And throw away the oars, forever.
Cause I can't fight this feeling anymore.
I've forgotten what I started fighting for.
And if I have to crawl upon the floor,
Come crushing through your door,
Baby, I can't fight this feeling anymore.
*smiles and nods slowly in approval*
Yes, indeed.
That's Hot.
289270 You mean anthro? I write a lot of that!
Nopenopenopenopenopenopenope! Not a boner to be had here, definitely not in front of the roommates!
283967 I know your feel. angryboner.