An errand for the Princess that goes deep into the Everfree Forest turns sideways for Twilight Sparkle when she finds herself suddenly trapped in an asylum in a dark alternate universe where the only way to survive is to escape.
With the help of five other ponies that parallel her friends, Twilight struggles to return to her own universe, but even the world she knows is not at all what it seems...
This is my one of my first pony fanfics, so if I make a mistake, please feel free to correct me.
Chapters (2)
Neat. Interesting use of {those marks} for a thought bubble. Color me intrigued.
you should make more these are good.
OH SNAP!!
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YOU WROTE A STORY ABOUT PONIES!!
AND POSTED IT!
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The day before I leave for camp...
(BTW, I'm leaving for a two-ish week camp today.
I will read it when I get back as I do not think I will have ANY internet while I'm away. Sigh.
THIS SHALL BE THE FIRST THING I READ WHEN I GET BACK!
Ok, good luck, ta ta!
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Thanks! I borrowed the thought bubble thing from my friend because it's much easier to do than using italics.
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Thanks! I'll definitely be finishing this story and I have a few more on the go that I will post soon, too!
Dramatic reveal, anyone? I'm guessing if it's not an OC, it'll be one of the Princesses. My bet's on Luna (if she isn't an inmate in the asylum
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Alright, I have a little bit of time at home before I'm off to another camp. I will take this time to read as much as I can.
First of all, an update and a new story while I'm away?!!? You wound me, Crimson. Would it kill you to wait until I can read them?
Oh well. What is done is done. I will now read and point out any typos/errors I see.
Don't need a comma after but. Having one before is fine, but you do not need one after.
I think you have an extra capital here.
A few times you forget to indent but that is all that I saw. Easy enough of a fix.
Well, that's all I have time for right now. I will try and read the next chapter ASAP.
One last thing:
Crazy RD is best RD.
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Heh heh thanks, I just fixed it
I have a feeling that you will like this story.
when is the next chapter coming out?
DUN DUN DUNNNN!!!
Oh, hey! I'm back from camp now! Not going to another one until sometime in September.
Anyway, I'm off to read the other story you posted in my absence.