The Mane 6 take a vacation to the island of Teyen for some scuba diving. Or, that is what the writer wants them to do. Join the narrator, the author, and the pre-reader as they attempt to get the story moving in some manner while dealing with problems no writing team should have to deal with.
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Well, I did not know I could find my own. Enjoy, and please feel free to rip it to shreds. The revelation is true by the way, I am a pre-reader who decided to write a story. Did I at least get the grammar correct? I hope I'm still doing my job.
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So my feelings on this random, AU, Self-insert-"ish," nonsensical, I-have-no-idea-what-the-hay-I-just-read, first fic of my Pre-reader... Very ambitious, possibly a bit to much so for it's own good, but certainly could have been a heck of a lot worse, and there certainly were a lot of worse fics submitted for the contest. All in all, not entirely sure how I feel about this either...
I would really like to see you try something with the fourth walls clearly in place, or at least with only Pinkie Pie having the keys.
A few points though: even if the discussion is breaking the fourth wall please double space when switching between character's dialogs, even if one of those characters is the "author." It just makes reading it easier. Also, I have never before heard of any creature, real or fictional, posses the ability to "sigh" with an exclamation point. It's an interesting concept to be sure, but you may want to go easy on the exclamation points in general. You only want to use them to end sentences with particularly strong assertive/aggressive emotion. Use them for
not for 
Being that this fic was random as hell it's hard to give any other advise or critiquing.
As I said before, could of been a lot worse.
A few spelling problems that may have snuck through your auto-spell-checker. Other than that a nice piece of meta-aware writing. Never has the fourth wall been broken so wonderfully... it is like origami with explosives and masonry.... ok, maybe a paper airplane...
Well, this is a much better reaction than I was expecting. Thanks! And for ajaysallthat, my work here is done.