Princess Celestia has peen ruler of equestria for a long time, she and her sister Princess Luna are the only ones who would ever remember these creatures as real. Those who do know them, know them only as myth. They were the first equestrians, the dominant species, and although eons have come to pass along with them..not all of them disappeared.
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Ignore this. Wrong fic
Not bad. A few punctuation errors, like forgetting to close quotes here and there, but nothing immensely wrong. The dialogue was pretty durn decent, I'd just suggest you find someone to be your editor, and help you with the grammar and punctuation.
On the other hand, what's really the biggest difference between this and all other HIE's? I'd suggest you make certain we know this eiher in this chapter or the next one.
Try fixing the punctuation, possibly spacing after commas (I learned that the hard way), capitalization, and ways of transitions, but otherwise, it's fine.
Thank you for listening.
Intrensting story so far by the way what did princes Celestia mean when she said he woud redone what he already did?
2683947 My apologizes i may have not made that very clear, she is concerned that if he were to break out (which he did) he could wipe out another species. In this cause the Equestrians