Celestia’s Tiny Student
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Chapter 12
Celestia’s Tiny Adventure
Twilight’s eyes slowly reopened as she regained consciousness. “That was such a crazy dream I just had,” Twilight mumbled to herself as she sat up and rubbed at her eyes.
A small hoof tapped her on the shoulder. “Perhaps you would like to share what this dream exactly was about?” Celestia said, laughing as Twilight turned around to face her, flabbergasted. “Yes Twilight. It’s me, your mentor,” Celestia continued, noticing the telltale signs in Twilight’s expression. “Twilight? Twilight, please don’t panic.”
“P-princess Celestia? But but but... HOW!” Twilight screamed as Celestia was pushed several inches away by the strength of her student’s voice, wincing.
Celestia cleared her head with a shake before marvelling at exactly how much the distance between her and her student had increased. So those years of shouting, so other ponies could understand her, have apparently made Twilight’s voice extremely powerful, she thought, before shaking her head again. It reminds me a bit of the ‘Royal Canterlot Voice’ my sister and I had used in the past.
“A little quieter please, Twilight. There is no need to be quite so loud,” Celestia stated calmly, causing Twilight to blush in embarrassment.
“S-sorry.”
“It is fine, Twilight. I understand. But for now, would you like to take a guess as to why I am so small?” Celestia said, a challenging tone to her voice as she reproached her student.
Twilight thought for a short moment before answering. “You used the shrinking spell on yourself, didn’t you? I had no idea that was possible.”
Celestia gave a refined laugh. “It is more than possible, my faithful student. While shrinking other ponies would require their cooperation or, in your case, an uncontrollable power surge, casting a spell on oneself is far simpler, as you can use your own magic to supply it. The main drawback is, that you need a lot of magic to both cast and maintain the spell, but I can assure you, I have more than enough reserves for that,” Celestia explained as Twilight berated herself for not having a notepad to write all of this information down.
“But princess, why would you shrink yourself in the first place?” Twilight asked, both curious and worried. “You can’t possibly rule Equestria while being so small, and what if something happens to you, or what if somepony accidentally stomps on you, or what if—” Twilight was cut off by her mentor’s hoof.
“Ssshhh... let me explain,” Celestia said. Twilight simply nodded and went silent as her mentor began. “First, I can dispel the effects of the shrinking spell any time I want. And second, from now on, I plan on using the shrinking spell on myself whenever I spend time with you.”
Celestia paused as Twilight nodded again, listening intently. “As for why I shrunk myself,” she continued, “I just wished to see the world from your perspective. You said yourself that you find joy in your life, and I wish to experience it myself.” Celestia concluded with cheerful smile as she waited for Twilight’s reaction.
“B-but isn't it dangerous to be so small? You can’t possibly put yourself at such risk, Princess,” Twilight plead, though her expression quickly changed to one of confusion when Celestia simply began laughing again. “Ummm... why are you laughing, Princess?”
Celestia’s laughing slowly abated and she stared back into her student’s eyes, which were so much larger, now that she was the same height as her. “May I ask in return, why you can put yourself in danger everyday and I cannot, my faithful student?” Celestia asked without breaking eye contact for even a moment.
Twilight scratched the back of her neck with a hoof before answering hesitantly, “B-but I am just your little pony... I mean, your subject. Even if I get hurt, it won’t have any long-term consequences, but if you—”
Celestia raised a hoof to cut her student off. “Oh, I see! So, just because I am the Princess of Equestria, I should be sitting on my throne with hundreds of my guards and servants watching over me. Perhaps wait for that one day, when a random dragon or villain will boldly capture me and lock me in a tower, where I will need to wait for a Knight in Shining Armor to aid me?" Celestia said, clearly amused as Twilight broke eye contact without a reply. “Twilight, I may be a ruler, but I am also an alicorn. In all those hundreds of years, my magic has grown stronger, such that even now, I can face entire armies alone. My inherent magic lets me endure injuries that would kill hundreds of other ponies, and I’ll be completely honest with you, I could protect all of my Royal Guards better than they could possibly protect me.”
Twilight stared back at the princess, shocked that her mentor possessed such incredible durability and somewhat dismayed that such information was not readily available to her in convenient book form.
“Twilight,” she continued, “for hundreds of years, I have played the role of a high and mighty ruler and did what my subjects expected of me. I never used my wings, as it was expected of me to ride in a chariot.” She paused and attempted to flare her wings, only to remember that they were bound to her sides with magic ropes.
Stymied, she continued. “I never teleported or galloped from place to place as it would seem improper for a pony of my position,” Celestia said with annoyance in her voice, before she sighed and smiled again, “but today I wish to try something new, something that I could never do as a ruler, and all I ask you is to support me in this and to let me experience the world from your eyes. Let me be who I was when Equestria was not as safe and peaceful as today,” Celestia stated calmly, her irritation from earlier vanishing.
Twilight saw determination in Celestia’s eyes and smiled. “I understand, Princess, and I am truly sorry. For all those years, I tried to prove to you and every pony that I can take care of myself despite my size, and yet the moment you shrunk yourself, I dared to doubt you,” Twilight said apologetically.
“Apology accepted, though from now on, please do not refer to me as your ruler or mentor. As long as we are the same size, we are equals, just two small ponies both looking for adventure. Could you do this for me?“ Celestia asked firmly.
“Yes prin—I mean—of course, Celestia! So, what would you like to do on your first day of your tiny adventure?” Twilight joked, grinning broadly.
Celesta rolled her eyes before she pointed her tiny hoof at another pile of big books lying in front of her, “I saw how you returned a book you read back to the bookshelf without an extensive use of your magic, and I’d like to try it as well. What would you say about a race?” Celestia said, more than a little enthusiastic about the first real bit of exercise she’d have in over three centuries.
Twilight nodded, grinning deviously. “Lets do this,” she challenged before she levitated one book on top of another and crawled under it, lifting this time two books on her back. Celestia did the same, the weight of the books on her back bringing back memories of the heavy weighted vest she’d worn during the snowball war a while back. On one hoof, it was the first time she had lifted anything for many hundreds of years, but on other hoof, her inherent earth pony magic made it feel almost natural.
Their horns glowed in unison, and magic ropes once again secured the two to their loads. “On my mark, prin—Celestia. Ready... set... go!” On her signal, Twilight almost effortlessly bolted for the correct bookshelf while the laden Celestia lagged behind slightly.
As soon as Twilight reached the bookshelf, she sprang up as high as she could, the task made much more difficult by the extra weight compared to last time. Celestia took note of her student’s methods and made her best effort to emulate them, but found that more than once, she was forced to readjust the books or her hoofholds so that she would not fall back down.
A full minute passed, and Celestia had found a small alcove between the books to rest in, having climbed a good five shelves. She wiped off the growing amount of sweat on her brow and looked up to see where Twilight had gone. Her face glowed with embarrassment at her condition when she located Twilight already attempting to ascend to the tenth shelf. How does she do this so easily?
Celestia huffed in annoyance before hoisting herself back up and preparing to continue upwards. She jumped up and grabbed on to the top of the book beside her, but as soon as she attempted to use her back hooves to climb upwards, she bumped the one of the bookends, and the entire row of books slipped under her.
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A loud thud of two books falling to the floor of the library was easily noticeable in the quiet environment and Twilight wasted little time in jumping back down to her mentor. Her legs bent under the additional weight from the books on her back as she landed, though she quickly sprang back up, trotting towards the fallen princess.
To Celestia’s embarrassment, she was pinned to the top of her two books by her magic ropes, not unlike a turtle that had rolled onto its back, but before she could dispel the ropes to try again, she felt as Twilight uprighted her again with a touch of magic. Celestia gave her student a brief smile before she turned away to hide her embarrassed face. “Thank you Twilight,” she said, “but we still have a race to finish.”
Twilight rolled her eyes in amusement and once again began climbing up on a bookshelf, passing her mentor easily. as she reached her destination. Without issue and quickly, she slipped her books in the right places before climbing back down to her mentor, who at this point was still halfway to her goal. “Uhhh…” Twilight began hesitantly. “Do you need a hoof, Princess?”
Celestia shook her head in disagreement as she attempted to put more strength into lifting both her little body and her payload. She made an effort to hide her lack of stamina from her student, but Twilight could easily see the strain in her mentor’s face as sweat accumulated on her head.
Celestia did make it to her goal, followed closely by a Twilight wary of her mentor’s physical capabilities. With the help of her student, she slipped the books back into the open spots before she sat back exhausted.
“Congratulations, Princess! You did it!” Twilight said enthusiastically, clapping her hooves together.
Celestia took several deep breaths, wiping the moisture from her forehead. “Twilight... just call me... Celestia... There is no need... for formality.”
“O-of course, Celestia. Would you like to take a break? You seem to be a tad winded from climbing up so far, especially twice now.” Twilight asked, looking worriedly at the heavily breathing princess.
Celestia took a deep breath, slowly exhaling before she continued. “I am quite fine, Twilight; the experience is just new to me, that’s all. I am slowly adapting,” Celestia replied before pointing her hoof down at the floor. “How about a race around this bookshelf next?”
Twilight looked down at the floor from the top of the bookshelf, nodding in agreement. Without further ceremony, Twilight jumped straight down, landing with a small tumble to lessen the impact.
Celestia looked down after Twilight, staring uneasily at the nearly six meters of distance that Twilight had just dropped without any issue. Not wishing to show fear to her student, she followed Twilight’s example and leapt off after her, her eyes closed shut and her wings instinctively straining to break free of their restraints as she fell.
In mere seconds, she landed at the bottom, though she didn’t land nearly as hard as she had imagined. Celestia opened her eyes and noticed her student smiling at her. “It may look scary at first,” Twilight stated, “but since our weight is reduced, the fall isn’t quite as dangerous as it seems, and thanks to the protection spell you cast on me, and probably on yourself as well, the risk is lessened even further.” She concluded with another smile, before she turned to pull a couple books out of the shelf to act as a starting line.
Celestia considered her student’s words. My student is correct in that aspect, but I believe she doesn’t know that as an alicorn, I have pegasus magic in me as well, which can make me lighter depending on my activity. Perhaps I can make this into a lesson at some future date...
“Princ—I mean, Celestia, perhaps you should prepare yourself for the race,” Twilight said, knocking Celestia out of her contemplation before they both approached the starting line.
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Although Celestia completely expected the outcome of the race, it still didn’t sting any less when she finally reached the finish line with Twilight waiting there for her patiently, only a few signs of physical strain showing on the young mare while the princess sat there utterly exhausted and drenched in sweat.
Celestia had expected Twilight to offer her time to rest, so she quickly offered her another challenge to hide her physical ineptitude, deciding for a marathon around the library rather than a sprint and hoping that she’d have more luck with this sort of challenge.
As the marathon started, however, Celestia was a tad confused when she noticed her student running at a much more leisurely pace than she, so she slowed down, drawing even with Twilight, and asked, “Excuse me, Twilight, but why are you running so slowly?”
Twilight smiled and replied enthusiastically, “I read in a book that when you run a long distance race, it is important to save your energy and to perhaps enjoy the view along the way. When the other ponies are too tired to put on a boost of speed, you can easily pass them and sprint to the finish line.”
Celestia resisted the urge to facehoof. Despite over a millennia of experience, she had become so alien to physical activity that she had not even considered saving her energy. She quickly changed her methods, keeping the same speed as Twilight as she conversed with her on topics ranging from magic to the fun of being so tiny.
Eventually, similarly to the previous two challenges, Celestia began to tire once more, her breathing becoming labored and ragged as she tried to keep up with her student. She continued her conversation with Twilight, the light, rhythmic breathing of her student contrasting greatly with her own deep breathing. It says much about my physical condition when Twilight can overcome me so easily, even without the earth pony and pegasus magic that I have, she thought, her mind turning increasingly inwards, as she berated herself for her weakness.
“Hey princess!” Twilight Sparkle exclaimed. “We’re almost back to where we started. Would you like to see who can reach the finish line first?”
Celestia looked at her student, an eyebrow raised in interest. My student has worked so hard for so many years, trying to make me proud of her. I would be a fool to think that I could defeat her at her own game, especially on my first day. Then again, earth pony magic alone is worth nothing without hard work, she thought. She gave a small nod at Twilight before sprinting for the finish, a surge of determination giving her strength for one final burst of speed. Just you wait, Twilight. You have proved that even despite your weaknesses as a unicorn, you can still be a strong athlete. I shall prove to you that, even though I am restricted in my physical capabilities as a ruler now, I can be strong, too!
Celestia ran for the finish line, noticing that her student had put on her own burst of speed, grinning in delight. If her student can endure pain and suffering for her own self improvement, so would she.
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Celestia unsurprisingly came in a distant second to her student, so when Twilight once again offered her a break, she accepted it without protest. After a few minutes of rest, Twilight asked, “So, what do you want to do next, Celestia?”
The princess thought for a moment, as an idea crossed her mind. “Considering that last challenges involved physical strength and stamina, I think it is only fair if I will challenge my magic instead,” Celestia said calmly.
“That’s a wonderful idea, what kind of magic will you practice... wait, let me guess, it will be levitation,” Twilight said enthusiastically, as levitating weights was her favourite exercise whenever she trained her magic.
“You are correct, Twilight. Now, what I can levitate?” Celestia asked herself as she look around. “Twilight, can you tell me how heavy this bookshelf is?”
The little mare gazed upon the bookshelf as she spent few minutes running around it, calculating its size. “I would say that it weighs around three or four tons... you aren’t going to levitate it, Princess, are you?” Twilight asked with panic in her voice, as she saw her mentor’s horn lightning up with magic.
Slowly, a golden field of magic began to encompass the giant and long bookshelf. I’m Celestia, ruler of Equestria and guardian of the sun! The steady hum of a levitation spell started to fill the air. I have thousands of years of experience and my strength surpasses even the mightiest of dragons.
Her knees began to shake, before she slowly sank to the ground; the steadily increasing pressure on her tiny body ever rising. Ten kilo. Twenty Kilo. Thirty Kilo. At fourty kilo, her legs buckled and couldn’t support her anymore. This is nothing! If my student endures this kind of pressure… By the sun and moon, so will I !
The steady Hum of magic had become so loud, Twilight had to shout a little to be heard. “Princess, you can’t levitate three tons of weight, the pressure will crush you!,” she said, trying to convince her mentor to stop. She knew from experience what even levitating a sole ton to a tiny pony could do.
Ignoring her students concerns, Celestia put more and more strength into her spell. Sixty kilo pressure. Seventy kilo. Eighty kilo. The swirling of magic around her horn now so bright, that Twilight had to look away. Ha! Now even my own student thinks me weak. I will show her that I am not. I will show Equestria that I am not. I will show them all, their princess is still… wait! “Twilight, what are you doing?”
“I’m helping you, Princess.” Twilights own horn flickered to life as she started to ease some of the weight of the bookshelf from Celestia's back.
“Cease that at once, Twilight! I can do this on my own,” Celestia shouted angrily over the cacophony of noise.
Stunned by her mentor’s outburst, Twilight let her magic slip away. The whole weight came crushing down again on Celestia, the sudden increase pressing her into the floor. Now again, with the mobilisation of her reserves, Celestia poured every ounce of willpower and magic into her spell.
Ninety kilogram. The vortex of magic around Celestia's horn effecting her immediate environment.
I can do this!
One hundred kilogram pressure. The bookshelf began to shake; dust falling from the book-rows.
I can do this!
One hundred and ten kilogram pressure. Twilight watched, as her mentor struggled with her task; fearing for her health.
I CAN DO THIS!
A grin crept over Celestias face.
Three tons of books, wood and dust were slowly rising upwards, as Celestia endured one hundred and twenty times her weight, being pressed into the floor, unable to move a single part of her body.
Twilight could only stare in awe. She had known her mentor was powerful. But in this moment, for the first time, she really had a grasp of how insignificant her own power was, compared to Celestia's might.
After one minute of keeping the bookshelf in the air, the princess slowly put it back on the floor, and the moment the golden aura disappeared, all the weight crushing the princess's body vanished as well.
Twilight ran to her tiny mentor, not noticing any visible damage on her graceful body, outside of many ruffled feathers on her wonderful wings. “Princess Celestia, are you hurt? I better get you to hospital as fast as possible to...” Twilight sentence was cut by her mentors laughter, and for a moment, Twilight even considered that the princess had lost it from experiencing so much pain
“Ummm... princess...?” Twilight said hesitantly, as her mentor was laughing maniacally while lying on the floor. And it was not the small laughter her mentor had from time to time, whenever she was happy. It was a deep, solid, out of control laughter. Similar to older stallions, when one had cracked a very dirty joke.
The princess finally got herself under control again, as she brushed a tear of joy from her eye, and then gazed upon her student, smiling innocently. It did not banish the confusion Twilight felt. “Is everything alright, Princess?” she asked with concern.
Celestia blinked her eyes several times before replying, “I've never felt better.”
Twilight was unsure if what Celestia said was honest, or if her mentor really had lost it. “T-that’s very good to h-hear, Princess,” she said hesitantly, wondering, if her mentor would punish her, if she were to levitate her to the hospital against her will.
“Oh Twilight, I already told you to call me Celestia. I really don’t like formalities, especially when I’m in company of a very close friend,” the alicorn said cheerfully as she took sitting position, her gaze focused on her student.
“Of course, Celestia, though I really think we should visit the hospital. That amazing show of raw power could have harmed you more than you would expect.” Twilight tried her best to convince her mentor to go to hospital on her own free will, knowing full well, that her mentor could remove effect of shrinking spell and defy her anytime she wished.
“Twilight, you are always worry over nothing... I feel fine, really! And in all honestly, I haven’t had so much fun in centuries,” Celestia said with relaxed voice, as she grasped her student’s shoulder with a foreleg. “Once again you were correct, Twilight. The feeling, when magic is flowing through my horn, when I push my body... it was amazing, I felt so free.”
Twilight was still afraid that Celestia should go to the hospital. But, as her mentor was able to at least move her legs without seeming to be in pain, she decided not to voice her concerns for the moment. “I’m glad Prin… Celestia. But I have a question. You got pinned to the floor by the pressure of levitating that huge bookcase, but when raising the sun or the moon, you don’t even break a sweat. Even being your regular height, shouldn’t the raising of a celestial body be even more taxing?”
“Correct once again, you are truly an amazing student.” Twilight blushed as Celestia continued, “Raising sun and the moon is indeed very taxing for my magic, but it is something I got used to, after repeating it over and over every single day. It isn’t even something I can physically experience anymore… but this... I can not remember when the last time I used so much magic to levitate something in my very long life was. And the pain I felt in my body... I've almost forgotten what pain feels like,” Celestia tried to explain to her student without restraining any emotions, almost as if she was drunk from her magic overload.
Twilight was shocked by how casually her mentor spoke with her, it was a side of the princess she had never seen before. Not a strong and mighty mentor, but a fellow pony and a good friend. “I can relate, I feel the same way when I push myself to my limits. Though, I still think we should visit the hospital.”
“Hush Twilight... I’m an alicorn, remember? I may still be pathetic when it comes to my physical condition, for now at least, but I can still survive far worse than being crushed under a weight a few hundred times my mass,” Celestia said as she put hoof on her student mouth, before spreading her wings as the weakened magic ropes broke. “I don't even remember last time I used my wings... would you like a ride?”
Twilight was stunned by her mentor request. Just a moment ago, a tiny alicorn was pinned to the floor. And now, the princess of a proud kingdom - a mighty ruler, who spend thousands of years on her throne, leading and guarding her country - was more than willing to give her a ride on her back.
The little mare looked around to make sure that they are alone, just now noticing that Spike and Cadence had left them alone, wondering, if her mentor was responsible for their absence. “I... would be honored... but, ahh,” Twilight said, but couldn’t finish her sentence, as she felt golden aura levitating her on her mentor’s back.
“No but’s, Twilight Sparkle, I am finally going to spread my wings, and I want to share this experience with you. Hold on tight!” Celestia proclaimed, giving Twilight only a moment to prepare before she jumped into the air.
Celestia, flying everywhere with a chariot, guards pulling it for so many centuries, left a dent in her flying skills, and having a passenger did not make it any easier. But she didn’t mind, only now realising how much she had missed the joy of flying. Twilight, on the other hoof, decided to ignore the weird situation that she just had ended up in, and since there was no pony to witness her flying on the princess’s back, she just played along, enjoying the flight with her mentor far more than she had expected at first.
From that day forward, during every hour Celestia had reserved for her student, she used the shrinking spell on herself and participated in whatever adventure her student could come up with, only now learning how soft she had become after ruling a peaceful nation for so many centuries. Without a worry to embarrass herself in front of her subjects, Celestia took Twilight’s example and challenged herself, steadily improving her own physical condition and skills.
A short half year of adventuring later, Celestia understood why Twilight had chosen a thorny road towards self improvement. Celestia decided to introduce Twilight to a combat magic, trusting her to a fault that she would never use it to hurt anypony deliberately - only to protect herself. She wasn't overly surprised when Twilight enjoyed practicing it, participating in training drills which, were they Twilight’s size, only the most hardcore of her royal guards would go through.
Ah Combat/Battle Magic, the Ancient and High Art of Blowing Crap Up. Very well done chapter
Hold up tight (sould be on)
participating in training drills what only hardcore guards would go through,
Either 'which' or 'that' is more grammatical there.
You know, by the time Twilight is returned to normal size she'll probably be stronger than Big Mac in terms of physical prowess
3365282 well time to blow shit up...{ with explosives not magic ]
keep going this is getting good
“B-but it isn't it dangerous to be so small? (To many it's?)
I suspect that by the time that NMM pops up again Celestia may be able to pown the Nightmare by herself
Nightmare "How did you get so strong?!!??!?!"
Celestia "Nightmare ... Just sit there and be quiet. I do not want to hurt you.. Permanently that is. Twilight and her friends will be here shortly so we can use the elements to clean you up. Wont that be nice? I get Lulu back and we can all have cookies! Win Win!"
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Thank you very much, I am glad you like it.
Beside, we cannot have Twiny without ability to how you called it, "Blowing Crap Up", would we. After everything Twilight had to endure so far, she deserve it.
Futhermore, we would not want Celestia to miss all the action, and now when she is willing to shrink herself, she can adventure with Twilight side by side ( Celestia may had a rough start, but she will improve, practice turn into master, you know, all what is need is a good motivation ).
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I do not really understand what you meant saying that, but I hope it was a good think.
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Twilight may be strong, but not that strong, and even in her normal size, Big Mac is still far bigger then her. Sadly, sometime even with best of efforts, one cannot defeat limits of his body. Twilight may work hard to be an athlete, but her stronger point will always lie in her magic.
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Will do my best. I hope that bonus chapter what will be uploaded tomorrow will not disappoint you. ( I won't give any spoilers, but feel free to guess what will happen,
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I cannot spoil what will happen in the sequel, so you will need to read and wait until you find out. Though I must admit, I hate for Celestia to be useless or put on sidelines for the sake of the conflict, so I will ensure that she will have her moments to shine and something to do.
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Fixed, thanks for pointing it out.
// I am going to sleep for today. I hope that tomorrow I will be able to reply on more comments.
Furthermore, lets play a little game. Since bonus chapter will be uploaded tomorrow, try to guess what will happen in bonus chapter ( you can give maximum three ideas what may happen in a comment ).
Names of those who guess correctly will be put in autor notes in the bonus chapter as "Guessing Masters ).
Best of luck for those who decide to participate.
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Honestly I like to think that Celestia taught her battle magic even in canon, Twilight would want to learn it anyway and better to have supervision.
Also... I know where you stand on the whole uselestia thing, I've been meaning to pass this along to you. Read about the Guile Hero, it is the hero archetype that fits Celestia fairly well.
3366190 misspelled word last chaper near the end.
“No but’s, Twilight Sparkle, I am finally going to spread my wings, and I want to share this experience with you. ((Hold up tight!”)) Celestia proclaimed, giving Twilight only a moment to prepare before she jumped into the air.
Ah yes, the timeless art of training your power of die.
All twilight needs is a sword. It is a good power of die to have.
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Well, Celestia have almost two thousands knowledge and experience when it comes to terms of combat magic, sadly, after hundreds years of peace, she forgot most of it, but do not worry, I am sure that while she teaches Twilight combat magic, she will remember many spells she once knew one at a time ( an arsenal of spells what may come useful during Nightmare Moon return ).
I already mesaged you about it, but I do not like idea of Celestia being just Guile Hero, because technicaly she is the most powerful player on the good side, and being Guile Hero mean that while those she manipulate are fighting against the odds, she herself never use her powerful magic.
That is why I am planning to make Celestia a mix between Guile Hero and Action Hero, so she can still be cunning and manipulative, while her power will not be wasted ( it kind of seems sad that when far weaker hero do 125% to save the world and fight against the odds, the good character what have like 400% of hero power is just giving orders and never using it, though this is just my personal preference that characters with power should not resort only to manipulation as it seems unfair for those who she manipulate and use for greater good ).
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Fixed, thanks for the pointers.
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Sword is a weapon focusing on a brute force, while Twiny is both strong but also fast and agile one.
I think fencing sword would suit her the most, as it is a quick weapon what strike small weak point on your opponent, while weapon itself is lighter and very sharp, perfect to be pushed into enemy with powerful levitating force.
( If any weapon, fencing sword is best choice for tiny Twilight in my opinion... that or dagger ).
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Oh she will, and their reaction will be priceless.
Well, to be perfectly honest, as much as non-epic and rushed Celestia's defeat was, she at least took in a fight, while guards were defeated off screen without a single fighting scene outside of being tied up.
Beside, this didn't happened yet, and if anything, I PINKIE PROMISE to make Royal Wedding chapter far more epic and plot-holes free, but it is for a looong future, so Celestia will have much time to train herself before facing Chrysalis.
In Twiny case, she do both
Both her mind and body is strong, so what did you expect ?
OH THE DESTRUCTION FIELD REVOLVING AROUND THE ACCELERATION OF SMALL PROJECTILES TO HYPERSONIC SPEEDS AND CAUSING MATERIALS TO 'SPONTANEOUSLY' COMBUST OR FREEZE OR SEVERAL OTHER THINGS COMBAT RELATED THROUGH THE USE OF THAUMATIC ENERGY! A.K.A. Battle Magic
Anyway, this is getting pretty interesting
Omigod NEW CHAPTER!!! :D Now for the comments I promised
[Suspensful music]
o-o You've just lifted 3 tons, about 5 or 10 times your weight. You are TINY, and you say THAT?!
[I got too tired to read on at this little point, then again it's 3AM so I better get some sleep. My place will stilll be saved, i'll leave the computer on but the monitor off, so my mom won't get any suspicions on what I am reading, so be back in the fic in about 12 hours maximum]
[And i'm back an noon! WOOHOO! Now let's continue.]
Oyus!
And I paused when there were only 4 paragraphs left! Smack me!
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Yay! This was adorable. Although the pic above made no sense since it was an adorable tea cup / lamp thingie. But it wasn't part of the story. A pic with tiny Tia flying Twilight would've been adorable.
Next chapter we need to see the "most hardcore guards" go through Twilight's tiny pony training with her.
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On, the sequel is already mostly written, everything is planned. This story will fit in just fine.
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Cool, than I hope you will comment after you will read another chapter what will come up in around 2 hours. ( after which I will need to give my editors 2 weeks to fix next ones ).
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Considering that Celestia mass was almost 1 kg, she literally levitated object 3000 times heavier then herself ( Twilight limit is 600 ).
Also, if Twilight would return to normal size, she would be 100 kg heavy, Celestia on normal size around 350-400.
So if Celestia on the same size as Twilight lift 5 times more weight, and on normal size being 3.5-4 times heavier. Celestia magic is around 18 times stronger than Twilight's on normal size, hehe. Do not mess with her when she go all out, you may regret it.
[I got too tired to read on at this little point, then again it's 3AM so I better get some sleep. My place will stilll be saved, i'll leave the computer on but the monitor off, so my mom won't get any suspicions on what I am reading, so be back in the fic in about 12 hours maximum]
I am unsure do I should pity you for having your computer on for entire night for nothing, or laugh that you didn't even checked how many words were left.
By the way, in around 2 hours, another chapter will be uploaded, and after which there will be 2 weeks before the next one will come out, so stay tuned.
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Fixed, thanks for the pointers.
This was the only tiny Celestia art I could find, though I will try to find Twilight riding on Celestia one instead, the problem is that, in here, Twilight and Celly are the same size, so I doubt i will find an art what will suit this story.
Wait for 2 hours and you will find out do your guess was right.
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Ijab is my favorite artist ever. He might be able to make it for you. And I will eagerly wait the two hours to see what happens.
HOLY MOTHER OF CELESTIA!!! 1,000?!
I could have easily read the last 4, probably just too lazy to check...
HAPPINESS!!!
Cute!
so... why celestia can't just lift the shrinking spell and teach Twilight how to do it herself?
Again, Scientists have discovered that ponies are liquids, taking the form of its container. Just like cats.
That image in the final piece of the chapter...
I shall nickname it Celes-tea-a in the name of PUNS
D'AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
Tinylestia was just the scourge I feared she would be...
Proofreading!
In the immortal words of Twilight Sparkle...
'...I'd say we just had ourselves one heck of a doozy.'
And it was going so well, too.
Errors marked "Strong suggestion" are indeed that. While not totally incorrect per say (such as errors in dialogue), fixing these would greatly improve the reading experience.
Errors unmarked are true errors, and need to be fixed. Some of these lean into fixing true grammatical errors and not just conventions, as is my usual. Hope you don't mind, as they do need to be fixed.
Notes from me are given in small text, and may help you to avoid these sort of errors in the future.
Omission - Apostrophe: ...Celestia's...
I assume you are going for the possessive of "Celestia", and not the plural? MANY Tinylestias, you say? Your madness knows no bounds!
Omission - 'the': ...keeping the bookshelf...
Omission - 'the': ...moment the golden aura...
Omission - 'the', Omission - Possessive: ...crushing the princess's body...
Ouch, ouch, ouch-ouch. Pretty standard, though. You may not want to have two subjects being said to disappear so close to each other, so you might consider changing the second 'disappear' to 'did likewise' or something along those lines. Repetition is your enemy!
Omission - Comma: ...solid, out of control...
This is a trio of adjectives dealing with the same subject and can be quite effective if executed properly. The commas give it a list, so that there is no confusion between ''solid, out of control laughter'', and "solidly out of control laughter'', which would work too (But would require a bit of a change, as noted.).
Tense - "blink": ...Celestia blinked her...
Strong Suggestion: Replace I with I've
The replacement would fit better in the dialogue and currently it is technically in the wrong tense as well (though it IS dialogue, and is so subject to a bit of allowable oddness.).
Unnecessary inclusion - Comma: ...wondering if...
Omission - 'were to': ...if she were to levitate her...
(Alt: ...if she levitated her...)
Omission - 'the': ...to the hospital...
The first error is an unnecessary pause in the sentence, while the second edit fixes a few errors in subject and tense. The alternate is also fine, though I do not think it flows as well. Error number three is a simple one that has been noted before.
(Strong Suggestion) Unnecessary inclusion - Comma: ...cheerfully as...
Simply taking out this comma lets the sentence flow much better, and while I couldn't tell you exactly WHY it's wrong, I'm pretty sure it is.
Omission - 'the': ...visit the hospital...
Simple mistake, one you guys seem to be rather fond of missing.
Unnecessary inclusion - Comma: ...body... I...
This mistake generally comes when typing pauses quickly and accidentally hitting the comma key, which is right next to the period.
Tense - past/past perfect: ...I've almost forgot what...
Tense - present/past: ...I've almost forgotten what...
These two changes fix the tense mismatch between before the pause and after. As it read before, it seems as if Celestia is remarking on how she almost forgot what pain felt like because of the pain she felt, which is rather strange. The fixed version correctly places her forgetfulness in the past, and cements said forgetfulness as a result of not having felt pain in quite some time.
Omission - an: I’m an alicorn,
KRONK ALICORN! Err. Kronk an alicorn? There is more than one alicorn in this story, right?
Omission - a: ...a weight a hundred times...
Alt:...a weight one hundred times...
Alt:...a weight around one hundred times...
Alt:...a weight a few hundred times...
Lots of options here, depending on exactly how heavy you want Celestia to be. Pick one, or make your own, but don't leave it as-is, as it is incorrect.
(Strong Suggestion)Incorrect Idiom: ...on the other hoof,
Alt: ...on the other hand,
The other side of what? Celestia? I thought she was riding her... Err, how can Celestia be on the other side of herself from Twilight?
(Strong Suggestion)Light editing:...than she had expected at first.
Alt: than she at first had expected.
This bit seems a little clunky. While not wrong, per say, these would fit much better, in my opinion.
Tense - present/past: From that day forward,
Singular - 'adventure': ...whatever adventures her...
Tense - present/past ...she had become...
This paragraph was hard to read. These edits should fix that. That 'only now' bit is iffy, as it is in present tense while the rest of the paragraph is in past tense, but if you take it from Celestia's perspective and factor in her millennia of experience, it kinda-sorta works. Anyway, changing it to 'only then' or something would be even worse, so it's really a moot point.
Unnecessary Inclusion - Comma:...understood why...
Alt:...understood, then, why...
Having that pause there splits the sentence into two parts, killing the first because it separated the first subject's action from it's target. So, you could either take it out (option one), or insert a small connective clause (option two).
This needs a bit of work. I hope you don't mind if I just breeze through and don't do every bit individually.
Celestia decided to introduce Twilight to a combat magic, trusting her to a fault that she would never use it to hurt anypony deliberately - only to protect herself. She wasn't overly surprised when Twilight enjoyed practicing it, participating in training drills which, were they Twilight’s size, only the most hardcore of her royal guards would go through.
Mayhew's Log: Ch12 - Celestia's Tiny Adventure... Okay I'm back! this is just a short one thought... Tiny Celestia in a teapot is about the cutest thing I've seen all day... and I have seen many cute things today. To the net chapter! Allons y!
Alright, so Celestia, after how many years, decides to finally shrink herself. This couldn't be done to, say, comfort, understand, or even teach Twilight. I respect the beginning and basic idea of the story, but there are character flaws that just simply make me want to brain them from their own shortsightedness as it progressed and the problems with the timeline. At this point I think I'm going to drop this series and give a mental evaluation of a character I promised months ago.
~Jane~
I'm a little tea pot short and stout... Lolz!
3369639 Twiny is gonna be like: BITCHES! I MY BE TINY BUT I CAN STILL KICK YOU'RE DUMB ASS INTO NEXT WEEK!!!!
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4595753 *Celestiny
Celestia's, I think is the proper spelling.
-SYA, The Horse
It's cute and an great read but... Celestia not being physically and maically fit when Nightmare Moon's threat is aound the corner? She could have been prepared for an eventual encounter!
Because you are the ruler of a nation and if you were to get hurt Twilight would probably be blamed. If you were to die, the nation would be reduced to anarchy and would probably have a bloody succession war before nightmare moon showed up and put the world into eternal night. Your excuse that you can handle yourself because of your physical and magical prowess is kind of a moot point, considering that the problem is that you're maintaining a very taxing spell that also makes you about 400 times weaker than you were. It's okay for Twilight to be a little irresponsible because the actual likelyhood of her death is still negligible and she's not essential to the health and well being of thousands of people -- she is, but you can't use that as an argument because you haven't told her that.
6105347 Except she's an almost-immortal demigod with the addition of a protection spell. I find it hard to imagine her even getting a lasting bruise, much less dying from things Twi has been surviving for years.
Worth noting that Celestia would be even more limited than Twi, given their size differences otherwise. Scary.
OK, it was only loosely relevant before this chapter, but I am getting major Mini-Goddesses or Ah My Goddess: Being Small is Convenient vibes from this. All you need is an everyrat viewpoint foil to complete the parallel. So when is Overwatch's stats as a Changing infilrator going to br relevant?
I remember a story where the guard basically said "it's not our job to protect Celestia; we're just in charge of getting any bystanders to safety before she obliterates the threat".
Edit: this one.
It's the beginning of a tiny Kingdom!
6931177 That makes sense.......like if a politician was an Ex-SEAL or something. His bodyguards are for the bystanders, not him.
Why did 120X her mass seem like a big deal with her magic. When she magically lifts one thing that weighs 2 * 10 ^30 kg and another that weighs 7.3477 X10^22 kg.
If you were to shrink her about 1000 times shorter. It'd still be a min of over an exagram and a max exceeding a yottagram. Well with her magic at least. Physical activities I can get since levitation is only how much pressure you can endure before your body breaks.
Physical activity though is a completely different beast.
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Although it still is cool that Celestia is starting to challenge herself.
Twiny has learned Unrelenting Force
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Remember the early chapter where Celestia moved the sun for the first time? Not only was it clearly not a levitation spell as other unicorns were mentioned as trying to find the special spell(s) to move the sun and moon, but she described it as though she was drawing on the suns own power to move it, as though it was a part of her. So while controlling the magic to raise the sun (and the moon too, especially since moving the moon does not come naturally to her as the sun does) keeps her magic in shape, it does not test her limits, physical or magical. Remember, Equestria is not Earth. It has different rules.
HAH! The aftermath of Magical Mistery Cure all over again. And to think, all it took was an extra shrinky dinky princess for her to start using the C name!
Sort of.
You don't mind new nicknames, do you, Sunbutt? She seems set on calling you Princelestia...
This story is incredible, and so fun to read. I really hope celestia eventually decides to teach twilight how to grow and re-shrink herself whenever she wants. Twiny's daily life is super fun to read about but I also think it would be amazing to see her use her full power as a normal sized pony for a few minutes before shrinking again or something.
Holy shit.
So if the weight of the object is reflected back upon the caster at about 5% that's doesn't seem like much, however since Celestia moves the GODDAMN SUN! Let's do some math.
The sun weighs 1.989 × 10^30kg
Multiply that by .05 that means Celestia experiences 79560000000000000000000000000kg of weight when she moves the sun.
GODDAMN! Celestia must be secretly ripped! She probably has spells to keep her from cracking the floor with her strength by accident.
Watch out the Princess is gettin swole!
Hard work surpasses natural talent.
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Or as Rainbow Dash said in a certain fanfic. Hard work beats talent, when talent doesn't work hard.
Aka. Hard work and determination is key to success, rather than resting on ones laurels.
Honestly, Twilight really is a shounen protagonist...
Beautiful, comical, entrancing and time-consuming, these are the things I would have expected from such work and... these expectations have been blown away.
Keep up the amazing work and I hope to see more after I finish this fic.
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Except she actually trains for years for self improvement, instead of for a few days/weeks to get handed a McGuffin of Ultimate Power and Goodness.
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or like Goku who trains and gets hand plot mcguffin power ups as well.