Celestia’s Tiny Student
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Chapter 11
Confrontation
Celestia waited in her bedchamber for her student’s return, sprawled across the empty bed with troubled thoughts churning through her mind.
Why would Twilight not want to talk with me? She’s never hidden from me or was afraid of me in all these years. Even when I hurt her by accident, she just forgave me as if it was nothing, so what would force my fearless student to run away from me? What did I do?
In the past two days, Celestia had worked harder than ever, trying to get as much done as possible, so she would have the entire day to spend with her student once she awoke. She had everything planned. First she would return Twilight to her original size, ending the condition she had to endure for all those years. After that, she would introduce Twilight to the nobility and let her have a few public appearances, all the while telling all of Equestria about the very talented unicorn she had as her student. Twilight would finally be free to go wherever she wanted on her own, and she would be given the chance to meet other ponies her age, make some friends, and live without fear of being stomped or hurt every single moment of her life.
It will be far too few years until the day she will face Nightmare Moon, and she deserves every minute of freedom I can give her.
But what did I do to her? Why would my own student hide from me? Was it my fault? Maybe she was hurt so severely that now she’s afraid of me pushing her again… No, that cannot be. She knows that she passed the exam. She knows that I will return her back to normal. She knows that from now on she will not need to push herself so hard. So what’s wrong?
The longer Celestia thought about it, the less she understood, unsure if whether it was her fault or not. The blessed day that she had waited for impatiently all these years didn't turn into anything she imagined, as the hours she had saved to spend with her faithful student were passing away without her familiar presence.
“Your Highness?” Steel Blade called from the partially open bedroom door, currently holding a tentative posture that indicated a long period of knocking without being answered. “Are you available for an audience? Princess Cadence has brought your student, as well as Fancy Pants and Spike, to speak with you.”
Audience? But why? Any of them could speak with me informally anytime they want. So why would they ask for a formal audience, and why would my student bring them all with her?
With great reluctance, Princess Celestia moved out of the bed to behind a small table, trying to calm her nerves before nodding at her guard. “Please, allow them to enter. I will hear their request.” She took a moment to run a hoof through her mane and, with a little burst of magic, drew her rumpled covers smooth over the bed and distributed several cushions across the floor before her guests arrived. It was just a little happy reminder of how much Twilight had been doing for her lately, and it made her cheerful, her friendly smile far easier to wear when her guests walked into the bedchamber.
“Please come in,” Celestia said, feeling her spirits lift at the presence of her friends. “Feel free to sit or stand, as you wish. I’m very glad to see all of you.”
“Thank you for seeing us on such short notice, Auntie Celestia,” said Princess Cadence in return as she descended gracefully onto a cushion, Fancy Pants and Spike to either side. Cadence waited until Steel Blade had left the room and closed the door before turning her head to nudge Twilight, who was trying to hide behind her pastel mane. “Go ahead, Twilight. Tell Auntie Celestia how you feel. It will be just fine.”
Despite the encouraging tone of her foalsitter, Twilight tried to burrow deeper into her colorful concealment. With a roll of her eyes, Cadence lit her horn and levitated the reluctant student off her neck at the expense of several strands of tightly grasped pink hair, and placed Twilight on the table in front of her mentor.
A cold lump of fear sat uncomfortably in Celestia’s chest as she watched her student be coaxed out of Cadence’s mane and placed on the table. It was surprising to see Twilight show so much fear, something that she had not seen from her brave little pony in many years. The smile on Celestia’s face remained frozen in place, the result of many centuries of control even though all she wanted to do was to pick up Twilight and hug her. Her student had never looked this frightened even before her worst tests, and her little violet eyes looked everywhere in the room except towards her eyes.
After a minute or two of awkward silence, Celestia finally spoke. “I assume there was an important reason why you ran away and hid from me?” She tried to keep her tone friendly and her smile warm, which became more difficult when Twilight gave a small nod of agreement.
“Would you like to talk with me about it?”
Twilight lowered her head, unsure of what to say. Looking at Fancy Pants, he smiled in response and nodded back with a comforting, “There is nothing to fear Lady Sparkle.”
Spike responded to her pleading look with a smile and a comforting, “I’ve got your back.”
After hearing Spike’s reassurance, she turn around to face her foal-sitter. “Go ahead, Twilight. She will understand,” encouraged Cadence with kindness in her voice.
Finally turning back to her mentor, who seemed to tower over her like some giant snow-covered mountain, Twilight let out a sigh and gathered up all the determination she could. “Yes, Princess. I am ready.”
Celestia kept trying to keep her smile honest, finding it harder with every passing second as her fear grew about what her student was about to say. “I’m listening.”
Twilight took a deep breath. “I like being tiny!” she said as fast as she could before closing her eyes and awaiting her mentor’s reply.
The cheerful expression on Celestia’s face turned into confusion. “You… like being tiny?” Celestia could not help but repeat Twilight’s words, unsure how they related to why she ran and hid from her.
Twilight kept her eyes closed, afraid to look into her mentor’s giant eyes for fear of what she might see there. “Y-yes. When I found out that you w-wanted to turn me b-back to my normal s-size… I ran.”
She ran because she didn’t wanted me to return her to normal size? Why?
Still not comprehending Twilight reasoning, Celestia asked, “Why would you run to keep me from removing the shrinking spell? Isn’t that the reason why you trained your magic so hard all those years?”
Twilight was hesitant to answer, but a small encouraging pat from Cadence’s giant hoof gave her enough courage. “That wasn’t the reason why I trained so hard… I just… really like to train my magic… I wanted to make you proud of me.”
Celestia smiled again, this time as radiant and strong as the sun rising over the horizon. “Oh, Twilight. You don’t have to push yourself so hard to make me proud of you. I know that you are very hard working student, and you will never cease to amaze me, no matter what size you are,” she said cheerfully, feeling a surge of relief that the reason why Twilight ran away was nothing really serious.
Twilight thought for a moment on how to respond. Unsure just exactly what to say, she decided to ask a question instead. “Can I stay tiny… pleaseeeee?” Twilight asked as she plead with her tiny puppy eyes. It didn't matter that she was no longer a filly, as her puppy face had always been effective on her mentor as well as even the most obstinate Royal Guard.
Celestia’s smile vanished as she had not expected this kind of request, or the overwhelming force of tiny purple puppy eyes. She wanted to return Twilight to normal for so long, and here Twilight was asking her to delay it. “Twilight, why do you like being so small? In the past years despite my best efforts, you walked a thorny path. Do you not wish for all the pain and suffering you endured so far to no longer be part of your life?” Celestia asked with concern in her voice.
Twilight shook her head. “Yes, that’s true. It is a thorny path where I have hurt myself almost everyday, and every small task is a challenge, but that is why I want to be small,” said Twilight with rising confidence.
Celestia’s confusion only grew. “Twilight, please forgive me if I do not understand how you find enjoyment in your suffering.”
“Princess, how much progress have I made in all those years I have been your student?” Twilight asked firmly.
Celestia hesitated before replying. “You have made enormous progress, Twilight. In those few years, you have not only learned more spells than nearly any unicorn in Equestria, but you have gained more power and increased your control over it far faster than I had imagined.”
Twilight just nodded before she responded, “That’s correct, but would I progress so much if I was a big pony?” There was a deadly serious tone to her voice that Celestia had never heard before, and it set the princess back as she considered the idea.
She is... correct. Without proper motivation, she would never have worked so hard, and even arranging a place for her to practice at her full size would prove very difficult, Celestia thought, now slowly understanding her student’s logic. “You are quite correct, my student. Are you afraid that once I will return you to your original size, you will no longer progress in your magical studies?” Celestia asked firmly.
“Yes. That’s one of the reasons but not most important one,” Twilight replied in a flat tone.
Celestia’s confusion returned as she wondered what other reasons would her student have, but she decided to use what she already knew. “Twilight, your progress has been astounding, but you’ve paid a large price for that. Everyday, you seem to hurt yourself or have even wound up in the hospital in numerous occasions. You can’t even move around Canterlot freely for fear of your own safety.” Princess Celestia faced her student and looked her directly in the eyes. “Is it really worth the pain?”
Twilight didn't waste any time before answering. “Yes it is. I really do not mind the pain, and I have gotten used to my harsh life. Furthermore, I am quite capable of taking care of myself. My telekinesis is so strong that I can lift anything or anypony who would try to hurt me, and I can also teleport or set up the shield my brother taught me. I no longer need to be protected.”
Celestia opened her mouth to reason with Twilight, but the determination in her student’s voice made her decide against it.
Instead, she nodded. “I understand, Twilight,” Celestia said with a growing smile. “You are correct. You have become strong enough to take care of yourself, and if I would return you to normal size, finding opportunities to train your magic safely would become far more difficult. The damage to the environment from your training alone could be enormous.” Seeing that her student was beginning to smile too, she continued, “My dear student, you said that there are more reasons why you want to stay small. Could you share them as well?”
Twilight, noticing how well Celestia was taking her reasoning and arguments, was no longer stressed and afraid. “Yes, Princess. Another reason, and possibly being the most important one, is that being small is really fun!”
“Fun? Could you please explain what is so fun in getting hurt every day?“ Celestia asked, a curious expression on her face.
Twilight beamed with confidence, having prepared a mental checklist of questions to answer when Cadence was carrying her to her mentor’s bedchamber. “Weeeeell… Outside of being able to train my magic, every small task can become a challenge for my raw power or my physical condition, and I enjoy the challenge. It is like being on a big adventure everyday, and I can learn from everything. Even small tasks like opening doors can be a challenge of my strength, and I enjoy feeling my magic flowing to my horn whenever I lift huge weight or cast a powerful spell. I just cannot imagine a life where I cannot use my magic everyday…“
For five minutes, Twilight gave more and more examples of what kind of challenges she faced every day, how fun they were, how much she had learned from them. Every example threw Celestia deeper into confusion. In all those years, Celestia thought that forcing her student being tiny was like putting a curse on her as she watched her student endure a very painful and harsh life, but now she was learning that her student enjoyed it, and that her life was not the nightmare she thought it was.
Once Twilight was done, she asked again, “So… can I stay tiny… please, please, please!”
Celestia didn't reply her student directly, instead she looked at Cadence for support. “Cadence, may I ask your advice? You have been taking care of Twilight for a few years, and you have been worried about her safety all this time. I would like to have your opinion on this matter.”
Cadence put her hoof close to her neck as she thought for a moment, aware that every eye in the room was on her. Twilight in particular was looking more intently than anypony, seeming afraid that she would turn her down in fear for her safety. Cadence was concerned about Twilight’s well being, but that included her mental as well as her physical health, and there was only one way she could vote in this matter. Giving Twilight a smile and setting the most serious tone she could into her voice, Princess Cadence responded to her aunt’s request.
“As much as it pains my heart to see Twilight putting so much suffering onto herself, I cannot stand in the way of her happiness. I already know that she can take care of herself, and if your student wishes to stay tiny, I will support her decision.”
Celestia had expected Cadence to be against the idea, so she was surprised by her statement. Searching for help, she turned to her closest friend, Fancy Pants. “Considering that I know Cadence’s opinion, it is only fair to know your opinion on this issue as well.”
Fancy Pants was expecting the question and didn't waste any time before answering it. “Of course, Your Highness. I must say, that as much as your student’s talent and power is being wasted because of her small size, considering that Twilight still wishes to learn and improve herself, and since she enjoys doing so even though it is more difficult for her at this size, I think staying small will only benefit her. There will be a time and place when she will return to normal size and use all she has learned for the good of our society, but that time has not yet come. As a matter of fact, I am quite proud of her decision, and I think it reflects well upon her character as well as that of her teacher.”
Celestia was surprised by his support for her student, but there was one dragon left to ask. “And how about you, Spike? Are you comfortable with Twilight being so small? You understand that her life will continue to be very harsh. She will hurt herself often, and she will have a hard time playing and taking care of you,” Celestia could not help but keep her emotion out of her voice in one last desperate attempt to convince Twilight to abandon her request.
Spike just smirked. “Twilight is tough, no matter her size, and she can play with me and take care of me just fine. Also, if she gets herself in trouble, I will always be there to protect her, no matter what.” Spike’s proud pose was disturbed by an enthusiastic leap from Twilight as she jumped down onto his belly and hugged him as far as she could reach, which he happily responded with a careful hug of his own before sitting her back on the table in front of Celestia.
Celestia looked around at the group, as if cornered, as her plans crumbled before her. If she forced Twilight to return to her original size, Twilight would never forgive her, and her motivation to train herself would vanish. Twilight would be sad and miserable, and in that stage of mind, she also would have a hard time befriending the other potential bearers of the Elements of Harmony. On the other hoof, if she would let Twilight stay small, there would always be the risk that Twilight would not want to return to normal before Nightmare Moon’s return. A tiny bearer of the Element of Magic would have a hard time befriending other ponies, and no matter how much weaker Nightmare Moon would be after fighting against herself and the Royal Guards, she would still be too dangerous for the tiny unicorn.
Everypony watched Celestia in silence. Twilight was sweating from fear as her mentor was going to make a decision that would decide her future, and after several minutes of silence, Celestia finally spoke with a single word that drew Twilight Sparkle’s full attention.
“Twilight?”
“Y-yes?” Twilight replied nervously.
“Are you truly happy right now ?” Celestia asked firmly with a calm voice.
Twilight closed her eyes and took a deep breath, “Yes, I am... the world around me is big, but I can’t imagine it any other way,” Twilight replied in a calm but determined voice.
Celestia sighed, knowing that she would need to alter her plans substantially. “If it makes you truly happy, then I will let you keep your current size.” Cadence, Fancy Pants and Spike cheered, but Twilight felt sad the moment she noticed her mentor’s disappointed face expression.
“I’m sorry,” Twilight said apologetically with her head lowered in shame.
“Sorry... for what ?” Celestia asked hesitantly.
“For d-disappointing you... D-d-do I can still be your s-s-s-student... regardless of my s-size ?” Twilight asked, her knees quaking in fear.
Celestia quickly understood that she just let her tranquil mask slip, showing her inner disappointment to her student. Celestia decided to banish those fears as quick as she could. “Oh, Twilight. Of course you are still my student. I would not see it any other way,” Celestia said as cheerfully as she could, spreading her hooves as an invitation for a hug.
Twilight didn't need to be asked twice, and leapt into her mentor’s warm embrace. “Thank you, Princess. Thank you so much! I love you,” Twilight said, slipping ‘I love you’ in the rush of happiness she felt while feeling her mentor’s hooves holding her close to the alicorn’s warm furry chest. Twilight shared a few tears of joy as she pinned herself harder against her mentor’s soft fur while unaware of how her last words captured Celestia off her guard. Celestia stared blankly at her student before a warm smile spread across her muzzle, pulling Twilight closer.
For the next few hours, Celestia, Twilight, Spike and Fancy Pants spent their time together, talking on various topics, sharing stories, even playing with each other. Twilight made it a point to get permission from Cadence to take Spike to visit the library, and in return, Cadence made her promise not to run away again.
Steel Blade, who heard their discussion, didn't waste any time informing the other guards about Twilight Sparkle’s decision, hoping that princess would not notice him trading his post for several minutes to another guard in order to pass the news around.
Fancy Pants excused himself to leave their happy discussion first, as he had scheduled some important meetings that would be nearly impossible to reschedule. There were two ponies in particular he wanted to inform personally about Twilight’s decision. After all, Blueblood was responsible for organizing a party for Twilight, while Fleur was probably still attending it, as some noble parties lasted for hours beyond their scheduled completion. Plus, he loved the way Fleur reacted to good news when he was in the vicinity.
After they had all said their goodbyes, Celestia once again was left alone in her room. Despite having thoroughly enjoyed the time they spent together, she slouched across her bed gloomily as a single question would not leave her mind.
How can she find happiness in all this pain. Why would she choose the thorny road instead of the safe one?
After hours of thinking, she was still unable to find the answer. In past years, she had seen her student pushing herself past points no other pony would even dare to approach, and Celestia respected it, sometimes wishing she would have the energy and determination her student had.
I do not understand how my student can find joy in all of this.
Celestia shook her head and walked onto her balcony, basking in the sunlight that spread out over Canterlot. It was a proud capital city, with a history of over two millennia of rule, but it seemed so small and cold to her now without Luna.
I live a very comfortable life in the castle with subjects who will do anything for me. Every meal is delicious, and my every need anticipated and taken care by more servants than I would like to admit. In return, I do all I can to take care of my little ponies and try to improve their lives. But comfort has never really made me happy, and now it seems as if an unbreakable wall has slowly grown between me and my little ponies who I love so much.
Celestia looked closer into the sky, noticing a small group of pegasi passing in the distance, out of her voice and hoof range. She looked down upon her subjects, her little ponies. Ponies who saw her as nothing more than a ruler.
I must admit, the mere act of ruling has always been monotonous, but it is a sacrifice I’ve been willing to make. Equestria has become more important to me than my own life, more important than my own sister. After I imprisoned Luna in the moon to protect my subjects, all I could do for centuries was to repeat my same routine over and over. I thought that I had gotten control of my despair, but now I have found the one true joy that has entered my life since Luna’s exile is the time I’ve spent with Twilight. She sees me as more than just a princess, and more than a friend, and while I first only thought of her as a way to bring Luna back to me, now she has become something even more to myself.
Suddenly Celestia felt trapped in a golden cage of her own making, chained down and unable to spread her wings while Twilight had managed to somehow find happiness in hardship.
“As crazy as it sounds, I should take an example from my student. Perhaps if I look at the world from her perspective, I will find answers to my questions.”
Celestia straightened up, standing proudly on the balcony before she trotted back inside toward her goal, determination marking her every movement. After all, how hard could it be?
Celestia walked into Royal Library and told the librarian that she wanted to give Twilight a surprise visit. A few choice words later, Celestia was able to talk the librarian into convincing Cadence and Spike to leave the library and allow her spend some time with her student in private.
With that out of the way, Celestia cast both an invisibility spell and a sound-proofing spell on herself, casting quick glances over at Twilight to ensure she had not heard anything.
It was no surprise for Celestia to find Twilight reading a book, especially in a place like this. Knowing full well that Twilight was not going anywhere, Celestia crept away, hiding behind a tall shelf full of books before she dispelled the invisibility spell. Celestia’s horn radiated in a golden aura as she gathered more and more magic, and once she had enough charge for her chosen spell, she cast it on herself, using her own power to fuel the effect of the spell even further.
Celestia could see as everything around her grow bigger as the library itself became more and more spacious. Being very perceptive with her magic, she slowly and carefully tried to reduce her own size to Twilight’s level and mass, as it will be only fair if they were both equal. Raising both the sun and the moon over hundreds of years was enough to keep her magic in shape, and as the result, she had more than enough magic to reduce her own mass by a factor four-hundred, becoming essentially equivalent to her own student in size.
After adding a quick protection spell, Celestia opened her eyes and looked around, and the view surprised her. The bookshelves were like a huge castle walls, and every single book was almost twice her own size. So this is how Twilight views the world.
Celestia gave a few experimental flaps of her wings before quickly folding them determinedly. “No,” Celestia said firmly as her wings closed. My student does not have wings, so to experience her life, her limitations must become mine as well. With another quick spell, Celestia bound her wings to her sides with a magical rope before she began trotting off to where she had last seen Twilight Sparkle.
A minute of walking later, Celestia quickened her pace to a jog and yet another moment later to a run, clearly impatient. My student makes everything look so easy whenever she plays hide-and-seek with me. How can she run so fast on her tiny hooves? Years of tradition and courtly manners dropped away as Celestia sped off towards her student, the simple act of running forbidden to her in her normal size.
After a short run, the princess was finally in the place where Twilight sat reading her book, ready to surprise her student, but she was forced to dive behind a bookshelf as her student closed the book with a thump.
Celestia watched as Twilight then crawled under the book, lifting the large weight onto her back and trotting back to the bookshelf, unaware of her spectator. What will you do now, my faithful student?
Twilight horn lit up, tying herself to the book with magical ropes. Celestia watched in amusement as her student began jumping from shelf to shelf, climbing up higher and higher while steadily and effortlessly lifting the book with her. When she reached a small gap in the line of books near the top, Twilight dispelled her magic ropes and pushed the book back to its original location. Satisfied that the book was back at home, she hopped down again, prepared to walk over to the next shelf until she caught a small glimpse of a rainbow mane behind the bookshelf.
Twilight wasted little time as she rounded the corner of the shelf, expecting to surprise her giant mentor currently hiding behind the bookshelf. Twilight was quite ready to hug her mentor’s hoof, only to bump right into her face.
“Hello prin—” Twilight suddenly stopped, speechless as she stared at her mentor, expecting the mighty white alicorn towering proudly above her but instead finding her at bite-size, exactly level with her.
“Greetings, my faithful student—Twilight? Twilight, are you feeling alright?” Celestia asked concernedly as she prodded her motionless student with a hoof, who was now lying unconsciously on her back.
Well, I think I broke her. Maybe surprising her wasn’t such a good idea after all.
Tiny Twilight vs Nightmare Moon. Match of the ages.
Part of me is waiting for the Ponyville reaction.
Another part is waiting for the Shining Armor reaction.
Another part is waiting for the Twilight's Parents reaction.
Yet another part is waiting for NIghtmare Moon's utter confusion...
And then there's the part with TINY PONY SHENANIGANS!
Twilight and now Celestia... Your logic is invalid
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I feel like a shut-in Twilight is more in-character at the beginning of the series than you'd think. Yes, she may be adventurous here, but I get the feeling that like most of us, she still likes her comfort zones. Over the actual TV series, Twilight does become more open and she certainly learns the value of going out with friends rather than hanging around in familiar places, and that's the Twilight we've come to love, I think.
But that's just my two cents. Regard it as you may, but I hope you can try to enjoy the story regardless.
I want a separate thumbs-up that I can give just for the characterization of Celestia in this chapter
I have to admit, I was hoping this version of Celestia would be close enough to Twilight to risk mentioning her plans for her (if only in very broad terms). But it may yet happen.
I've also been interested in the premise that shrinking Twilight reduces her magic channeling ability proportionately. It implies that magic collection/reserves are directly dependent on the area or volume of something (her horn?). Well, given that we're already talking about shrinking, perhaps it can't make too much sense (Logically Twilight should encounter significant physical functionality changes as a consequence of the square-cube law)
I think Twilight will transform back when the whole Nightmare Moon thing happens. The Elements will cancel the shrinking spell similiar to fixing Raritys Tail.
*Put phrase of how much I like this story here*
And while you don't get a Thumbs Up from me untill it is finished and still as funny and great and d'awww, as it is now, you had a place in my trackings from chapter one (the unedited ones).
As for a question for you to answer: I do hope, that this story will be conclueded, before Twilight fight Nightmare Moon.
Don't get me wrong, there are probably ways, to make it work with a tiny Twilight. But to make it work AND beliveable... You would need one hell of a reason
Besides, there are other ways to get "tiny Twilight stories" behind the start of the show. Of the top of my hat, I could think of a part-time tiny Twilight (which could excellently work with part-time tiny Celestia, as a sort of holiday for her on some weekends. Especially now that Luna is back to cover for her.).
At the very least, keep up the excellent work and suprise me with your choice of continuing the story.
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Oh, I can assure everyone that it will indeed be epic, or at the very least, very surprising
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I am afraid it will be a long wait, but I can assure you, it is something worth waiting for as sequel is far more epic than this story even with minimal editing assistance. Already 31 chapters done, and you will not be disappointed.
I won't spoil anything, but I can give you information that chapter 13,14 and 15 are Twiny and her friends visiting her parents, and I can assure you one think. If you saw Twilight going crazy on lesson Zero, imagine Twilight's parents on even higher level of insanity.
Oh, it will be epic, but most importantly, it will be surprising, totally blow everyone's mind.
I hope I won't disappoint you with what I come up with.
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Yeup
Now Tiny Celestia is on stage , ready for adventure alongside her faithful student . I know that many autors are afraid to let princesses do anything because they are all powerful and such, making conflict to easy to solve, well, not in my story.
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I am afraid I cannot tell you what Celestia will do as it would be spoiling, all I can do it ask for you to stick around to find out, because if anything, I try to do thinks what no one would expect to happen and be unpredictable.
As for shrinking spell, lets not get to deep into it, lets just say it is magic and rules are already set up in the story:
1) Strength, magic and endurance are reduced as much as pony mass is reduced, in Twilight's case, she is 1/100 her original mass, in Celestia's case, she is 1/400, so yea, Celestia is weakened far above her student, just so that they can both adventure as equals.
2) Protection spell double magic, strength and endurance of shrunken ponies to make them less vulnerable, that is why shrunken pony crashing from high height can survive far higher distance then in their normal size, especially under protection spell.
3) Twilight got used to yell all the time so every pony would hear her, and also, her tiny ears are more fragile, so she do not take other ponies yelling at her to lightly.
4) Even if Twilight tiny hooves make her far slower as she cannot make a long steps any longer, being twice stronger thanks to protection spell also let her run faster, so yea, even with tiny hooves, she is a tough opponent in game of tag, while Celestia is not yet used to being a little pony herself.
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Maybe yes, maybe no, you will need t stick with the story to find out. All I can say is that a lot of unpredictable thinks will happen, and I doubt many people will guess what will really happen.
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Fair enough. I hope that my story will not disappoint you. All chapters for this story are done, all they need is a editing assistance before it is uploaded.
I also hope to get more comments from you, I really like comments, it show that my story is appreciated, as well as give me feedback what I do right and what wrong ( if you even fell that something is wrong or have idea how to improve uploaded chapter, feel free to comment or message me, both works ).
This story ends before Twilight goes to Ponyville. Not spoiling anything, the story will end after Twilight's birthday party few months before Nightmare Moon return. Sequel will start from Twilight going to Ponyville. Also, I can assure you, Twilight and Nightmare Moon interaction will be mind blowing for you and other readers, my pre-reader already said that sequel is more epic than this story, as it already have 31 chapters waiting to be edited.
Oh, I have my ways. And if you do not believe me, PM him - 3347596 Rated Ponystar as he pre-read sequel to my story and advised me on a lot of stuff in it.
Surprise I will. "Cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye" Pinkie Promisse.
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It was never explained that Twilight power increased because she became element of magic, or else Twilight would not try to levitate Ursa Minor at all, afraid that her magic would be to weak. I can assure you, Twilight had to levitate super heavy stuff to be confident that she can handle Ursa Minor.
I do not care. Nightmare Moon in the show was done poorly and without much character put into her, and in my opinion, she deserve more respect, character development and love.
So what if I will make Nightmare Moon a bit OOC, she deserve it.
// That's covers the first 8 comments of this story, one answer to every comment as I promised.
Also, thank you all for showing love for this story, it sure motivate me to keep working on it. I will now go to sleep and I hope that I will get even more comments to reply tomorrow. Good night
I can't wait for a few chapters where Celestia lives through the life and hardships of Twilight as her student does. This would also be a great way for her to more accurately train her since I feel that Twilight could be a powerful Element of Magic in her current size. As for friends she's been shown many times here that her small size doesn't effect her ability to make friends as Celestia fears.
That and I think it would be the cutest thing to see the Summer Sun Celebration NMM event with a tiny Twilight. And see how all the ponies react to her. Then have Twilight surprise everypony by pwning NMM with the other Elements in bite sized form. I must say that you've grown by leaps in bounds your writing, and this has been so much better than the original, unedited version. Much kudos and I expect great things to continue from this great fic.
And so the princesses liked being tiny so much that she made a kingdom of small ponies....
Over time they were given many names.... Minish... The borrowers... Ect.
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That got me thinking... What would her physical strength be is it was increase by say 200x!?
My only complaint is that I'll be waiting in great anticipation for the next two chapters and the dates you've chosen are the two busiest days of what may be the busiest week I've had in months. Then again, I suppose it gives me something special to look forward to when Sunday finally comes. Otherwise, I'm in love with this story to the point that I salivate just thinking about the chapters already written but at the moment unedited. Please, treat yourself and your editors well, all of you deserve some kind of trophy.
I cant wait for the Nightmare Moon reaction but even more so, the Discord one, that would be awesome.
The Tiny Tia plot twist was a surprise to me but unsurprisingly I LOVED IT!
The writing gets better and better every chapter. Tia was natural. I can totally see this Tia as an evolution of the one from the show. A Tia changed by a much less introverted Twilight. A Tia determined to make herself stronger the way Twilight made herself stronger. Will there be a moment where Tia tells Twilight "This time YOU can be the teacher." ?
oh ... all the in the world for the Twilight / Tia "I love you" moment
Another good/bad thing about Twilight staying tiny that she didn't mention, is that she'll never be able to have a love interest! (To many people, that's a bad thing. But considering there is no romance tag on this story, I begrudgingly admit that this is a good thing.)
This is one of my favorite stories on fimfiction. Of course that might have to do with this my first also
Does that mean if I leave a comment, I get to be counted as a faithful reader?
I enjoy this story a lot because it's always lighthearted and fun. My skills at editing mostly come at the grammar, word choice, sentence flow, and presentation cohesiveness levels, and between you and your editors, you are doing fine there. The characterizations are coherent and enjoyable. I just want to know what happens next!
I am glad to see that Twilight realizes it will be a big change for her to be big again. Her unease is quite appropriate and I thought you handled it well. (Whether Twilight did is a different story. ) When she gets big, she's going to be like a bull in a china shop!
I'm not sure why Twilight broke so thoroughly upon seeing tiny Celestia, but I expect it will me be addressed, so I just want to know what happens next!
You have 31 chapters of the next story written? Darn it, man, quit holding out on us! We need more tiny pony shenanigans!
More small ponies can't be a bad thing.
So, I'm sort of foreseeing that Twilight will trot off to fight Nightmare moon while teeny, engage in a mighty tussle with her, and then, when all seems lost...
"Okay, okay. I guess I can stop handicapping myself now."
... return to normal size, and proceed to go Super Sai- ... errr, Ultra Unicorn on the poor Nightmare's behind.
Sound about right?
Pretty good! I think I might've liked it a little more of she had been stuck at her size without choosing to be that way -- like if the return spell had failed, or something similar, beyond her control. Part of the appeal of the story, for me at least, has been her adorable 'making the most of a strange condition' attitude. One got the sense that she wanted to do things like a normal-sized pony, despite her tiny size, and seeing her come up a little short here and there was pretty cute.
Still, it's nice to see Twilight in full control of her life again, and making her own decisions. I thought the rationale you came up for her wanting to stay small small was pretty believable, too!
Went a bit far with that one!
I love this story, and I'm really looknig forward to future upfates.
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Thanks. Still, keep in mind that Blueblood is background character in the story so will not appear to often. His next minor appearance will be in chapter 13, though his role will be small.
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Twilight is not the only one who need to be trained. Celestia would use an excessive as well. Next chapter will be uploaded in Friday or Saturday, so you wont need to wait long.
Thanks. sequel is mostly done, all there is left is for editing to catch up. I am sure you will be surprised.
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If Celestia would make small kingdom, she would not longer fell tiny around tiny subjects. The point it being small is to have everything far bigger then you.
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Twiny lifting physical strength with protection spell on is around 30-40 kg, normal size when protection spell is out, it would be 1.5 - 2 tons, but lets be honest, TOM is at least 1.5 Ton heavy, so Twilight have still some years to improve.
( No idea why would you ask to increase her strength 200 times, sine returning to normal size will increase it only 50 times ).
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There is not much I can do to reward my editors. But you can always give the a follow if you think they are doing a great job. I noticed that editors not get the recognition they deserve most of the time. ( kidois is best editor I ever worked with, and he is so unpopular on fanfic net just because he didn't wrote any story himself ).
As for Georg, he already wrote a cool story called, "Monster inside Twilight," since you are waiting for 2 new chapters of this story to be uploaded, you can always look on his best work.
"Monster inside Twilight" - http://www.fimfiction.net/story/78582/the-monster-in-the-twilight
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I am afraid that for Discord it will be a loooooooong wait. But Nightmare Moon reaction should not disappoint you.
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Maybe before you judge and get insulted, you would actually wait for the sequel release and see it for yourself, thank you very much.
You must have poor faint in me and my story if you do not trust me to that level.
Sigh... Just wait and see for yourself before you judge, this is all I ask of you.
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Thanks a lot. I also hope that tiny Tia adventures will be enjoyable for everyone, though keep in mind that she cannot stay tiny to often, she have a kingdom to run after all. But think of it as small hobby of her to adventure with her student whenever she have some free time.
Also, keep in mind that Twilight was enduring a harsh life for many years while Tia most of the time spend in comfort, poor little alicorn will have a long way to go.
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Well, Twilight in the show is not interested in romantic stuff as well, so no big lose. Though many poor guards who hoped to score her may be disappointed.
Also, keep in mind that Shining Armor scored himself a ( in my story ) millennium old alicorn princess whose special talent is spreading love. If he could get a pony that old, maybe there is still a hope for Twiny, who knows.
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Well, it was Georg who did a good job by making this chapter more emotional, so how about you will check his story "Monster inside Twilight" - http://www.fimfiction.net/story/78582/the-monster-in-the-twilight
Maybe it will become your second favourite
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I guess so. As long as you will leave it on more then just on one chapter. Hehe.
Pretty much.
Well, from Twilight perspective, Celestia was not only a mentor and ruler, but she was like a giant god. And considering that Twilight tend to overreact when it come to Celestia, seeing a huge mighty giant she always admired and respected ( while she herself was her little pony ) being on equal level of size as her, I am sure you can imagine how Twilight fell when she saw Celestia being tiny instead.
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Some people do not mind grammar errors and chapter in lower quality for the sake just to read what will happen next. But some readers prefer to wait a long time for high quality chapter. All I try to do is to find fair balance between the two.
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I really like to read peoples theories about how Twilight will encounter Nightmare Moon, I wonder how many if any reader will guess what will really happen.
Still, I noticed that many people seems to underestimate Nightmare Moon or overestimate Twilight.
Keep in mind that Nightmare Moon is not a pushover, and she is at least 4 times heavier then Twilight in normal size is.
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Well, Twiny is like a learning/training mode. I wanted Twilight to still being able to return to her normal size as if entering the battle mode in case we will need some flank kicking.
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All I can say is for you both to wait for the sequel and see for yourself as I handled Nightmare Moon, a little trust is all I ask.
Also, Nightmare Moon bringing enthral night to kill every pony on the planet is what say in legends about her, and it is something what Celestia was afraid it may happen, as it forced her to use elements against her own sister.
But how were thinks from Luna and Nightmare Moon perspective?
Would she really be willing or be so stupid to kill every of her subjects if all she wanted was love and admiration?
I'm sure I will manage to pleasantly surprise both of you, so just wait for sequel to come before judging.
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See you on Friday or Saturday then.
So, Nightmare Moon being four times heavier than (up-sized) Twilight has implications for their relative power levels?
Sooooo, what you're saying is that obesity equals power.
We now know the REAL reason Celestia eats lots of cake. If she shaved a few inches off her flanks, she might not be able to raise the sun anymore.
EDIT: My mind is now awash with the possibilities of a world where the intensity of your personal gravity field determines whether you get superpowers. Sneakily replacing a rival's sugar with stevia! Training montages of ponies gorging themselves on increasingly vast smorgasbords of high-high-high-carb delicacies! And the sad, sad story of the poor little unicorn, who no matter how much she eats, can never put on weight! She has a perfect figure, but at what cost? Ponies around the nation pestering Celestia for teenyfication spells so they too can train themselves up, only to return to their normal size with power overwhelming! They'll call it the TinyLight Program!
Okay, I realize I may sound a bit mocking, but seriously - it's a hilarious way to determine magical potential, and I hope you do more with it.
EDIT EDIT: Okay, another bad idea. What if Twilight realizes that to beat Nightmare Moon, she has to be bigger than her? And starts using growing spells? And Nightmare uses her own to keep up? And then ponies are running around screaming while a gigantic purple unicorn mare straddles the skyline, wrenching on the headlock she's got on the titanic black spooky alicorn beside her? And Celestia is sitting on the sun with her head in her hooves, wondering where it all went so silly?
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I am trying to avoid replying on one comment at a time right now, so if many comments will start to stack, I will turn them in one big comment replying on many peoples.
That being said, I am not saying that mass determine the power, or else Twiny would not be able to overpower normal size noble with her magic.
However keep in mind, Celestia, Luna and Cadence ( who in my story was an alicorn before Crystal Empire disappeared ) are more then milenium old alicorns, they had hundreds of years to develop their raw power. And alongside with age and developing power, their size increased ( It is just a theory, but I think that Celestia is bigger then Cadence, because she is few centuries older then her, as for Luna, I can only say that elements must have temporary take away her magic, making her look younger. Though as year passed, Luna returned to her former glory and as bigger again.
Celestia still seems to appear bigger then Luna even during Luna episode, while Nightmare Moon have the same heigh what Celestia have, so I assume that Nightmare Moon size extend her raw power and age as alicorn, while Luna what after being separated from Nightmare Moon, lost a bit of her raw power ( maybe Nightmare Moon and Luna shared time they spend on the moon, one slept while other didn't and they replaced one another as time passed, as result, while Celestia grown up 1000 years, Luna and Nightmare Moon grown up only 500 each, making Luna younger and a little smaller ).
Anyway what I try to say is that in my headcannon, Alicorns are so powerful, that with age, their bodies need to grown up a little to to store so much power they posses, it is like pony is growing.
While small filly need years to become grown up mare.
Twilight when ascended was a tiny bit higher then her friends, but still far smaller then Celestia and Luna, so I assume that Twilight alicorn size is the one of ascended alicorn, while after hundreds of years she will grown up to Luna and next Celestia size.
Long story short, Nightmare Moon being far bigger then normal size Twilight is a prove of her age and power, so she should not be taken lightly.
As for spell what increase size. If there even will be any, it will increase physical size, but not magic what pony have inside ( shrinking spell decrease inner magic of a pony alongside her size, as if storing it away until this pony decide to become big again, bit increasing size of a pony would not increase her inner magic, so if normal size Twilight lifting strength would be 2 tons after growing 100 times to a giant, her lifting strength would only increase to 12 tons. While Twilight levitation will not become bigger at all.
This is my way of preventing shrinking spell or growing spell to be OP.
Anyway, in this chapter Twilight is 1/100 her mass while Celestia is 1/400 with hope that it will make them as equal.
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I look forward to see the others get their training as well. It's been a long time coming. As for the sequel, I'm sure I'll be pleasantly surprised.
Tiny Celestia.
Maybe we can have tiny mane six at some point?
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Well, Celestia is about 2-3 times Twilight's size in the show and Celestia shrinking down by 400x scale means she is about 200x smaller than normal.
A few pointers. If Celestia's 8' and Twilight's 5' then shrinking by a factor of 400 seems to yield sizes of 6mm and 3¼mm respectively, which would be a lot smaller than a mouse in anyone's language.
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In my story, Twilight from the show weight is 100 kg.
Celestia weight is 350-400 kg.
Twiny and Tiny Tia after shrinking are both almost 1 kg heavy ( maybe a little less ).
Twilight at this point is almost the size of Angel ( young rabbit ).
Those are the rules I come up with. I can only hope that they are fine.
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Maybe yes, maybe not, you may never know.
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3350530 Oh. I hope it didn't sound like I was judging. I just really, really disliked his comment enough to rant like that. Sorry about that!
Kinda wondering how the hell Celestia will manage to convince Twilight to return to normal in time though? That seems like a major concern.
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I read through chapter nine, and chapter eight was so much fun to read
Well duh, what did celestia expect LOL.
Loved this chapter, eagerly awaiting the next installment.
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in that case you might want to indicate in some way that the scale is mass based. most people at first glance are going to assume volume, not mass.
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Didn't I did that in my story?
Everywhere I indicate that it is mass reduced, so both Celestia and Twilight would be the same size, so I do not really understand what to fix ?
Can you point where in my story is text what confuse people and advice how to rewrite it so they would understand, because so far I think that I stated it clearly.
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while you certainly do mention the mass reduction, the way you phrase it, it makes it seem like it's not the spells intended effect, but rather a byproduct of the reduction in volume. based on what you're saying right now in these comments, that's apparently backwards.
as for how to phrase it so that comes across clearly... the only methods i can think of fall into the "over explaining insignificant details" category, and would likely do more harm than good.
T'is very fun!
Let her stay tiny! PLEAS!
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY
*facehoof* It could be possible to do a little victory dance and shouting YES!!! WOOHOO!!! in your mind and tell a passing guard.
XD Omigod...
MOAAAAAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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In this case, I will do best if I won't change anything and hope that others will get what I try to say.
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Np. Also, today for few hours I will upload chapter 12, and tomorrow a bonus chapter, so stay toned.
My pre-reader "Rated Ponystar" suggested this kind of scene, congratulations go to him.
Fancy Pants is amused as well.
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Yes, it is. While being tiny, Twilight can go all out on her adventures with no restrictions.
Celestia cares to much for Twilight to take her away from her happy life.
I am unsure that this decision make Steel Blade or any other guard happy. After all, they all hoped to ask Twilight for a date, and now they hopes vanished ( hard to date tiny size mare ).
As I promised, I will post this chapter today in few hours and bonus chapter tomorrow. Though I must give a fair warning. My top editor edited 2/3 part of chapter 12, so tomorrow there will be a small update of chapter 12 when I will upload bonus chapter, as he will try to fix the last part.
If there will be something wrong in last 1.5k words in chapter 12, please point it out, it will safe my editor a bit of work.
Stay tuned.
3364990 I love how you react to my reaction comments...
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All I can think about right now is the Minish Cap...
I just thought of the potential ultimate twist of this fanfic. Twilight is excited to go back to her normal size and preparations to do so are actually followed through with. However during the change something begins to go wrong. All the power twilight has grown to have over the many years has the adverse effect of making her FUCKING GINORMOUS like a damn dragon. How will Twilight Sparkle handle this one? Stay tuned...
This just keeps getting better. Tinylestia for the win!
Proofreading!
Incorrect tense - past/present: ...just forgave me...
Mayhew's Log: Ch11 - Confrontation... Tiny Celestia is not best tiny princess Tiny Celestia is not best tiny princess Tiny Celestia is not best tiny princess Tiny Celestia is not best tiny princess... Tiny Luna is best tiny princess... Okay I'm not the kind of brony who has this list of best pony, best princess, best villain, etc... mostly when I say something is best something it is as a joke. Which is why Derpy Hooves is best changeling, Discord is best alicorn princess(which he is not... sorry Discy, Luna still reigns supreme), and Twilight Sparkle is best villain.
Usually those jokes of mine come from somewhere, Shiny is best at wife throwing because of the season three premier, Jackalope is best pet because Filly Vanilli made them canon, and Twilight is best villain, because on more than one count she has tried to eradicate an entire species... now those are all canon examples so let me tell you it takes something special for me to add something non-canon to the list... so here it is, until Tiny Luna happens, Celestia is best tiny princess and Twilight is best tiny pony... that is all... Next chapter! Allons y!
I understand that Celestia doesn't want to make her student unhappy but I'm still kind of disappointed in that she didn't think Twilight needed a new phase of her life. It is indeed scary for Twilight but I would imagine Celestia would see that as just another test, one of many.
I also am surprised that Celestia would have such doom scenario's in her head that Twilight will break if she let's her grow back and all. Twlight will get over it, someone with her age should understand that. I also would have expected her to get a bit agitated that Twlight still doesn't understand that she loves her. Celestia would never sent Twilight away but for some reason Twilight doesn't seem to get that.
Though maybe it's also because Celestia is still thinking too much like a teacher rather than a mother. She doesn't understand Twilight's emotional needs and training in those things.
I still love the chapter even though I don't agree with it.
3364990 AHAHAHA!!! TINY CELESTIA BROKE TWIINY!!!!!
5076483 Celestiny?