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20 years after the CMC became the gossip queens of the Foal Free Press, Sweetie Belle takes up the pen name "Gabby Gums" once more as an ace reporter.
A regular news story turns into a deadly game with Sweetie Belle in the center as she faces the Griffon mob in a laundering scheme. She will not be alone, however, as an old friend arrives to help.
Inspired by Dirty Laundry by the Eagles.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 3 )

Hi, I'm SilentBelle, and I try to make solid comments on any SB fics I read. So let's see, it's kind of like a detective fic... Very few mistakes grammatically (which is a very pleasant feeling when reading). The story is pretty neat so far, kind of short as it is, and I don't have a very good grasp of your portrayal of Sweetie as a character yet. I'll be sure to follow it and see where it goes, as there is not enough to form a solid judgment, other than I found the writing style simple enough to read, and that there is potential for a great story here.

One issue I found that bugged me was how Sweetie was told what her job was. It doesn't sound like something that a newspaper chief would ever say to an employee, asking a reporter/journalist to dive into the crime world like that. (Of course I've never worked with such companies and such.) At the very least I think that conversation could have held a bit more of character to it. After all Sweetie is a rising star of the press and I figured she would interact with the chief of the EQD a bit more than just saying yes. I guess I just felt that one scene kind of lacking. Still that's just a small nitpick.

So yeah, I look forward to see how you have Sweetie acting in the coming chapters. Thanks for writing this and I'll keep an eye on it.

~SilentBelle

I'm not sure if I like this yet...there's just too little. I am watching, though, if you do keep writing it.

It seems to go very fast. In the span of one short chapter, she gets the assignment, moves in, meets the neighbors, and leaves. Other than that, the writing is good and I'm interested to see where it goes.

Oh, and The Eagles are always appreciated.

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