I may seem like one in a million at first. But later I will be noticed...with a hint of shyness to follow
The world is in chaos. Nightmare Moon has taken complete control of Luna and was even named Goddess of Darkness. She plans on seeking all of the Crystals of Harmony and revert them into Chaos Crystals. Paradox Monster infest the world and a young teen who wields a sword as large as him and his mage friend Trixie travel around the world to find these crystals before she gets them. The fate of all lives could be in their hands.
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Not bad so far, I'm Sensing that this a Final Fantasy Crossover, Anyway, i haven't played Final Fantasy but i'm enjoying the story.
7/10 Big Macs
I'm glad. I'm not certain how many chapters will be made, but i'll try to make them longer.
Oh boy, this can be remade in SO MANY WAYS!
This isn't as bad as your first story, though, but it has quite a lot of the same mistakes.
I was honestly going to try and write a comment to try and fix all of that for you, but after awhile I literally gave up trying to put notes on every single thing you did wrong. Now, I'm going to say the last thing I said about your other story, mostly because it's true. This, all in all, is a very good fanfic idea. I think that it's a little cool how you made Trixie, OF ALL PEOPLE, TRIXIE, the main protagonist! Yes, I'm not joking when I say this, but I would not have expected that in any other story!
But still, as I said before about your last story, you're lacking the moment to think to yourself and proofread. I think this story would be amazing if you just put a bit more effort into your proof reading, and make sure you double check each and every paragraph for grammatical errors and things that just look a bit iffy to you.
Other than that, you have a wonderful story. It was worth dropping your other one to take a quick look at this one, and I was quite pleased. You've hit a double whammy with me yet again, but you really need to proofread.
4/10 moustaches
I felt bad for Trixie from reading too many sad stories based on her so YES! Trixie will be one of the MAIN PROTAGONIST!
Otherwise enjoy, more on the way.