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Soldiers Among Shadow

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Scootaloo never met her father. Her mother says that he is a worker travelling overseas, but she had her doubts. One day a mysterious stallion visits her home, claiming to be her father's friend. Who is her father? What happened to him?

To answer that question, one must go back to the time when the Equestrians knew more than just peace and harmony: the age of global war.

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Pinehas #1 · May 27th, 2013 · · ·

And here I go.

Hey everyone, this is my first fic. Well, yes and no. I posted this once before, but I erased it for a rather...personal reason. With the summer break on, I decided to visit this story back, edit and add some contents and here it is again. Still, I never wrote any other pony fanfic, so this still is my first pony fanfic, and second fanfic of any fandom - I am not a very active writer just yet.

As such, I would greatly appreciate if you guys offered me constructive criticisms. I am open to them and willing to heed them to the best of capacities. Of course, if you are not feeling up to it, just anything like "I like this." or "This sucks." is fine too.

If you do have enough spare time and decides to offer some criticisms, I personally would like the most regarding character dialogues/interactions and pacing. For example, am I doing a good job keeping canon characters in character and introducing new characters? Am I spending enough time in each scenes, instead of jumping around or dragging on? Of course, if you see any other flaws, feel free to point them out.

All in all, I wish that you all find this little fic of mine enjoyable. Have a nice day, folks.