Subject Six is just another earth pony, conditioned for apathy and trained as a slave. But when humanity begins destroying itself the ponies need a leader, one to unify the desolate, the hopeless, the ponies. But can a species designed in a lab, and conditioned for slavery, truely grasp what independance is? And if so, can somepony unite them, and take advantage of humanities weakened state to overthrow their masters, creators, and enslavers?
As this is my first FanFic i'd appreciate any feedback you guys can give, no doubt many of you have written FanFics yourselves, complete ones at that, so you already know more than me :)
Chapters (2)
... Interesting.
I'll remember to come back later, but right as of now, I wont track it.
Yet.
Alright so pretty good.
I do question why were like actually gonna have them working the field and everything i mean it sounds like it cost allot to make them and it's like high lvl genetic engineering if this is all for having workers for harvesting crops i don't buy the logic it's like really flawed.
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I'll think of a more convincing argument and replace it, still what's your opinion on the Observer thus farr?
Edit: I'll just use the reason Britian became heavily involved in the slave trade.
Well creating self aware life is something that were going to do one day either with a true AI or something like this i guess and for the most part i can see his reason for doing it although he seems to not have thought out the eventual ends that making a sentient life form would bring also making it knowing it would just become a work force also so knowing all that you can basically go with the assumption his moral code is pretty easy to work with so it might be a good idea to add a lil backstory to him which explains why he needed the money more like his kid is really sick or something wife has brain cancer something like that.
And yeah i don't even know how Britain got into it lol all i know is that i think by now humans have gotton the idea that you can't just use slaves widespread it;s much easier to just hire cheap workers.
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Well, seeing how he was as chapter two ended i'll make him give Subject Six his diary, which over the course of the fanfic will be quoted from and be used to build up his mentaly and character
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Sounds good.
I'm appreciating the feedback, and i'll be sure to take it into account. Keeo in mind this is my first fanfic, i'm planning plenty more
There should be a lyra emote, which has hands, and is giving a thumbs up 