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So what brought on the confusing 4th Wall break? The story would have been fine without it.
...and where are the rest of the comments? Feels weird not seeing any for the last four chapters.
It's a brilliant start, i enjoy the story so far and look forward for more, and the last part with Discord cracked me up
Keep it up!
2618859 Not necessarily a 4th wall break. This is about Quantum universe's coming together (complex stuff), and Discord was being a punk messing with the story
I kinda published the first chapters in first draft form, which is why people weren't very interested in this... That's what I get for being impatient. Thanks for the support!
Hey, the next chapter is going to be a long one, and I'm kinda booked for the next weeks or so. Don't worry though, I'll have time to write during my travels so stay shiny!
This has a crossover tag, but what is it a crossover of? The description is interesting, but what does "...Dordogne Incident in 1999, ITC's Recon Department..." mean?
2645913 It's a crossover of Micheal Crichton's books Timeline and one specific other. The Dordogne Incident was the plot of Timeline, which was written in 1999, and the ITC Recon Department is something I invented. ITC is a company that built a quantum computer that allowed quantum foam travel to specific points in space-time. Don't worry, the next chapter will explain it.
made Nova Red using PonyCreator because ah caaaaaan!
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*The moment you started sciency talk* ...Aaaaaannndd, you lost me.
2711060 This story can be very sciencey. Sorry if it doesn't suit you
2711068 Nononononononono... I love it. There are times where I need something to completely fly over my head to keep me from feeling too smart and getting too big of an ego. Your story pops that ego and proves that I'm not as smart as I thought. I need that every once in a while.
This is pure awesome. Keep it up!
Glad you guys enjoy it!
Just as the original TimeLine novel was about parallel worlds, this one is also about parallel worlds. =3
2720533 Yes indeedy. The opportunities here are endless.
That is a OH CRAP! moment Twilight :)
2763259 Heh yeah
*Sees the pic*
Muthuh. Fukin. RAPTUHS!!!!
All we need now is THE MUTHUH FUKIN T-REX and we are good.
YEAH!!!! SPARKLE SPARKLE SPARKLE BIATHCH!!!!!
Raptors.
Can't wait to see what, or who, came through. =3
Augh! Cliffhangers!
Okay, so, here's my first review as of reading the first three chapters. Keep in mind now, I might get brutal at points but I'm not saying these things to hurt or break, but to push you to be better. Also, you kinda asked for it, hah.
Okay, so my biggest pet peeve so far is a lack of descriptors. Chapter two especially, there's close to no descriptions about who we're dealing with, where we are, what the world around us is like. You really gotta come at a scene assuming no one reading it knows who they're dealing with or where the story is taking place.
The other problem I'd say I have with it, is that it's a very dry, very slow read. Now, I'm not familiar with the series you're crossing our favorite talking equines over with, so I can't say whether or not this stuff is in or out of character.
I will praise this though, your use of science alongside magic is pretty cool and makes things easier to wrap your head around.
3287805 Thanks for the review!
It's a crossover between this. I'm not trying to currently cater to readers who haven't read the book first. I did try to explain how the science works in chapter 5, but yeah I would say it's a slow read tight now. Mainly because I still have come up with a main antagonist yet. I know, Twilight doesn't approve...
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Honestly, that might help get more readers if you put in something to help ease people who aren't aware of either realm into the story.
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The plot is all formulated now. All I have to do now is find time to write it down.
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More chapters to come!
The site just said this updated...?
Interesting chapter.
I'm going to have to start from the beginning. It's been a while, but I shouldn't have any trouble rereading it.
Biggest problem: Need to indent more often.
6462767 Shouldn't be that much of a problem. Personally I feel like I started writing this story half-assed, and it is my duty now to get it done right and proper. Thing is, I started writing this back then ago because I just wanted to get involved in ponies. Now that time has passed, and so on and so on, I'm just going to finish this story for the sake of the plot development and characters. I've actually started writing down separate notes for facts and information to help me write, instead of just sitting down in one go and typing.
I'm also old enough now to deal with taxes and legal alcohol, so that leads to be that my creative process has changed. Not sure in which direction, but any direction is better than going no where at all.