This is my first fanfic with my OC, of most of his life lived out in Manehattan, Suave Steps is a pegasus of amazing calibur in dancing later finding a new talent which became his "curse." Having his image known around the city he is forced to leave his only normal home to hide from the attention. With thinking of ponyville as his only solution, he now leaves his mark to start a new life, in hopes of getting away from unwanted fans. ANY SONGS, LYRICS, OR REFERENCES MENTIONED IN THIS STORY RIGHTFULLY BELONG TO THEIR OWNERS. Please comment, rate, and leave any suggestion to help out, THANKS.
Chapters (3)
By the way its set up, I'm sure this might have quite a few chapters. There are some grammar and punctuation errors to be found within this story. Most other errors are a little too specific for me to explain. Other than those, the story is a pretty good read so far.
280889 Thanks, though i had help from the start, genocidal brony. gave me tips and advices on writing a first fic.
Looks good, tracking. Withholding ratings for now :D
359246Thanks dude, i noticed ur a proof reader and was hoping when i finish this story if u can edited,
if its ok with u that is
359246 also a close friend of mine, genocidal brony, doesnt have the time to help since his folks kept coltblockin the computer, so r u willing to help?
That was painful to read.
The grammar was poor, very poor. The characters are off, and it doesn't really work well. Those are my general thoughts on this story.
I encourage you embrace more cultural concepts.
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Could you explain in detail, your comment seems vague.
6534097 I kindly suggest you write with more grounded foundations and concepts so the reader can more easily absorb and enjoy your tributes to this site. Don't fret too much about your grammar, it should be corrected gradually as you continue writing. But, you will have to acquire some level of profuse literacy if you wish of a greater audience.
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Thank you so much for your words, I used to have someone proofread my writing for me but we lost contact. And I'm trying to get into the swing of things since I've been away from reading for so long.
This is intresting.