The two ponies i found in my room

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The two ponies i found in my room

Rainbow dash and Pinkie pie are found in my room! I must be soooo lucky!

Chapters (4)

Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie! · 2nd May 2013 · 873 words
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what will we do? · 12th May 2013 · 847 words
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Bed Time · 24th May 2013 · 261 words
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Good bye · 24th May 2013 · 707 words
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Rainbow dash the cat

Rainbow dash the cat #1 · May 25th, 2013 · · · Good bye ·

Hi, please comment

Lunarwolf

Lunarwolf #2 · May 25th, 2013 · 1 · · Good bye ·

Your story is short and can be combined into one chapter by use of simple dividers but the story as a whole is good...just has some spelling errors that need to be fixed and add a little more description about how the character are reacting to the events happening like facial and body expressions. I will say that a few changes and your story could be a great addition to the site. I will be waiting to read the sequel.

CometTail

CometTail #3 · May 25th, 2013 · · · Good bye ·

Make longer chapters, not 200-800 words just to make 1000-2000 words. Overall, it's decent.

Rainbow dash the cat

Rainbow dash the cat #4 · May 25th, 2013 · · · Good bye ·

Thank you for the positive comments unlike some of the comments on my first story. If you want to read that terrible story, search up thomas meets rainbow dash

xDan