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I must shove my laziness aside and comment.
Missing a word here.
That should be 'were' not 'was', unless Cherry talks like a black person?
I love how this conflict is developing, sympathy for the devil should be playing in the background.
Would read better like this:
Now that I thought about it, I couldn’t help but feel a supreme sense of guilt gut punch me. With my new understanding of what falling to ones death would be like, I couldn’t help but picture in my head what it must have been like, letting out a scared eek.
Got a space in the wrong place there.
Is it 44 or 48? Also, does this mean Cranky, that one donkey in the show, is in his seventies?
Gasp! How scandalous! The little slut. kek
Interactions with Dust Bucket are driving home the sympathy I see. Cherry is going to swap sides before this is over.
I was expecting some Bioshock Infinite music here...disappoint.
There it is, Sympathy for the Devil intensifies.
Oh look, it's Dew Drop. What a flirt! and boy can he sing, such range!
Eyup!
That's it, turn that PipBuck off and go find that cute blue Dewwy. Forget the birdhorse.
Damnit, foiled again!
Good chapter. This is setting up some major character conflict down the road. Cherry is going to have a hard time fighting these people when she gets out. I feel like Crimson is going to get a hard reality check. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Thank you <3 Love you <3 I wish more people would, That reminds me, I need to apologise to Regolit for not responding.
Thank you ever so much. I'm sorry about those, its too damn easy for them to slip by me and although I say it ever time, that I know I should spend more time trying to find those issues that make it through, I never do spend enough time extra on trying to search them out. I'll try to be better in future, but I really appreciate all those you pointed out -- and they've been followed through on. Especially the small rewording segments. Can't believe I let myself down on such basic things where if someone else had asked me how to word it better, I probably would've given the exact same answer (or near to it). Guess its just a lot harder to see your own mistakes.
Glad to hear it!
I'd like to think he's around that. Mid 60's and onwards makes sense to me, yeah. Maybe even higher, perhaps.
:^)
Sorry to let ya down! I didn't even think of that to be honest...
I wasn't sure if you'd want to kill me or love me for that, but...
This is why I knew it'd be okay. :D
Really glad to hear you enjoyed it! Sorry again for all of the issues! And thank you for taking the time to not comment, but bring all these issues to my attention!
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Just to do it officially, I've been meaning to reply for ages and ages but when I've been on FimFic its either to check a detail real quick or social anxiety was just kicking my ass for not having replied to you sooner. Thank you for the comment as always, its always appreciated and I should've said so earlier. Hope you can forgive me?
Nice to see an update, great work! Hope things get better.
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it and I appreciate you letting me know, its always a nice thing to see a comment of encouragement.
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Lemme smaaaaash derpicdn.net/img/view/2019/2/12/1959673.png
I brought stick. you like stick? Lemme smash
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Whoops! Ha, thank you very much for pointing that one out. Issues like these are such a pain because looking for grammar and spelling gets easier with experience - but looking for *content issues*? Those are a true pain in the ass.
I appreciate you pointing that out for me.
As for Cherry? Ooof, that's quite the prediction. Quite the prediction indeed.
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What can I say? Who wouldn't want to try their luck eh?
I cannot explain just how much my heart beats for this. I have been waiting for a long time, and was surprised with this.
I never stopped loving Cherry, but this gives me the feeling of falling in love all over again.
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Any chance this will ever reach the complete status ?
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Yep, it'll be completed, I promise. So long as I don't die unexpectedly, I have every intention of completing the story.
I'm cutting out a lot of unnecessary content from my old plans and changing details around in order to make it shorter and easier to attain completed status, but I've got just as much love for the story as I used to have (if not more) and I'm more determined than ever.
I've been going through multiple creative blocks since having returned and so I'm a lot slower as a writer than I was when I first started, but nothing short of death will stop me from seeing this through to the end, now.