I couldn't use 'Jewish-american'; it was awkward because I was referencing this.
Back in Queens New York, you distinctively tell who is 'what' depending on where they're from. Hence, I didn't know what else to go with other than 'Jewish accent' since you can tell by the way they talk. At least, with the elderly. Do you have another term to use for that type of accent? I wouldn't call it 'New Yorker' though.
2400792 I don't know what that accent would be reffered to as. But there is also no such thing as a 'Jewish-American' accent, either. 'Jewish' referes to a religion, after all, not a race or region of growth. The only real accents are based in regions or first languages.
Alternatively, you could simply refer to the pony as having a heavy accent, and turn the text into a link to that video.
There are those from Israel in the middle east. I was talking about one particularly from that nation. But you're right; people can get confused. Hence, I'll reference a link right now~
2400836 In that case, an 'Israeli' accent or 'Middle Eastern' accent would be the appropriate designation. Also specifying that the accent is 'heavy and distinctive' would be good as well.
Damn, I felt like saying HELL NO to this chapter about three times at thre begining but then I kept reading, it was very akward when Pinkie messed with Spike's tailhole but I still kept reading....damn, the Cakes are bastards, I would be pissed if I was Spike. Shit, you did very, very well with the sex though, really....lustful, can't stand rape but then I noticed it was not rape....huh.....this was a bucking weird chapter my friend.
For some reason I'm wondereing if some of the animals, namely Angel will join in with Spike and Fluttershy, hell even some of the Mane Six's pet, would love if Peewee aided them, but we shall see
2400797 Well, not that I know how the accent's supposed to sound like, I'd find it easier to understand "Listen 'ere!" than "Listen her'!" since "her'" can mean something else or be seen as a simple mistake, while "ere'" doesn't look like an error while used in an accent. But that's just my thought. EDIT: But i can see you used Italics to make it clear, nvm then.
That chapter was so HOT, but so many errors. Mostly just misused word and some CAP's missing that I'm to lazy to point them out right now, but other than that great chapter.
Just fucking with ya I know what you meant. Would be a interesting change of pace, but then again, the others would be vying for Spike's claw, and we haven't gotten to Rarity or Fluttershy yet.......
“So a pony is having soup in a restaurant right? He calls the waiter and says, ‘Waiter, waiter, waiter! There’s something ‘wrong’ with my soup! Come taste the soup!’. And the waiter goes, ‘Something wrong with the soup? Is the soup too hot?’. And then ‘he’ goes, ‘Would you just taste the soup?’, and the waiter goes, ‘Is the soup cold?’. AND THEN the pony says, ‘WOULD YOU JUST TASTE THE SOUP?’. Finally, the waiter goes, ‘Alright, alright, I’ll taste the soup! Where is the spoon?’.” The Jewish pony gave a smile and waved a finger before saying and gesturing, “Aha!”, thus indicating that the waiter never gave the pony the spoon in order for him to drink his soup.
love Coming to America, that's what the movies called right?
Spike feels sorry for the cakes and tries to do them a solid, only to find out he was being tricked and used all along? I so wanted him to just go off on them. They didn't feel ashamed at all and i highly doubt they would have tried that with any other dragon.
Hmmm. In chapter 2 it was heavily implied that Spike was either broke or low on money, seeing as he commented that he felt uncomfortable taking cash from Twilight's Purse. Yet, here, he has more then enough to buy what sounded like a slightly pricy shake and even left a tip. Did i miss something or am i reading too much into it?
Pinkie Pie was....herself, and was all kinds of awesome. I highly enjoyed this chapter and found it most excellent. Looking 4ward to more.
Hmmm...to be perfectly honest, I enjoyed Dash's time more. I always liked the innocent ones...
Although Pinkie gets bonus points for nearly turning her entire situation around...3 times? or did I miscount? At least I was right when I said Pinkie Pie scared me...
If innocent is what you want, then you're going to enjoy Fluttershy's~
Actually, Rainbow Dash wasn't really innocent if you closely read; she just wanted to be with males again because it's been too long and she has had her 'fun' if you read the chapter closely again.
What's with this paragraph? It's got bad grammar up the yin-yang Especially "VERY GOOD milkshake." which isn't a sentence
“Not everypony…” Spike confessed as he sighed in relief. VERY GOOD milkshake. “Thank you Mr. Cake.” Spike said smiling as he tossed a bit on the counter as tip. As he turned to walk away, Mr. Cake thought of something and stopped him.
The chapter seemed to me that she never really enjoyed any time with a stallion...I mean ass-raping a guy doesn't sound fun...(then again, this chapter showed that sometimes it CAN be fun...)
And then Dash was with mares all the time. So she may be not 'innocent' but she is innocent in the way of rolling in the hay with stallions.
And I'm positively looking forward to the next chapter.
As much as this joke is old, I'll do it nonetheless. .............................. .............................. .............................. ........I have a new fetish.
That may be an error, but if you look close enough you'll see an apostrophe where the missing letter is. A common sight when reading someone speaking with a certain dialect/accent, which depending on the writer or even the region/tone if the speaker can be good or bad.
And this was great! Don't apologize for a longer chapter--that's a good thing!
I really love this story, and I haven't had anything to really complain about so far...except this:
The one speaking sounded particularly Jewish
No. Just no. This is an insensitive stereotype against Jewish people. Jewish is not a race for starters. It is a religion, and the seems to be the one that people stereotype the most, so this is unacceptable. I don't care if you don't know what kind of accent that is exactly, but putting in that as a placeholder is appalling. There is no excuse for this. Using a video link so the reader gets an idea of what you are referring to is fine, but that should only be called a thick accent if you don't know what the proper nationality of that accent is.
first chapter where the logic goes out of the window haha why was Spike at sweet apple acres ? huh huh huh ? RIGHT ! because he didn't took any money from twilight ... but was still somehow funny ...
Pnkie scares me.
Never feel bad over being able to write more than you expect.
Worry when you find yourself writing less than you expect.
Over all, this chapter was very enjoyable. However, there is one part that I found highly offensive.
This. It is bullshit, based on flawed stereotypes, and needs to be changed. There is no such thing as a 'Jewish' accent.
Excellent, simply excellent.
Just found 3 tiny errors.
Here*
Public* Got an image of Pinkies Pubes shaped like an cabin
Pitied* Spike Pitied the foo.
damn! that was an awesome chapter
Yay Pinkie Pie!!!!
In other news, yes Spike, I also belive the ponies in this town are crazy!!
And nice Coming to America reference!!! I love that movie!!
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I couldn't use 'Jewish-american'; it was awkward because I was referencing this.
Back in Queens New York, you distinctively tell who is 'what' depending on where they're from. Hence, I didn't know what else to go with other than 'Jewish accent' since you can tell by the way they talk. At least, with the elderly. Do you have another term to use for that type of accent? I wouldn't call it 'New Yorker' though.
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I purposely wrote the first one like that. Hence the 'accent' I was trying to give.
For the other two, thanks for pointing those out!
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To this day, my favorite Eddie Murphy movie~~~
...ponies are crazy....i like it
keep up the good work.
2400792
I don't know what that accent would be reffered to as. But there is also no such thing as a 'Jewish-American' accent, either. 'Jewish' referes to a religion, after all, not a race or region of growth. The only real accents are based in regions or first languages.
Alternatively, you could simply refer to the pony as having a heavy accent, and turn the text into a link to that video.
2400826
There are those from Israel in the middle east. I was talking about one particularly from that nation. But you're right; people can get confused. Hence, I'll reference a link right now~
2400836
In that case, an 'Israeli' accent or 'Middle Eastern' accent would be the appropriate designation. Also specifying that the accent is 'heavy and distinctive' would be good as well.
Damn, I felt like saying HELL NO to this chapter about three times at thre begining but then I kept reading, it was very akward when Pinkie messed with Spike's tailhole but I still kept reading....damn, the Cakes are bastards, I would be pissed if I was Spike. Shit, you did very, very well with the sex though, really....lustful, can't stand rape but then I noticed it was not rape....huh.....this was a bucking weird chapter my friend.
For some reason I'm wondereing if some of the animals, namely Angel will join in with Spike and Fluttershy, hell even some of the Mane Six's pet, would love if Peewee aided them, but we shall see
2400797
Well, not that I know how the accent's supposed to sound like, I'd find it easier to understand "Listen 'ere!" than "Listen her'!" since "her'" can mean something else or be seen as a simple mistake, while "ere'" doesn't look like an error while used in an accent.
But that's just my thought.
EDIT: But i can see you used Italics to make it clear, nvm then.
Amazing.
I'm REALLY loving dashie on this fic, shes just... HNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGG!
Next one she will ask spike to be her* drakefriend
Totally saw it coming, but that's just because I always assume the Cakes are secretly evil!
You my friend are a sick perverted black golden god.......
write more soon....
That chapter was so HOT, but so many errors. Mostly just misused word and some CAP's missing that I'm to lazy to point them out right now, but other than that great chapter.
37 chace wow how the hell can she even count with that kind of fucken
ps fen awsome
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How can Spike be his own drakefriend?
Just fucking with ya I know what you meant. Would be a interesting change of pace, but then again, the others would be vying for Spike's claw, and we haven't gotten to Rarity or Fluttershy yet.......
That leaves just Fluttershy and Rarity.
Tag yo' human wanna' be antro stuff, yo! I ain't here for hands! I'm here for hooves!
2403004 And then a harem. Because you know it's coming.
Are there going to be more ponies that Spike makes love with than just the Mane 6?
2403004
Really, there are the pet's doc and Spitfire. They appeared in the "Secret of My Excess".
Could we get some bonus chapters featuring other characters like Mrs. Cake, Zecora, Spitfire, etc.?
love Coming to America, that's what the movies called right?
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Eeyup.
Spike feels sorry for the cakes and tries to do them a solid, only to find out he was being tricked and used all along? I so wanted him to just go off on them. They didn't feel ashamed at all and i highly doubt they would have tried that with any other dragon.
Hmmm. In chapter 2 it was heavily implied that Spike was either broke or low on money, seeing as he commented that he felt uncomfortable taking cash from Twilight's Purse. Yet, here, he has more then enough to buy what sounded like a slightly pricy shake and even left a tip. Did i miss something or am i reading too much into it?
Pinkie Pie was....herself, and was all kinds of awesome. I highly enjoyed this chapter and found it most excellent. Looking 4ward to more.
2405009 Why the last 2, if i may ask? Actually, nvm, that does make sense and would be interesting.
Hmmm...to be perfectly honest, I enjoyed Dash's time more. I always liked the innocent ones...
Although Pinkie gets bonus points for nearly turning her entire situation around...3 times? or did I miscount?
At least I was right when I said Pinkie Pie scared me...
2406057
Good eye~
Actually, Spike just wanted a excuse NOT to go into town. I was thinking of having Applejack giving him money but that didn't seem right.
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If innocent is what you want, then you're going to enjoy Fluttershy's~
Actually, Rainbow Dash wasn't really innocent if you closely read; she just wanted to be with males again because it's been too long and she has had her 'fun' if you read the chapter closely again.
2406674
Fair enough. Yeah, if anything he should have paid her money for that barrel of apples he ate.
2406695
He did pay; in sex.
2406699
Heh, but wasn't it sex that he practically begged for?
You're right, though.
What's with this paragraph? It's got bad grammar up the yin-yang Especially "VERY GOOD milkshake." which isn't a sentence
2406694
The chapter seemed to me that she never really enjoyed any time with a stallion...I mean ass-raping a guy doesn't sound fun...(then again, this chapter showed that sometimes it CAN be fun...)
And then Dash was with mares all the time. So she may be not 'innocent' but she is innocent in the way of rolling in the hay with stallions.
And I'm positively looking forward to the next chapter.
2412682
Really?
As much as this joke is old, I'll do it nonetheless.
..............................
..............................
..............................
........I have a new fetish.
2400792
I KNEW you got that joke from 'Coming to America'.
Anyway, that was one very kinky story.
2400690
That may be an error, but if you look close enough you'll see an apostrophe where the missing letter is.
A common sight when reading someone speaking with a certain dialect/accent, which depending on the writer or even the region/tone if the speaker can be good or bad.
And this was great! Don't apologize for a longer chapter--that's a good thing!
THAT'S MY GIRL.
I really love this story, and I haven't had anything to really complain about so far...except this:
No. Just no. This is an insensitive stereotype against Jewish people. Jewish is not a race for starters. It is a religion, and the seems to be the one that people stereotype the most, so this is unacceptable. I don't care if you don't know what kind of accent that is exactly, but putting in that as a placeholder is appalling. There is no excuse for this. Using a video link so the reader gets an idea of what you are referring to is fine, but that should only be called a thick accent if you don't know what the proper nationality of that accent is.
This made way too much sense...
3696973 the funny thing is i know exactly what you mean
first chapter where the logic goes out of the window haha
why was Spike at sweet apple acres ? huh huh huh ? RIGHT ! because he didn't took any money from twilight ...
but was still somehow funny ...