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Yeah, that's my favorite Eddy Murphy movie~

"Ponyidas". I like that a lot. This has got to be my favorite chapter! Great job!

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Spike be careful your swag can get you killed.

Like I said, I'll be skipping the Spike/Rarity chapter, and I honestly, seriously hope Rarity does not return Spike's feelings for her, Spike and Twilight have so much passion together, for this to turn somehow into Spike/Rarity would make me very angry and with regret would have to make me stop reading the story, sorry bro but Spike/Rarity is my least favorite pairing EVER and I could just not keep reading, though if it's only a one sided crush with Spike I guess I could keep it up, long as he ends up with some other mare (if at all) that's just my two cents and how I feel, I am sorry, honestly.

You are an AMAZING writer and I'm a big fan of your work, just not the pairing, you know?

After Rarity, the next day he should get all 6 in one day.

A very nice continuation.
However, I suddenly have a mental image of this happening at the end of the chapter after next:

"Dear Twilight,
Wherever did you get the idea that Dragons and Ponies couldn't crossbreed? In point of fact, the only reason such crossbreeds are rare is because, as dragons grow to maturity, they become unusually large relative to ponies, making breeding...uncomfortable on the part of the mare, or dull on the part of the dragoness. However, genetically there is no reason that ponies and dragons couldn't crossbreed.
However, one other factor is that dragons have an unusually high inner magic levels, and require a high level of magic in the formative stage of gestation, and most mares can't produce enough. ...hypothetically, a mare bound to an Element of Harmony could, in theory, produce enough magic to do that. However, given the high magic energy of dragons - especially ones experiencing accererated growth - a mare with the magic to sustain a dragon/pony child would experience instant insemination on receiving dragon sperm in their womb, whether they were ovulating at the time or not.
Of course, I fail to see how this situation could possibly come about, so this is all purely hypothetical.
Your Teacher,
Twilight Sparkle."

Note: Twilight would probably be unusually vague about why she's asking, I think, because she wouldn't want to tell Celestia what she and her friends had been doing with Spike.

Now imagine if this letter popped out of Spike's mouth while he was wrapped up in Rarity's embrace just after they had...copulated, and Spike unrolls it to see who it is for and ends up reading it with Rarity lying on top of him.

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Clever. But I do plan on doing something about that. Just stay tune~

Hope you enjoyed it~

And here i was thinking that this story was going to turn into a harem.

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I promise to give a proper edit after I sleep~ I don't know why but I do tend to 'finish' these when it's late in my timezone.

Thanks for the tip!

I'm still keeping my hooves crossed for a harem ending where Spike gets ALL the Mane 6.

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I enjoyed it immensely. Look forward to seeing what you do.

if he doesn't end up with a harem, it would be ironic to see fluttershy and twilight get pregnent from this anyway.

dude this is going to be fucking epic effenses on fucking

Rarity will come in afternoon, Spike can buck Twilight a little more.

Yea, Twilight deserves more loving anyway.

Rarity should be so lucky to have Spike's love after all the mares he had the pleasure of being with. Oh, he is going to turn that mare OUT!

Pinkie Pie turned and gave a nasty glare at Pinkie Pie. Should be rainbow Dash

Nice chapter, little disappointed I'm being robbed of my Sparity for the moment, but it was very well played and it forced a few major issues. The casualness of the sex is acceptable because that's plenty reasonable in real life, but the girls seem far too attached to let it go at that. Especially if Rarity wanted him to be exclusive in a dating relationship. I'm gonna keep hoping for the harem ending even if this does seem to shed a light into it not being.

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Thanks for pointing that out. It's horrible editing at night.

And yes well you'll see what happens later.

I think Spike need a day or two of rest...he is as worn out as hell.

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Nothing that sleeping for the night and having a big breakfast can't help~

“I am sure that if Rarity wants kids that badly and shares my feelings, then adaptation would be possible right?”

While it would be adapting to the situation, I believe you meant Adoption right?

The tightness and ‘forbidden’ fetish that it carried, make sex even better for hm.

Him*

Dear Princess Celestia
I had buck Twilight, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Pinkle Pie, and ,Futtershy all in one day. After I'm done bucking Rarity I'm coming for you Princess.
Sincerely yours grown up dragon Spike.

Dear Spike
My body is ready, and I'll be waiting.
Sincerely your horny princess Celestia.

YES! More TwiSpike!
as for crossbreeds, i'm of the D&D school of thought, that Dragons can breed with anything, ANYTHING! including plants, yes plants!
i look forward to more

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Yeah, I just got back from another interview and I'll get that fixed~

Another awesome and most excellent chapter. Everyponies reactions when they found out what Spike had been doing all day was priceless!

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Never was there any 'abused' sex; it only stated that her brother was the first. So you want to assume that it was a raped sexual encounter rather than the possibility that they came on to one another with consent from both? Especially when fiction like this can easily relate to how MUCH of a bond Twilight has with Shining Armor?

Honestly, I think that if I was aiming to make it obvious to be 'dark-themed', I would have put that in the genre and followed along with it, but I didn't throughout the story.

And I am sorry if you didn't like the beast-rape that Spike brought upon Twilight, but maybe you should read the rest of the story (particularity the last chapter where he sees her again) before assuming that this is a dark story.

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An 11 year old having sex with an adult is ipso facto abusive. That's why we have age of consent laws in the real world. Had you not made her a preteen when this occurred, I would not have commented on it. But you did, and thus it was very much comment worthy.

You've included many elements that should reasonably be considered "dark" elements, and justification for the dark tag. It doesn't matter how the rest of the story balances out. What does matter is that in the narrative, these things are just glossed over, without any narrative commentary.

Look at chapter 1. Spike forces sex on Twilight without her consent. After considerable protest, she gives in. That's rape, and that's dark as hell. But, in spite of this, there's no indication from the third person narrative that this is even considered a problem. It's hand-waved away because she ended up "enjoying it in the end."

I'm not opposed to people using rape as a narrative device, but having read the first two chapters you haven't done the subject justice. And I am commenting not in the mean spirited attempt to belittle you, but to urge you to improve the presentation of your work. And I have to reiterate: when you're writing erotica, leaving things like rape untagged is poor form. You don't even have to use the word; I believe the accepted euphemism is NonCon, for "nonconsensual".

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11 years old? I thought that since the characters would be around 20 (or around young adults) since they work (like how Rarity and Applejack owns their own respective businesses). And Spike would be 5 years younger (if I've counted that right by the age of 'horses' and supposed dragons. In fact, horses in real life mature within 4-5 years. Dragons, yeah we 'all' kinda just BS it... So in fact, Spike is a 'adult' since he's reached that age and with all general fanfiction done with this series~. Yes it may be questionable, but it's finfiction done in fantasy world of colored talking ponies.

But you know that in Equestria has it's own laws different from ours; the real world has countries with many different age of consent laws. some countries in the middle east, you can get have sex at the age of only if you get married. Some countries are at 12, some are at 13, some are at 21. The laws world wide are different than the ranges between 17-20. In fact, eras like the middle ages had girls having sex the moment that they went through their first cycle. Because it was believed that if you 'flowered', you were mature enough to have sex for mothering your husband's children regardless of HIS age.

No I don't believe in sexual relationships within an age difference between 9 and up, but what I am trying to say here that Equestria isn't the real world and various cultures from different parts of the real world have their own age of consent and beliefs regarding 'sexual-relations'. In fact, Equestria could have the same law believing that a mare is allowed to have sex only after her first period (similar to the very old beliefs in the middle ages and etc.). I could write that but I didn't.

As for the rape, did he abuse her? Did he physically harm her? She couldn't fight her urges but some people here believed that it's her sexual fantasy (not that I pointed that out) since 'rape' can be a sexual fetish (and not real real rape). Hence somehow, Twilight didn't seem to mind after she enjoyed it (like how she explained in the recent chapter). Spike's character-development is showing that he's acknowledging what he did. Because it's true: we all fall into our urges in one form or another. It works out in the end because he made up with her.

But Look, I won't argue with you because you have your own points and dislikes towards that particular 'theme' and I can't tell you what fetish is wrong for others to like and what fetish is good for others to like. I'll respect your opinion as I do appreciate honesty from my readers, but remember that everyone has their own opinion and not everyone would agree that this was a case of abusive 'the scar inside her mind' type of rape. Yes I'll admit that it was 'forced', but in the end, it was forgiven because he was thinking with his penis rather than his mind.

This is all comedy with sex in different styles/situations in every chapter that isn't surrounding 'rape' or 'forced' as the main style.

I do however apologize if I offended you in anyway and do know the sensitivity on how some view 'rape' but this is pure fiction and not real ~

I don't always read clopfics but I guess I was just interested. this a really good one!!!

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I figured that their accents would sound 'right' if I wrote them that way but thanks for the feedback!

Another great chapter!

Loved the discussion with the girls and their story-swapping. And yay for twilight!

Umm I got that you updated... But there's nothing there.

Wheres the update

I'll bet Twilight is thinking about the sideburns song now.
~somebody get me some Aloe Verra~

"Tomorrow for sure"

fucking spongebob

Spike: I just want you to know that all your problems can be solved with my penis

Spike being a dragon, he couldn’t impregnate Rarity as ponies and dragons couldn’t cross-breed. Because of this, children of her own by blood, couldn’t be a possibility.

There's three ponies that might disagree with you.

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Sorry, just figure I get it out there.

“I could still TASTE you girls from his penis~”

I wonder what RD tastes like.

(Cough) "skittles"

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Rainbow sherbert

Wanting to go along with it, “I couldn’t; no matter how hard I tied to make it RAIN, I couldn’t make or find any clouds. It’s been oddly sunny all day…”

CELESTIA YOU BITCH!!!!!!!!!

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You could have just said it's just Fiction instead of writing that long explantation.😒

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Hahahaha