Pinkie Pie is leaving you at home for a week so she can go run off to the Crystal Kingdom with her friends. You two lead a very loving romance, tons of sexual exploration. Perfect right? Well no matter what the situation she will not, under any cir
"Although you know her as the princess of teddy bears, stuffing and chocolate. The lost element of harmony Glitter, because obviously glitter was the missing element."
-sighs- I was really enjoying this story up until this point i just can't deal with foal stuff, especially Diamond Tiara. I'd like to say i can tough it out and just read the rest of it but i just don't know. We'll see
2221963 Please read the AN at the end of the chapter There will not be any Filly fooling, it helps set up for something in a few chapters 2221749 Sleep is for weirdos 2221920 :) I really forgot they had those.
Xenophilia, its a good clop fic, I recommend looking it up and reading it. Not complete clop, story with it obviously. This chapter. Aww I was looking forward to cheerilee part
Xenophile is a very good story here. It was probably the one that got the idea of herds as a relationship method more popular around here. That and all sorts of other ideas for pony culture. I would highly recommend checking it out if I were you.
Ah, the next chapter. I hope he washes his hands afterwards. You'd be surprised at the amount of pollution that can be found in an area the size of a dime. Or in Cup Cake's case a fifty cent coin.
2222163 When i thought of the idea for herding i thought it was very original 2222154 Corrected :D thank you for the catches and i am going to start story boarding for chapter four tomorrow. 2222091 :D Well Bon-bon might have somthing to say about that. 2222093 Fun for all! 2222049 He he he he
Mr. Frost has leveled up! Class Unlocked: (Pony) Dragoon Loot: Cup Cake Loot: Pearl Achievement Unlocked: In Soviet Equestria horse rides you! New Objective: Lyra&Bob-Bon, Cheerilee New Side-quest: Fix the spoiled brat.... Wanted: Carrot Cake (Dead Or Alive, Preferred Beaten To Death By Scootaloo Herself) Soviet Equestria Scootabuse! I can't wait until another chapter Mr. Frost.
I loved the big iron song part for some reason I could picture it and hear it all too well ( LOVE THAT SONG BTW) and the godfather reference too much. I really liked this chapter such a great thing to read before sleeping. Cant wait till Lyras part (neither can she i bet)
While the title is starting to feel a bit misleading, though perhaps it will come back around when pinkie returns on friday, I have to , say, this is one of the best clop stories I've ever read. Heck, even compared to non-clop stories, this is easily in my top five favorite stories. I really hope to see this story continue to evolve, and hopefully not come to an abrupt end (at least not without room for a sequel). I give extra props for how you've worked DT in the story, as I love stories that give me a reason to not hate diamond tiara.
Also, with talk of Dazzle, I have the strange urge to see a scene with the main character (Me since this is second person) Twilight, and Dazzle.... Pearl and rarity? This story can lead to all kinds of fun things.
Again, I apologize for not being able to help you with this chapter. I did say I would, after all. Just call on me next time, hopefully I won't be busy again.
Y'know. I think it's entirely possible Discord's bein' a bro and rigging it so Mr. Frost here can have his pick of mares. Out of the single ones, at least.
Also, the name thing amuses me. If I keep thinking about it I won't be able to picture him as anyone but Kyon. I do have to wonder if that was an intentional reference or not.
This story just keeps getting better and better, here's hoping Mr.Frost and Cup will not be afraid to ask Twilight to pull some strings for dealing with that oddball scheme Carrot is up to.
2221798>>2221808 I'm fairly certain they mean Xenophilia, and I must say I'm hurt . Xenophilia was one of the first stories on the site to have herding as a common form of relationship in Equestria and examined that as well as many other parts of the culture from a sociological standpoint. Since it's also a mature HiE story, it's pretty much inevitable that you'll draw comparisons to it, heck one author even tried to blatantly plagiarize it.
Your pre-readers still missed quite a few spelling mistakes, but many of them were homonyms so it's just my picky brain catching them most of the time. However, it was the scientific portion of my brain that nearly rose up in revolt from this:
its ten thousand jewels of electricity bolting down at random.
it's, joules, and you're off by a few factors of ten... an average 3 mile long lightning bolt can carry over ten billion joules of energy, enough to power a 100W light bulb for over three years.
2222645 Well I really thought it was a band name. From the looks of it, it seems to be a hugely popular story. ( But i have over triple your down votes So i can take pride and say mine is more hated.... ) When i first thought of the idea of herding i thought it was a really original concept. I don't get the chance to read many fic (Work + college + gaming + writing) I guess two herding stories would be soul bound to get compared to each other i guess. Although i don't like saying my story is better than anyone else. I'm not that big of a narcissist. One day il have to give your story a read through. Although it will be after im done writing PPP. I don't want to be accused of stealing ideas. Oh and also thanks for the scientific catch Have a Twist.
2222639 Maybe maybe not who knows, guess you'll have to keep reading to find out.
2222630 Twilight is in the Crystal kingdom :3 and Frost will be having his hand full at the moment.
Finally read it (I ended up passing out) and you must not have good proofreaders; it's mostly just off punctuation, commas where there should be semicolons. But there were also places where there obviously should have been a comma, but instead, there was a whole new sentence. However, I really must say that I like where the story is going. I call side story of trading partners relationships among Mane6 parents.
I really like this story, but there are some errors you may want to know about. For example, you have the word aloud instead of allowed, the word curtain instead of certain, and at one point, Lyra is referred to as Lura. Still, this is a really good story and I look forward to seeing more.
Can't say tghat this is my favorite chapter. I thought the first half was cute. The second half though, with the whole swinger thing I did not like. I am a romantic and that just bothers me.
2222892 Corrected, thanks for the catch. 2222934 Poor anon. 2223243 "You did what with my mom?" 2223245 It seems i could get 1000 proofers and there will be errors 2223383 Thank you for the catch, im glad you like my clop. 2223545 So many errors, so little time ;-; 2223594 getting the right amount of Clop and romance is key
2224451 Sorry no magic aging potions in this fiction :P 2224987 Thank you very much and Yes i was playing FONV recently :p 2225225 Yes, yes, it will be.
2222645 Its ok I am currently reading your Xenophile series and it’s by far one of my favorites. It took me a while to, well adjust to a storyline with clop in it until I had read it I was not ever sure it was possible, and yet then I found this story witch I greatly enjoy as well but Xenophilia was my first and currently remains at the number one spot for my favorite clop-fics with this on as a close second.
And I was about to go to bed.
"Although you know her as the princess of teddy bears, stuffing and chocolate. The lost element of harmony Glitter, because obviously glitter was the missing element."
God i love this story
2198918 I will agree, This story is better than Xenophile.
2221798 Xenophile? That a band or something?
Dat ending. Lyra puppets for everyone
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-sighs- I was really enjoying this story up until this point i just can't deal with foal stuff, especially Diamond Tiara. I'd like to say i can tough it out and just read the rest of it but i just don't know. We'll see
2221963 Please read the AN at the end of the chapter There will not be any Filly fooling, it helps set up for something in a few chapters
2221749 Sleep is for weirdos
2221920 :) I really forgot they had those.
Xenophilia, its a good clop fic, I recommend looking it up and reading it. Not complete clop, story with it obviously. This chapter. Aww I was looking forward to cheerilee part
He's so screwed with Lyra, Literally.
Anal fisting party tomorrow with Lyra!
Drunken mare antics FTW!:
All in all there weren't many errors; just the standard missed comma, or apostrophe, but there were a couple things
obviously black barriers should be blackberries
This sentence is down right confusing without the commas
Still, a great chapter to a fantastic story, keep it up!!!
Xenophile is a very good story here. It was probably the one that got the idea of herds as a relationship method more popular around here. That and all sorts of other ideas for pony culture. I would highly recommend checking it out if I were you.
Ah, the next chapter. I hope he washes his hands afterwards. You'd be surprised at the amount of pollution that can be found in an area the size of a dime. Or in Cup Cake's case a fifty cent coin.
2222163 When i thought of the idea for herding i thought it was very original
2222154 Corrected :D thank you for the catches and i am going to start story boarding for chapter four tomorrow.
2222091 :D Well Bon-bon might have somthing to say about that.
2222093 Fun for all!
2222049 He he he he
Mr. Frost has leveled up!
Class Unlocked: (Pony) Dragoon
Loot: Cup Cake
Loot: Pearl
Achievement Unlocked: In Soviet Equestria horse rides you!
New Objective: Lyra&Bob-Bon, Cheerilee
New Side-quest: Fix the spoiled brat....
Wanted: Carrot Cake (Dead Or Alive, Preferred Beaten To Death By Scootaloo Herself) Soviet Equestria Scootabuse!
I can't wait until another chapter Mr. Frost.
I recognised the song from extensive fallout new vegas gameplay.
Also, why u deprive me of Cheerilee? I was hoping for her ever since she walked in on their frosting experience.
2222250 Either way it is still a fic definitely worth reading.
I loved the big iron song part for some reason I could picture it and hear it all too well ( LOVE THAT SONG BTW) and the godfather reference too much. I really liked this chapter such a great thing to read before sleeping. Cant wait till Lyras part (neither can she i bet)
While the title is starting to feel a bit misleading, though perhaps it will come back around when pinkie returns on friday, I have to , say, this is one of the best clop stories I've ever read. Heck, even compared to non-clop stories, this is easily in my top five favorite stories. I really hope to see this story continue to evolve, and hopefully not come to an abrupt end (at least not without room for a sequel). I give extra props for how you've worked DT in the story, as I love stories that give me a reason to not hate diamond tiara.
Also, with talk of Dazzle, I have the strange urge to see a scene with the main character (Me since this is second person) Twilight, and Dazzle.... Pearl and rarity? This story can lead to all kinds of fun things.
Again, I apologize for not being able to help you with this chapter. I did say I would, after all.
Just call on me next time, hopefully I won't be busy again.
Y'know. I think it's entirely possible Discord's bein' a bro and rigging it so Mr. Frost here can have his pick of mares. Out of the single ones, at least.
Also, the name thing amuses me. If I keep thinking about it I won't be able to picture him as anyone but Kyon. I do have to wonder if that was an intentional reference or not.
This story just keeps getting better and better, here's hoping Mr.Frost and Cup will not be afraid to ask Twilight to pull some strings for dealing with that oddball scheme Carrot is up to.
Oh yay an orgy in the next chapter.
I anticipate it...highly.
2221798>>2221808
I'm fairly certain they mean Xenophilia, and I must say I'm hurt .
Xenophilia was one of the first stories on the site to have herding as a common form of relationship in Equestria and examined that as well as many other parts of the culture from a sociological standpoint.
Since it's also a mature HiE story, it's pretty much inevitable that you'll draw comparisons to it, heck one author even tried to blatantly plagiarize it.
Your pre-readers still missed quite a few spelling mistakes, but many of them were homonyms so it's just my picky brain catching them most of the time. However, it was the scientific portion of my brain that nearly rose up in revolt from this:
it's, joules, and you're off by a few factors of ten... an average 3 mile long lightning bolt can carry over ten billion joules of energy, enough to power a 100W light bulb for over three years.
2222645 Well I really thought it was a band name. From the looks of it, it seems to be a hugely popular story. ( But i have over triple your down votes So i can take pride and say mine is more hated.... ) When i first thought of the idea of herding i thought it was a really original concept. I don't get the chance to read many fic (Work + college + gaming + writing) I guess two herding stories would be soul bound to get compared to each other i guess. Although i don't like saying my story is better than anyone else. I'm not that big of a narcissist. One day il have to give your story a read through. Although it will be after im done writing PPP. I don't want to be accused of stealing ideas. Oh and also thanks for the scientific catch Have a Twist.
2222639 Maybe maybe not who knows, guess you'll have to keep reading to find out.
2222630 Twilight is in the Crystal kingdom :3 and Frost will be having his hand full at the moment.
2222501 Discord has his own adjenda
2222490 Do not worry, the time will come when you will be able to polish my works from coals to diamonds.
2222474 Yes, this story will lead to all sorts of fun and exciting things. As for DT, she just a cute ol' smitten filly :D
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2222420 I will after i get done writing PPP i don't want to be accused of copying ideas.
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Still though, the filly looked like you look her favorite flower and crushed it
I don't think you really want to say look in this part.
I lost it.
Finally read it (I ended up passing out) and you must not have good proofreaders; it's mostly just off punctuation, commas where there should be semicolons. But there were also places where there obviously should have been a comma, but instead, there was a whole new sentence. However, I really must say that I like where the story is going. I call side story of trading partners relationships among Mane6 parents.
Commence read.
Well this needs a sweep through by an editor, if possible.
Should be were. And still going strong with this. Have to say, this is one of my favorite clopfics.
I really like this story, but there are some errors you may want to know about. For example, you have the word aloud instead of allowed, the word curtain instead of certain, and at one point, Lyra is referred to as Lura. Still, this is a really good story and I look forward to seeing more.
Can't say tghat this is my favorite chapter. I thought the first half was cute. The second half though, with the whole swinger thing I did not like. I am a romantic and that just bothers me.
i think you need a better proofer.
2223596
I was never able to edit.
He sent me the link, and when I went to it, I was unable to do anything.
2223928why?
2223936
He didn't make the doc open to people with the link, nor did he share it via e-mail.
2223978you could have copied it to a word document, edited it there, and then PM'd it to him.
2223985
I use a cell phone to do my writing.
2223990and there's th' reason that i use a laptop.
2224018
My laptop is broken.
2222892 Corrected, thanks for the catch.
2222934 Poor anon.
2223243 "You did what with my mom?"
2223245 It seems i could get 1000 proofers and there will be errors
2223383 Thank you for the catch, im glad you like my clop.
2223545 So many errors, so little time ;-;
2223594 getting the right amount of Clop and romance is key
2224090 It's bound to happen.
2224027...wow.
2224090
Yeah. Though I just think that clop is better when there is a romance behind it.
and then diamond tiara drank an age changing potion, and anon had to fuck her silly on her father's desk :3
You been playing New Vegas recently? c: beautiful chapter btw.
I think the next chapter is going to be very interesting to say the least.
2224451 Sorry no magic aging potions in this fiction :P
2224987 Thank you very much and Yes i was playing FONV recently :p
2225225 Yes, yes, it will be.
2222645 Its ok I am currently reading your Xenophile series and it’s by far one of my favorites. It took me a while to, well adjust to a storyline with clop in it until I had read it I was not ever sure it was possible, and yet then I found this story witch I greatly enjoy as well but Xenophilia was my first and currently remains at the number one spot for my favorite clop-fics with this on as a close second.
“Sit. On. My. Face.”