Luna thinks Celestia has gone soft. Celestia reacts about as well as expected. The two sisters meet on the pitched field of the Iron Pony Competition to settle the score.
The second anniversary of the Return is approaching, and all Luna wants for the celebration is one thing -- something Equestria hasn't seen in more than a thousand years. This could be a problem.
Having defeated the scourge of news stories about her banal personal life, Twilight must now face a far greater and more embarrassing threat: News stories about her love life.
LOL. I think you can carry this gag well. Though I see no reason to include a silly plot, What point is there in a rhyming onslaught? What could be the princess' reason? If I were Twilight I would begin treason. It is a odd way and one which my criticism I cannot relieve, But otherwise it was a very fun read. To keep the purpose of this comment alive, I give the story a four point five.
Personally I find rhyming one of the hardest things to do on purpose. xD This story was quite charming and I like how this unusual situation came to be. =3 And of course Pinkie's breaking fourth wall was enjoyable.
But what about Zecora?!
135887 Damn you.
Did zecora speak normal?
aside.
LOL.
I think you can carry this gag well.
Though I see no reason to include a silly plot,
What point is there in a rhyming onslaught?
What could be the princess' reason?
If I were Twilight I would begin treason.
It is a odd way and one which my criticism I cannot relieve,
But otherwise it was a very fun read.
To keep the purpose of this comment alive,
I give the story a four point five.
Personally I find rhyming one of the hardest things to do on purpose. xD
This story was quite charming and I like how this unusual situation came to be. =3
And of course Pinkie's breaking fourth wall was enjoyable.
I like poems