Star Sparkle. Accomplished author, diplomat, historian and mother to one of the most famous mares in Equestrian history. She has no regrets, but she does have a problem: she ran out of gin last night. And her daughter is marrying an ape.
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I really feel sorry for Twilight, stuck with having probably the most unlikable, anger-inducing, murder-tempting mare in all of Equestria as her mother. Star Sparkle is seriously all different kinds of messed up. And a borderline alcoholic, to boot. I'd seriously rather spend a week with Diamond Tiara than a day with her.
This. I like this.
Booze, surprise family visits, and a language with just enough differences from English that I can't make heads or tails of it. Fun times, but I do wish I knew what Star and Zecora were laughing about. I also hope we get to see Lero interacting with Twilight's family. It seems like it'd be most enjoyable.
In any case, looking forward to more.
The fact that every pony in Twilight's herd could physically break Star in horrible ways makes her seem like she's just waiting for that beat down.
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To be honest I wonder if she's looking for punishment over Twilight Sparkle, the mare is all kinds of messed up.
"Sar" should presumably be "Star".
"Star" is an interjection here, so it should have a comma before it.
And stared into what? If she's staring into her glass, this should probably be "and stared into it".
"Lets" should be "let's" to indicate the expansion of "let us".
1. You have a space between "Twilight" and "'s", and 2. "Hooved" should probably be "hooves".
"Just show of his chin" doesn't make sense. Did you mean "just short of his chin"?
Again, "lets" should be "let's", since the context suggests you mean "let us".
You're missing a period after "Lero".
"Twilight to hope from her chair" doesn't make sense. Did you mean "hop"?
"Lets" should be "let's", since replacing it with "let us" makes sense in context.
Can we get a section with the translation for the Tok Pisin?
Interesting to see the psychological parallels between Star and Twilight, and where they diverge... I can't say that I would like Star as a person, but the more you write, the more interesting she becomes.
And I'm sure if I looked hard enough I could find some regret in Twilight – somewhere – but there's far more (to my eye) in Star than she would ever let on, despite the title. It's just like a black hole: It's hidden, highly compressed, and you'd never know it was there without long-term observation – or the death of a star or two thrown in to make it truly obvious. And then that's tucked away in the back of a constantly refilling cabinet of curiosities that always takes precedence over everything else. She seems like a very sad character to me, using her fascination with the rest of the world to fill the void she has in another she chose not to be a part of. Just my feeling, anyway...
Excellent chapter - this was a fun and interesting read.
2395744 I love you man. No homo. Well maybe a little homo.
2395770 Mmm, I'm tempted to say if more people ask I'll post one. I want to see if my amateurish attempts at conlanging can actually be interpreted before I do.
2396284 More indeed shall be had! Eventually.
2397126 I dub thee pony psychologist of Tuesday Morning. Use your powers wisely.
2394993>>2395069>>2395473 Yeah, she's not exactly firing on all cylinders is she?
2395029 Next chapter gives them all a lot more air time and might explain a little more about everyone's personality. Might. Or might not. I make no promises so I can tell no lies.
2394997 Excellent!
This took so long! I missed it.
That was quite the chapter there, and completely understandable as to why it took so long to dish out.
Really though, your writing? That's some high quality shit right there.
Also, congratulations on making me dislike the character of Star more than I thought would be possible. I want to like her and enjoy all her little musings, but after most of her interactions with other ponies (especially the ones she's supposed to be close too) I can't help but think "Dammit Star!"
You've created these moments where we can see that little ounce of good in her, or at least make us want to pity her, but then she goes and does what she does best: She speaks.
Bravo sir, you've developed Star into quite the interesting character.
Now that the complements have been given where they are due, I will say that the different language parts kind of threw me off, and I just ended up skipping most if it until the conversation returned to normal. It'd be nice if you posted up a translation in either a blog post or in the scraps story you have. I do think the foreign interaction between Zecora and Star was a really nice touch, and should be left as is in the story, but an optional translation for us lazy people would be appreciated.
2397231 Me a psychologist? That's just crazy talk! I guess I did kind of over-analyze, though.
Star glanced to one side as Twilight Velvet sidled up next to her again. Whatever feud had existed between them was forgotten for the moment as the wide-eyed unicorn stared at the door. She took a step toward Lucent without a word. The others pressed in closer as well, wrapping around the two stallions like brightly coloured wall. Even Star felt the urge to push herself in front of them, standing between her stallions and the ill-defined danger that door presented to the primitive parts of her mind. Instead she locked her knees and pounded on the door again.
--- Aww... the most touching part of the story: family solidarity, the lovings heads-of-household mares instinctively sweeping into protective mode for their vulnerable stallions, even Star!
You're almost disappointed that there isn't a snaggletoothed werewolf behind the door, asking, "Won't you join us for..... DINNER?"
Though now I'm disappointed with how the chapter ended. I WANTED to see the family interact with Lero! I wanted to learn more about Twilight Sparkle and Shining Armor's yet-to-be-revealed siblings!
- Louis
Stepford Wives reference?
Also, Velvet's filly brings questions of how old Star and Velvet are and when Star started teaching at the university. I assume that Twilight Sparkle (TS) is around 20-25 with Shining being about 2 years older.
Did Crincile walk off somewhere?
The whole Zebrican speech was annoying, I basically just glossed over it not really caring. Though the bit with Zecora removing Star from the presence of Twilight was interesting. Does Zecora just hope to remove Star from Twilight's life as much as possible or try and teach her a few things. Training Star does not seem feasible at this point, she is too much of a bitch.
"like a brightly colored wall"
New disease?
"short"
2399289 The current date is early 1216. Lucent, Star and Velvet are in their very late 50s. Shining is approximately 30, Twilight Sparkle is around 23. Star was a postdoc doing lecturing work in between archaeological trips when she became pregnant the first time, and quite the up-and-coming, ah-hahaha, star of her field. She became a full time lecturer shortly before Twilight was born, took a sabbatical right after (and I mean right after) but somehow managed to keep her job at the university in the meantime. She gained tenure around the turn of the century, also around the same time as she became more involved in diplomatic work, and it's a decision the university has regretted ever since.
Guiding Light is around 9 and was born when Twilight Velvet was around 49 or 48 or something along those lines. She's having one of those childish days that kids sometimes have.
2398158 One day she might learn to keep her big mouth shut, but she'll choose the worst possible moment to do it just so she can say "I told you so" as the nuke goes off.
2399104 That'll be the next chapter. I was going to introduce them in this one but it got way, way to crowded.
And now I've added a translation. It's approximate, as these things always are.
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Thanks for clearing that up, I was really curious about ages since Velvet foaling really pushed the time scale in my head out of whack.
I am sure it will come up in the future but I must wonder how titles and such will transfer with Twilight being the first born filly and Crincile being barren. Thank goodness her grandparents are not around.
Good chapter.
Made me want to break out the flamethrower.
"STAR SPARKLE? IT IS YOUR TIME."
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HE COMES
I guess I'm in the minority, in that I actually like Star Sparkle and would find her fun to be around. Maybe not for more than a few days, but at least for a while. Though, I can see why Twilight would have a problem with her.
Twilight fights dragons, Immortal gods, Embodiments of Chaos, Eldrich Horrors and such, but her own birth mother has her quivering under her bed as an emotional basket case! What has this mare done to Twilight all these years that would have had her avoiding making friends at all until episode 1-1?
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Oh... my... Luna... It suddenly makes PERFECT sense why Twilight freaks out at the very thought of upsetting the biggest authority figure in her life, Celestia. Whatever Star Sparkle did to her through her life, seems to have mentally carried over into her relationship with her teacher, Celestia, even if 'Tia never would do such things.
*angrily snorts and stamps forehooves* "Star Sparkle! I only hope you have met your match in this human you disparage!
So I loved the chapter. I love how you write Star, her personality and how she speaks and acts. Maye its because I've known parents like that before, but it everything about her feels totally believable and relateable to the real world. The conversation with Zecora was brilliant as well, so props on all that. Also, I love how you write the zebra pigeon speak, its really neat how you throw in something that's sorta kinda based on something in RL that not many would think to include in a work like this.
I was however a little bothered by the fact that we the readers don't get to see Lero and Twilight meet the rest of Star's herd. When this chapter started I was super excited that all of them were visiting Twilight and Lero, but towards the middle of the story, I could tell that the Zecora part wasn't even close to finished and we were running out of goddamn story here. I was like... fuck wait no! Oh goddamn it!
So I was like "Whatever, for fuck sake..." fine so we don't get to see Star's herd interact in a casual setting with Lero. Yeah it wasn't important to the chapter... sure it had nothing to do with what you were trying to show us about Star and all that. I get it, I really do, but I still really wanted to see some slice-of-lifey stuff pre-wedding where Lero meets the family. Oh well, whatever. Good chapter sir, guess I'll take what crumbs I can get when it comes to Leroverse stuff. We are quickly running out of usable material for the setting, thank god this fic is not only still on-going, but also beautifully written with all the drunken sarcasm one could hope for.
2410081 Oh don't you worry, they'll get plenty of time in the next chapter. Frankly the only way they could interact in a casual setting is if Star is out of the picture for a short while, otherwise they'll just be at each other's throats all the time.
Also it had taken me so long to write this that I had to take a break from the setting before I went crazy.
Next chapter... I promise.
I am actually hoping you will update this even before we get any more The Xenophile's Guide to Equestria stories:)
I like the complexities of family politics you show here, herd life cant be all smiles and sunshine.
... A dainty... what? Is that seriously the name of a dessert? That must lead to some amusing misunderstandings.
2615375 Danties are what posh people call those teeny tiny cakes in teeny tiny little paper things.
practicing* Also, that sounds oddly similar to my own style... Least until the stress got so bad that I just gave up on writing.
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I've spent quite a fair amount of time in high society, and to be honest, I've never heard them being called that. Just cakes.
I really like your fic, probably the most interesting family life world building in the fandom.
Welp, time to turn off Night Mode! Phooey.