Star Sparkle. Accomplished author, diplomat, historian and mother to one of the most famous mares in Equestrian history. She has no regrets, but she does have a problem: she ran out of gin last night. And her daughter is marrying an ape.
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Very, very interesting...I still haven't got the faintest idea of what passes through her head, but at least now we know she actually has feelings...
And there's that enigmatic sister again.
Good update - thanks. Star's interactions with her daughter always leave me a little bit heartbroken.
One minor error: She even managed to think him should read 'thank', I think.
An interesting look into the past. It was nice to see some interaction between her and her foals. One thing I did notice was that Indy was referred to as having wings, as in plural, when I was almost certain it was mentioned before that she had lost one.
Edit: my mistake, it's not totally gone, still has a stump with some feathers.
At this point I'm beginning to wonder if Lero meeting Twilight's family is going to be a seperate one-shot story.
Yeah, you can never go wrong with a midstory title drop.
In any case, I loved seeing Star realize she's enmeshed in a massive social construct. Star Sparkle, perhaps the world's most antisocial pony, forced to schmooze for the sake of her passion and her department. And as we all know, nothing can stop the schmooze.
The exchange with Long was most intriguing, and I can't help but wonder if there's a crystal pony or two in Orange Quartz's ancestry. Star's acceptance speech was wonderfully sincere, loaded with enough subtext that I'm surprised the Literature department didn't collapse in a frothing heap.
And then there are the kids. You nailed Star's disconnection with them. Her daughter is a complete stranger, and she doesn't even seem to register that.
Eagerly looking forward to more.
She's been chasing this dream for a long time.
Fascinating how Star is affected so emotionally by males, and sexually by both genders (especially pegasi), and yet Twilight doesn't fit appropriately into any of those categories, so she receives only apathy and mild curiosity at things Star should already know as her mother.
It's not really clear yet whether Star's motive for trying to include Twilight into her latest upcoming adventure is purely from a desire to succeed, or from a desire to get closer to Twilight, or something in between. You've hidden that pretty well, and I'm really interested to find out how that plays out. Maybe there is room for regret as time and observation wedge themselves into the heart she pretty clearly guards in favor of her dreams, and makes a hollow space for it.
Should there be a period there since it is short for "Saint"?
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Extreme repetition.
Does this need to be capitalized?
I want to know more about this "sister" that is spoken of.
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think you very much, I happy you spotted those.
4228070 Sometimes it feels like a whole lifetime.
4228395 Aye, she's a sucker for a pretty face, is our Star.
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There is no way the place will meet her expectations, the legend has just grown too much in her mind and taken so long to find.
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I would go with the desire to succeed, because if she cared about Twilight she would remember that her daughter was in the process to get married.
Los pegasus? Isn't it Las pegasus as stated in the official map? img2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20130403195243/mlp/images/c/cb/Map_of_Equestria_April_2013.jpg
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No problem Mr. Donkey, I'll keep doing it for later chapters.
Should probably have a "can deliver" or something to that effect.
Please be aware that Independent Path is engaged in doublethink.
For Star Sparkle, it must be a horrible feeling to have to court the support of others to pursue dreams, though she's showing she's willing to thread some unpleasant needles to see it done. The university system is her stepping stone, but it's also the stone around her neck.
After I finished this chapter, I had to sit back and think. I asked myself what the pony side of it—the fanfic side—contributes to the intrigue. I mean, the plot is rich enough, the characters dynamic and believable enough, but I was struggling to identify why it couldn't just as easily have been human characters in a human world using human terms. In other words, I asked myself what makes it pony, aside from the fact that we've been assured it's pony characters and it's being read on a pony fanfiction site. Well, here's what I came up with. It's less apparent in this chapter, and I admit it's been a while since I read the earlier ones, but at last I realized that the pony side of it comes through in the herd-based society established in the larger worldbuilding Archonix is using. Star's family life is uniquely pony, and so it's giving the story the uniquely pony bent it needs to avoid just being a humans-with-hooves tale. I'm sharing this because I momentarily lost sight of that, and was hoping to head off any potential bemusement from anyone else getting the same notion in their heads.
Correct me if I'm wrong, but isn't it "mister" Smarty Pants, not "miss"?
I can't help but feel that Star Sparkle's speech there at the end was complete sarcasm.
"Truly I could not have climbed to where I am without the dozens of my colleagues who carried me here."
Read: "Dozens of my colleagues whose backs I stepped on to get to my position."
"Thanks to you, I find myself amongst the collected relics of thousands of years of history. From here I can see the entire world, and all of its beauty and splendour, just as my predecessor saw it every single day of her tenure to this ancient institution."
Read: "Thanks to you, I find myself mouldering here among the collected junk of history, watching the world through the window instead of being out in it, just as my predecessor had to every single day of her tenure."
"I cannot express the strength of my feelings toward the faculty of this university, nor to the individuals who propelled me to this great and gilded height, and I can only conclude by reminding you all that each and every pony present tonight is responsible in some small way for the position I now occupy."
Read: "I cannot express the strength of my hatred toward the faculty of this university, nor toward the individuals who stuck me in this gilded cage, and I can only only conclude by reminding each and everypony of you present are responsible in some small way for sticking me in this position."
"To each of you," she said, once silence had fallen again. "And to the future I must now face."
Read: "F*** you all!"
"Belong" should be "belonged" to match tense with the rest of the sentence.
Hah! Title drop! I see what you did there...
The context suggests that "lets" should "let's".
Same here. "Lets" should be "let's" to indicate the contraction for "let us".
You're missing ending punctuation on this sentence.
4227718 I missed this comment. How annoying.
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Early versions of the chapter made it a lot more obvious.
Yeah, for an academic she can be very dense. If she were real I'd want to just grab her and shake her until her brain started working properly.
4235597 Thank you good sir! Nice to see you're still along for the ride.
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I kinda wanna throw out a prediction for where the Great Tswana is... it would probably be a kick in the gut for Star if it were true.
4271111 I kinda want to know what you think.
That was, beautifully spiteful. A perfect example of Star's excellent ability to say multiple things with the same words.
I'm also rather curious about the spell Shining was about to cast when Star tripped over Twilight. It's a very interesting scene but I kinda wish I'd known more about it. Perhaps from Shining or Twi's perspective.
This is kinda outlandish and it's probably debunked by Zecora referring to the place as far away, but here is my reasoning.
1. Zecora doesn't outright say where it is because she doesn't think Star would believe her, but she has been there. So it could still exist.
2. The zebras she was thinking about in the first chapter say they live where they do because 'it was the will of the gods that they do so'. So maybe they didn't leave by choice. Zebras don't need to hunt, and people would likely live in a fort they had access to for shelter if nothing else. Either it's somewhere that you'd need to support it with farming villages like Canterlot, or they lost the territory.
3. The scroll. Star says it's to the Diarchy but the way it's written makes me think Celestia has already moved out of the Everfree, and it looked like Star stopped Twilight from finishing the address. Twilight commented that it was an odd address, so maybe it's because Canterlot wasn't a place yet.
Star also said she didn't expect any correspondence between Equestria and this fallen empire because of the distance, so the capital could be closer than she expected. Twilight points out the similarities between a word meant to signify a strong leader and the moon.
I'm thinking that the empire backed Nightmare Moon, and when she lost they were banished to the more unforgiving jungle. Celestia could've let them fade from public knowledge the same way she let Nightmare Moon become a fairy tale.
This is all based on the assumption that the scroll was meant for one of the princesses, and if it was why does Zecora have it? I'm probably overthinking this but it's fun to do.
4274466 Interesting. Very interesting... I like the way you're thinking.
>people
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4312001 They've used people on the show.
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I love you, Regidar. Don't change.