After a fruitful day of gem gathering with Spike, things should have been business as usual for Rarity, but a chance encounter with a down on his luck stallion changes her fate. Will she give him the key to happiness or selfishly charge towards her own dreams?
Inspired by the Thirty Minute Writing Prompt #59
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This is incredible! You nailed Rarity's character, described the scene perfectly, the whole thing was just... perfect! And for whatever reason I kind of imagined Button being the brown stallion and Sweetie belle being his "love.." then I thought, Rarity's gonna be mad.
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I agree, you really got the characters down pat, from Rarity's somewhat reluctant generosity to Spike's blunt sarcasm. Diamond Eyes felt a bit flat, but then he wasn't the focus of the story. If I had a true complaint, it's that we never learned a whole lot about the stallion himself beyond his "wuv, twoo wuv."
Not a whole lot was accomplished, but then Slice of Life is like that. Great job, author.
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Thank you so much for the favs and watches and undeservingly kind words man, it means a lot to me. This was originally only supposed to be a simple writing experiment where I focused only on staying cannon, so it really makes me glad to see readers picking up on that. I'm also very intrigued by your take on the brown stallion. When I first wrote this, Button Mash hadn't really blown up yet, so I pictured him as generic Dr. Whooves clone #infinity, but given time and distance, thats a nice twist to it.
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Thank YOU for the kind words as well. Like I said above, it was mostly a test of staying cannon with Rarity and Spike, even to the exclusion of the other two. I see Diamond Eyes as a NPC in a video game and the brown stallion as more of a vauge idea of 'true love' which is cool in that 'true love' means a lot of different things to different people, so by leaving him a bit bland I'd hoped that people would fill in the blanks for themselves.
But I do appreciate you bringing this to my attention as I can now work on that in the future. Thank you so much. :)
"Hey, Rarity All this started with that Gem he picked for her isn't it?"
"Why yes Spikey, It is"
"What about that Fire Ruby?"
Spike!
All spot on characters nice tale told.