Life in Ponyville is perfect. Foals play and laugh, special someponies love, and everypony is happy... almost everypony, that is. Scootaloo meets a unicorn filly in the park that seems to be around the same age as her. Who is this filly? How come Scootaloo never saw her around before? Will she become a good friend and maybe even join the Cutie Mark Crusaders? All these questions are in Scootaloo's head, they don't let her sleep at night. Most importantly, why is this strange, new pony so insistent on staying hidden?
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Chapters (1)
Good start!
My only complaint (which is extremely minor) is that you make different characters speak in a single paragraph. You have to make a new paragraph whenever a character speaks or thinks. Other than that, good story!
1847287 Thanks so much for the feedback! It's my first story, and not just my first fan fiction, so I'm not that good yet
I'll try to make new paragraphs for when different characters speak in the next chapter. Thanks again!
Can't wait to see where you take this.